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| 17 Aug 2011 05:50 AM |
SilentSwords : Owen0202... Bring me some Lemonade...
Owen0202 : I'm not a Bartender...
SilentSwords : Soz...
Owen0202 : Heard about Sonic's Clones ...
SilentSwords : No...
Owen0202 : We now Know that SONICTHEHEDGEHOGXX was XDHAPPYXD and now...
SilentSwords : Vaktus ?!?!?
Owen0202 : Now Vaktus has 10 Personal Clones and his Clone Army is becoming Big...
Owen0202 : From his 1.4k Vaktovians... Now he has 100k Skilled Vaktovian Clones...
Narrator : The Vaktovian Army has Started the Invasion...
SuperSuny : Sir, Vaktovian Troops are Attacking Outpost Indigo... They are Clones... !!
SilentSwords : Call our ShockTroopers !!! Owen0202 Quick!!!
Owen0202 : Ok Sir...
SuperSuny : Oh and... There is Vaktus... This could be our Great Chance...
Owen0202 : Ok I will send 2 Officers in evry Server...
Narrator : Meanwhile... In the Base... Vaktus was Leading the Mass Attack
In Outpost Indigo...
Vaktus : Full Attack... !! NO MERCY !!!
Sniper 1 : SilentSwords, Sir... I have The Target Localized... I will fire at your Signal...
Sniper 1 : Sir, There are 2 Vaktus'es now??
SilentSwords : Shoot... Shoot...
Sniper 1 : * Shoots * Bullseye !!
Sniper 1 : Ok Ai-
SilentSwords : What Happened?? Respond... Respond...
Owen0202 : The Target that was Killed is a Clone... As the Other Target May be..
Sniper 2 : Sniper 1 Is down...
[ TO BE CONTINUED ] |
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| 17 Aug 2011 05:51 AM |
this isn't a story
it's biased and untrue
and it's not even fiction
because they're no action/elaborate scenes just
"blah blah blah blah ohai sonic blah blah blah"
you get where im getting
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| 17 Aug 2011 05:52 AM |
| This is just a bunch of dialect. |
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| 17 Aug 2011 05:53 AM |
| I am Just Starting... This is just a Sneak Peek ... Anyway... If you want to Enter... PM me... |
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| 17 Aug 2011 05:54 AM |
If this is a sneak-peek just don't publish it.
-Pukes-
Sneak-peeks are meant to be the best bit! |
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| 17 Aug 2011 05:55 AM |
| Nope... This is just a Little bit about the Story... From Chapter 2 and More it will become cool... |
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| 17 Aug 2011 05:56 AM |
| I'm not even going to attempt to read chapter 2, I gave up after the first two lines here after SS goes "Soz"... |
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| 17 Aug 2011 05:57 AM |
Want to know what a REAL story should be?
http://www.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=47306372
And sneak peeks should be JUST like that.
Prologue = Sneak Peek
Yes. |
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| 17 Aug 2011 05:57 AM |
| That is why you diden't get what this is about... Anyway this is one of my First Stories... |
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| 17 Aug 2011 05:58 AM |
Dude
the link I gave you
WAS my first story
if i can be sucessful
u can
owait
im col |
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| 17 Aug 2011 05:59 AM |
| You said later it wasen't your First Story... I have read it... Not so Bad Story... It was Cool... But you needed more Action and more Dialogs in the First Bits... |
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| 17 Aug 2011 06:02 AM |
-Facepalm-
You do know that's the number one rated story in roblox
right |
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| 17 Aug 2011 06:06 AM |
| Nope that WAS the best Rated Story.. The best rated story is about the UAF Red Army... Anyway... Yes cool Story u made there... |
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| 17 Aug 2011 06:06 AM |
link plz
btw
when i meant roblox story
i meant
"Roblox Multi Superclans Story + Most Original"
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| 17 Aug 2011 06:08 AM |
| Oh... Well it has 3 Superclans in it... The UAF Red Army Story... Really it's a Chain of Storys... Ill post the Link to one of them |
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| 17 Aug 2011 06:10 AM |
| Blood : Link here : http://www.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=52617082 |
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| 17 Aug 2011 06:11 AM |
I inspired him
shortest story ever
only
8-9 rating
congrats? |
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| 17 Aug 2011 06:15 AM |
Ok Blood... How will you rate my Story?
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| 17 Aug 2011 06:17 AM |
4.5/10
That's better than most storys on roblox
too much dialog. :( |
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| 17 Aug 2011 06:23 AM |
| @ Blood... : Should I make Chapter 1 ?? I think this story may fail... |
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| 17 Aug 2011 06:34 AM |
Chapter 2
Location : WIJ – Castle Cobalt Time - Date : 10:35 PM - Unknown
I was Shooting a Raider in the Base when I heard something in the Bushes… I took out my Machete and Chopped them… No bodies… I thought it was the Wind… I turned back… to my Office… To charge my REX Chaincannon… There were 2 Guards… One was Laughing… But the other… fell into a pool of blood… Within a second even the other Guard died… I saw the Assasin on the gate of the Base… He shot my hand and blood dropped on my REX… I took out with my other hand a Pistol and Shot him down… When I went near him I saw a Sensor… A Beeping Metal Card Attached to his Jacket… As I touched it with a Finger… A gigant Explosion blew up the Base and I got thrown into the sea… Against some Rocks… Facing a Drowning Death…
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| 17 Aug 2011 07:49 AM |
| Too much dialect and we probably won't go to war with VAK due to our ally group Acera which has the leader DisSoft that is in VAK as well. |
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| 17 Aug 2011 07:54 AM |
| @ Rovert : Go to the WIJ Wall... If anyone Calls for Backup it is or a NeonSword Raid or a VAK Raid... Otherwise... Just a noob that can't fight... |
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