IcyBlu
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| 26 Aug 2011 01:19 PM |
I stared up at the man, fear on my face. I struggled against the rope, and could barely see. All I knew, was that I was kidnapped, and in an abandoned warehouse, filled with old junk, like doorknobs and locks. “What do you want!?!?” I shout angrily. “I want…your death…” he simply said, and eerie tone in his voice. My blood ran cold. I begin to shiver. “My…death?” I ask. He began to laugh. “Yes. You are needed to be dead…you are too powerful…” he stopped talking and looked coldly at me. Too powerful? I’m just a 17 year old girl! I wanted to shout. But I couldn’t. I was frozen in fear. He smiles. “Say goodbye…to your life…” he pulls out a sword, that gleamed in the remaining light. I begin to scream. In one quick lash, he stabs my stomach. “Goodbye, young hero…” he whispers. He walks away silently, then disappears into the shadows. I see blood stream down my legs, and a pool of blood forming on the floor. I feel the warm, sticky feel of the blood. I almost hurled at the sight and smell. Cold, salty tears ran down my pale cheeks. I was dying...with no one to help... “Help…” I whisper. Then my eyes closed, and my world shut down forever. At least, that's what SHOULD have happened...
PLEASE say if this is good. I know this was a short chapter. Continue or not? Credit to WickedFrenchFry for the title. |
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IcyBlu
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| 26 Aug 2011 01:20 PM |
| This is actually the prolouge, by the way. |
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Jigajig
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IcyBlu
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Xilirite
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| 26 Aug 2011 01:21 PM |
It's good. No wonder you're RWG. Also, unless you cant be online, I'm inviting you to a party at 3, for the RWG meeting. |
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IcyBlu
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| 26 Aug 2011 01:23 PM |
| I might be on, depending on if my bro remembers his turn, which i'm doubting. And thanks, I just wish it was longer. |
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| 26 Aug 2011 01:32 PM |
I like it. Blood and gore galore xD
Good job Icy, I can always depend on you for good stories.
Im new to RWG, just passed the test like today. May I join the meeting? |
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IcyBlu
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| 26 Aug 2011 02:00 PM |
Chapter 1 I groggily opened my eyes, and blinked. I was…still in the warehouse? I shake my head and stand up. I looked down and noticed I was standing in a pool of dried blood. Dried blood? But I just…I glance down, and see no wound, whatsoever. I shiver, and sit on the cold, hard floor. I’m not a ghost though…Maybe I am…I stand up, and race to the door. “THACK” I fall backward, and rub my head. That hurt…I stand back up, and walk to the many shelves filled with all sorts of junk. I gently pick up an old looking clock, and carefully examine it. It’s hands were on the numbers, 3 and 9. Wait, 3:45? That’s when…
--FLASHBACK— I calmly reading my favorite book, Legends, when I heard a knocking at the door. I remember reading the clokc, it saying 3:45, PM. I was home alone, my parents out for a nice evening. I thought it was my older brother, Ty, returning from baseball practice. “Cmon in Ty!” I call out. I hear the door open slowly, and continue to read. I hear my bedroom door open. “What?” I ask, annoyed to be bothered. I hear no answer. I look up. “Look Ty, I kn-“ I stop and stare in horror. A strange man, with a twine of rope, was smiling at me. “Hello Casey. Time to go.” I shake my head furiously. “NO!” He stops smiling. “Well then, I guess I’ll have to use this…” He holds up a baseball bat, and smacks it against my head. I pass out instantly. --END OF FLASHBACK--
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IcyBlu
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| 26 Aug 2011 04:42 PM |
Chapter 2
I shudder at the memory. I quickly race my hand against a shelf. A fine layer of dust covered it. How long have I been…dead…? I race over to the door and pull on the knob. It wouldn’t budge. I try again. Nothing. Great. He locked me in here. I sigh. Better look for another way out…I calmly stand up and look above and below me. I do not see a trapdoor, or a window. I’m stuck. I sit down, and wrap my arms around my knees. Great. I look up again, and see a mirror. But I don’t see my reflection. That’s…odd…I stand back up, and walk over. I pull the musty sheet off of the part of it, and stare in amazement. I couldn’t see myself in the mirror. Maybe I’m a vampire? I take a quick look at myself, But I’m exactly how I looked before I died, and don’t have a craving for blood. I do notice something odd though. I’m a bit paler than before. Like, WAY paler. A thousand thoughts raced across my mind. What am I? Maybe…no…its not possible…Maybe I’m dead, but alive. I never crossed the bridge. I knew as soon as I thought it, it was true. My soul never left my body. I’m…alive, in a strange way. I was overjoyed, but instantly realized some downsides. For one, I am invisible. Two, I can’t go through walls, and such. Three…I would never fully cross the bridge between Life, and Death.
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IcyBlu
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| 26 Aug 2011 04:50 PM |
| Thanks :D But the chapters are kinda short... |
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| 26 Aug 2011 04:51 PM |
Icy, you always know how to hook a reader. :P
Great story! BRAVO, ICY! BRAVO! |
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| 26 Aug 2011 04:52 PM |
| It's ok :3 Just keep going :D |
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Moltak118
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| 26 Aug 2011 04:52 PM |
| Epic Icy.... I'm actually writing a book right nao. |
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IcyBlu
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| 26 Aug 2011 04:55 PM |
| Thanks guys! Writing chapter three now! |
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IcyBlu
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IcyBlu
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| 26 Aug 2011 05:24 PM |
Chapter 3
In frustration, I threw the clock against the cement wall. It smashes to pieces. But I do notice a small crack appear. Finally! A way out! I smile slightly to myself. I’m going home. I rush to random shelves, grabbing pieces of junk I find, chucking them at the wall, on the same spot. Clocks, footballs, keys, whatever. As long as it was hard, I threw it. Eventually, a hole big enough for me to crawl through appears. I smile, satisfied. Finally! I wipe the sweat off my forehead, and crawl through. What waits for me o the other side, is yet to be seen.
Sorry this was short! It seemed like a good cliffhanger.
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IcyBlu
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| 26 Aug 2011 05:46 PM |
Chapter 4
I climbed out and was amazed at what I saw. Yeah, that’s what I WANTED to happen. But no. It was exactly the way it was when I died. Same trees, same people…Now THAT is weird…I walked down my old neighborhood street. I saw my friends crying, and talking. I wandered over. “Hey guys! I’m no-“ But stopped, remembering I wasn’t visible to them. “The man…I know…James Solva…” They chattered about sadly. Wait, James Solva? THAT must’ve been the man who kille-…sorta killed me! I shuddered. I must have my revenge…I walk away, and head to the nearest library. I need to kill him…or ask why he thought I was powerful…I’m only 17!
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Xilirite
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| 26 Aug 2011 05:58 PM |
Clap Clap palC Keep writing, I want MOAR |
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| 26 Aug 2011 05:58 PM |
| That's so sad D,: Imagine never being able to talk to your friends and family again DX |
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Xilirite
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| 26 Aug 2011 06:01 PM |
| IcyBlu, make that the focus-concentrate on what it's like to not be able to interact with the world at all, not about revenge. |
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IcyBlu
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IcyBlu
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