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| 06 Aug 2011 12:28 AM |
OMG
SO
MUCH
DIALOG
SDAJFDJEDFHAJ
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skydude33
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| 06 Aug 2011 12:29 AM |
Do you want to know a real story?
Read this.
http://www.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=47085272
Equality between dialog and action.
With a bit of suspense. |
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jumjum27
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| 06 Aug 2011 12:31 AM |
| Continue this story! it's good! You should include some minor APN in it too, not just admirals and well known captains. Just some advice. |
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| 06 Aug 2011 12:31 AM |
Then why do you call it a story if it's a play script?
A story is what I wrote, where it has equal amount of dialog followed with action and suspense.
This isn't a story if it doesn't have that combination. |
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jumjum27
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| 06 Aug 2011 12:34 AM |
| This is still a story, but it's written in a way that would make this incredibly easy to translate into a full blown short movie. Nuff said. |
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| 06 Aug 2011 12:37 AM |
I have never read a book that's play script style.
EVER.
oh, and H@rry P0tt3r was a book but made into a movie that wasn't play script. |
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| 06 Aug 2011 12:42 AM |
OH
So you've seen a story that goes like this?
[Chapter 1]
The Painting
John: Hello, Jennifer! Do you like my painting?
Jennifer: Totally! Did you use the waterbrush style for the sky backround?
John: Uh.. Er.. Yea... I did! Right.
Jennifer: I got to go, cya tomorrow!
John: You too.
Do you EVER seen a book like that?
No.
But, I guess this is decent. |
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jumjum27
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| 06 Aug 2011 12:44 AM |
| Can we stop talking and let short write the next chapter? |
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| 06 Aug 2011 01:06 AM |
| IMA TELL YOU WHAT YOU'RE GOING TO DO!I dont troll APN friends.I bunneh them!GIVE ME A GOOD ROLL OR I GO CRAZY ON YOU!. |
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| 06 Aug 2011 01:09 AM |
| I dont want a "What are we going to do with him.?"I dont care wetherI am a Captain or not.I do not call ethan sir >:O I call him ethan :3 AND IMA BUNNEH!NOT A TROLL J00 CRAZY RETAWD! |
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| 06 Aug 2011 01:11 AM |
| I fight.I go to the forts.I fight.I fight. >:O I AM EPIK DEAL WITH IT!THEY STILL THINK I AM A CAPTAIN (Cause I still am one.You just dont know it yet >:D) |
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