Ichigo97
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| 31 Jul 2011 05:11 AM |
OKAY SO IT'S ANOTHER POEM I really need to make a thread for all of my poems, lul. BUT ANYWAY Tell me what you think <3
It's another long night He's standing outside the door As she sits there crying On the bathroom floor.
Bruises cover her arms, Her face and her legs "Please don't hurt me!" She cries and she begs.
He tears the door down She cowers in fear And he looks angry As he draws near.
She shakes and she shivers "Please leave me alone!" He grabs her roughly Breaking her wrist bone.
She let's out a cry As the pain goes up her arm She had told him no So he would cause her harm
He was an abusive man But she hadn't known Back in the days When she'd always pick up the phone
He made her fall And she loved him so much She couldn't live without him She'd melt at his soft touch
But now that touch Had turned painful and rough And all his words Seemed to be gruff
He constantly told her That she was ugly and fat And when she felt confident He'd always attack
He made her feel Like she could have no one else So he could have her All for himself
He beats her as she cries Enjoying her pain He thinks she deserves this Because he is not humane
When he's done beating her He just calls her names Saying he's sick Of playing these stupid games.
He leaves her alone And she sits there and cries Hurt but her hope Still hasn't died.
What kind of man would hurt The woman he "Loves?" He calls her his everything But her mistakes are something he's intolerant of
If you ever find yourself In a situation like this Please leave the man Because the pain he causes isn't something you can dismiss. |
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Ichigo97
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| 31 Jul 2011 05:56 AM |
| YOU GUYS KNOW YOU WANT TO READ IT |
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HV3VH
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| 31 Jul 2011 06:01 AM |
*finishes reading* This is good... *sees comment* *clicks reply* 'Pfft no i don't.' |
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HV3VH
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| 31 Jul 2011 06:06 AM |
| Your poems are painful to read... i mean seriously. The main character gets beat up, ITS ALL HORRIBLE. GAH. MY RANDOM SIDE DISSAPROVES THIS POEM, BUT MY SERIOUS SIDE approves of this message. |
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| 31 Jul 2011 06:10 AM |
| Off topic,this is gonna be mercillesly pruned by moderators. |
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| 31 Jul 2011 06:36 AM |
| Eww, vortex scum. Poems are like stories, stuupid. |
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Exil
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| 31 Jul 2011 06:39 AM |
| I like, a little hard to read but a good poem all in all. |
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Exil
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| 31 Jul 2011 06:41 AM |
| By a little hard to read I mean it is hard to read some one getting beat up, and in such detail. |
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Ichigo97
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| 31 Jul 2011 07:35 AM |
Haha, I have happy poems tooo D:
...I just haven't posted them yet. xP
And I meant for this to be painful to read kind of, so it could maybe get across to some people that this is a very real and serious problem o3o |
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Exil
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| 31 Jul 2011 10:03 AM |
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how painful can you get, I already knew abuse is a problem |
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River777
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| 31 Jul 2011 10:17 AM |
| It's wonderful. Very honest and brutal, and upfront about humanity's problems. |
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Ichigo97
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cpcrks84
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| 31 Jul 2011 10:36 AM |
| One side me thinks it's creepy as hell, but the other side says it's well written. |
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River777
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| 31 Jul 2011 10:37 AM |
| I don't think it's creepy. But then again, I'm desensitized to creepy. |
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Ichigo97
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| 31 Jul 2011 11:23 AM |
| It's not creepy, but brutal. |
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cpcrks84
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| 31 Jul 2011 11:23 AM |
| Thats sort of what I meant :3 |
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firekj
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| 31 Jul 2011 11:27 AM |
AWESOME POEM."Now kids, what's the moral of today's episode?"
"ALWAYS READ PEOMS!Riiight."
LOL) |
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Ichigo97
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Ichigo97
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Ichigo97
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firekj
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Ichigo97
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Ichigo97
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