kikilolo1
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| 11 Sep 2011 12:03 PM |
she runs and runs but the rope catches her ankle anyways and she are pulled into the darkness screaming
You are stranded in the Amazon Rainforest but it wasnt by accident. The government rigged the modes of transportation you were on so you'd be trapped on this island. You all have a special ability (note: NOT A POWER, something like lock picking and stuff. Not supernatural). There are secret caves all around the island and secret traps. The goal of their experiment? To find out who is the strongest. To find out who they can use. As their weapon. Geneticly altered beasts roam the shores, fires, winds, rain and no shelter. Will you survive long enough to find a way out?
CS Name: @ge: Gender: Ability: Appearence: Peronality: Bio:(optional)
RULES no cursing standard roblox rules keep romance PG have fun no godmodding no mary/gary-sues you must be accepted by me or an admin.
YOU WILL START IN VARIOUS PARTS OF THE ISLAND JUST WAKING UP FROM YOUR CRASH/SHIPWRECK. YOU KNOW NOTHING ABOUT WHATS GOING ON. |
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banshee7
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| 11 Sep 2011 12:27 PM |
(1: Grammar. 2: The Amazon isn't a island. Study. 3: Spelling. Check ALL of it, even if you hve to search it on wikipedia. If it's only one or two words, then it's fine. 4: Punctuation. You seem to have a lack of it here. 5: Capitalization. On the RULES list, there's only two, for a age rating (PG). 6: A better, longer, more involved plot. The current one is pretty much a cliché, and also unrealistic. Also, alot of things on the island are there without explanation, it seems.
I suggest you rewrite this thread until it meets these standards. That way, more people will join.) |
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banshee7
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| 11 Sep 2011 12:29 PM |
| (I said hve instead of have on the guideline about spelling. Ironic. I really need a better keyboard, but laptop keyboards are built in.) |
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kikilolo1
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| 11 Sep 2011 12:30 PM |
| (thanks for the suggestions but i know exactly what I'm talking about. I know the amazon isnt an island and I'm sorry if I interperted it that way I didnt mean to write shipwreck I wasnt thinking. You misspelled have. I dont know if you meant to do it to mock me or not. Unrealistic plots are what makes a wide range for imagination in rp. I've studied the amazon a year straight and am a straight A history/geography student. Thanks again for the suggestions though.) |
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banshee7
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| 11 Sep 2011 12:35 PM |
(Latepost on the part abot 'hve' btw. And you're welcome :D)
(I was gonna say *Is helpful* right here but thought it would annoy people. The thing is I'm not sure it makes sense.) |
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seabass14
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| 11 Sep 2011 12:48 PM |
CS Name: Sebastian @ge: 20 Gender: M Ability: Free running(Parkour) Appearence: About 5'11 with curly brown hair and storm grey eyes. He wears a purple shirt and jeans and running shoes. Peronality: A sarcastic jerk to people he doesnt know. Bio: N/A
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kikilolo1
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| 11 Sep 2011 12:52 PM |
CS Name:Kate Jonson @ge: 19 Gender: female Ability: she can hack almost any computer. Too bad their in the rainforest. Appearence: straight blonde hair and gray eyes. Tall and thin wearing a black tank top black skinny jeans and combat boots. Peronality: she is sarcastic to people she hates but is generally a nice person. Bio:(optional) N/A too lazy to make one right now
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kikilolo1
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Vakiton
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| 11 Sep 2011 12:55 PM |
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Name: Xavier @ge: 28 Gender: Male Ability: Can punch very hard Appearance: Ripped Cubs baseball shirt, Cargo pants, worn nikes, About 6'4 with shaggy brown hair, dark brown eyes, and light brown skin Personality: Shy, very nice. If messed with, he will get rough Bio: N/A |
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kikilolo1
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kikilolo1
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| 11 Sep 2011 01:00 PM |
| two more people and we can start |
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seabass14
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kikilolo1
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coppermop
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| 11 Sep 2011 01:14 PM |
| (Why does everybody join really short plots? I make good plots and nobody joins. It's annoying. I guess word walls are intimidating to most people.) |
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seabass14
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| 11 Sep 2011 01:15 PM |
| (Yeah. I try to stay away from the extremely detailed rp's and tend to join the short and simple ones. Unless a friend of mine made the long one.) |
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kikilolo1
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| 11 Sep 2011 01:16 PM |
| (I dont know I made a word wall one and it almost has 100 pages by now. It took me a long time to get a successful one. Keep working at it. YOU CAN DO IT. I'll join one of yours if you tell me which it is) |
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seabass14
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banshee7
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| 11 Sep 2011 01:25 PM |
(@coppermop Ikr? I hate how everyone avoids those. Exept once I made one that needed two posts for everything and people actually joined... But it died because those people weren't on anything very often.
Hey, wanna join a new RP I made? It's called 'Heat.' and it has a long plot too.) |
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coppermop
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| 11 Sep 2011 01:40 PM |
(Well, these are medium length, but here are the links to two of mine. http://www.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=54396501 and
http://www.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=54642559 |
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coppermop
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| 11 Sep 2011 02:36 PM |
(@Banshee
Gimme da link. :D) |
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banshee7
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| 11 Sep 2011 04:26 PM |
(@coppermop http://www.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=54652558) |
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