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Operation Munitio (alternate history, story)

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Phsyco9016 is not online. Phsyco9016
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24 Jul 2011 11:52 PM
Before I start this, I'd like to let you guys know a few things about this.

First off, I am literally re-writing more than 1,000 years of European and world history, and then adding the future onto it, then adding sci-fi into the the changed history, so forgive me if everything I do is not exactly possible, historically accurate, or makes any sense, I will tie off the loose ends in terms of what doesn't make sense, and if something doesn't fit into history or the capabilities of the nations I am using in my story, live with it, it's part of the >>alternate history<< thing in the title.

Secondly, if you really want to make a character for the story, send me a PM describing what your character is, which side he/she is on, and what your character adds to the story. (Does the person lead an army against the main character/nation, stage a military coupe, etc etc.)

Third, I do plan on making this a lengthy, complex story. This will most certainly be one of the most detailed stories on this forum, and quite possibly the most lengthy. and if I forget SPAM MY INBOX CONSTANTLY UNTIL I GET BACK TO WORK!!!!!!! I am serious.

Thanks for putting up with this intro instead of a first chapter, I just wanted to make sure I got that across.
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Xilirite is not online. Xilirite
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24 Jul 2011 11:57 PM
If this is not awesome, I will eat your face and make a book out of it.
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Phsyco9016 is not online. Phsyco9016
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25 Jul 2011 12:29 AM
Operation Munitio,
Part One, "One Critical Moment"
Chapter One:

You know, I really should start letting things take their course, and maybe I will, but I do love this tiny, remarkable little planet dearly. For thousands of years I watched this rock, as it developed out of sight of the powers of this universe for millennium after millennium. Developing sentient life before it could be stopped by anyone. Not even the Dractians knew what was happening on this planet, I had always managed to draw their attention away. But unfortunately, that did not work forever, once China invented cannons, and the cities of Rome grew, it aroused their suspicions. They knew that hive-centric bugs did not develop explosives. And that wild packs of beasts did not create perfect arches and amphitheaters. At first I managed to draw their attention away from my little jewel with supernovas and invasions, but I knew that this would not hold them.

The Dractians, a robotic race of aliens that only know to do one thing, dominate, were on their way. My mistakes were about to destroy the best thing that ever happened to my creation and billions of their years of work. Oh if I could have intervened without the others noticing the universe I had created I would, but no, I had to be more creative than that, and that meant giving one man a purpose, a message to deliver, at just the right time to save the one power that had a chance at uniting earth in time to face the onslaught, I had to give one man the skills, the will, and the critical message that would save Rome, and give it a purpose, to save their planet.

I went to work immediately, first launching a plague that attacked the Draxian's hosts, for they use brains of other sentient to control muscle and hydraulic movements and actions, so they are forced to act, I knew they would cure this plague, but it bought me time. I first sent a probe to earth, not to explore, I knew what was happening there always, but this was sort of a reverse probe, designed to send a message, skills, and knowledge. I had to get it to the right man as fast as I could. I watched it as I sent it off towards my favorite creation, and it was at that point, that I had to hope, as there was nothing more that I could do. It was up to Earth to defend itself now, and it's inhabitants had better hope that Rome could win in time.
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Phsyco9016 is not online. Phsyco9016
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25 Jul 2011 12:29 AM
o_O look good yet?
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Xilirite is not online. Xilirite
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25 Jul 2011 12:32 AM
Clap Clap Clap Palc Clap
You should probably exposite a bit more, so we know EXACTLY what's going on, such as how Earth was discovered, which countries are in power, etc.
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Phsyco9016 is not online. Phsyco9016
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25 Jul 2011 07:08 AM
Getting there, I had to go to sleep, so I couldn't finish the next chapter, but I'll have it done today, It will explain more. Like I said at the beginning, bear with me.
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Phsyco9016 is not online. Phsyco9016
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25 Jul 2011 07:12 AM
(also, read more closely, I think I answered your question.)
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Xilirite is not online. Xilirite
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25 Jul 2011 09:04 AM
Can't wait till you find time to write more.
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Phsyco9016 is not online. Phsyco9016
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25 Jul 2011 08:18 PM
I am almost finished with the second chapter, I just need to finish something for school first.
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Phsyco9016 is not online. Phsyco9016
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25 Jul 2011 09:00 PM
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Part One,
Chapter Two:

Aulus watched over the Fort of the First legion, one of the last true legions left in the empire. Almost all the others had been annihilated at the border by the barbarians, disbanded by foolish emperors to be replaced by fickle mercenaries, or the legionaries of other simply left, realizing the empire was on it's last leg. The first was, however, not about to give up, it took new recruits almost daily some weeks. These brave men (sometimes boys) were mainly Comitatenses who wished to stand and fight, or maybe looked for safety in numbers, or in the extensive, if ancient, fortifications of this fortress in the mountains of central Italy. Aulus wasn't left to ponder this for much longer, as a group of mercenary commanders stepped into the room.

"Aulus! Our contract guarantees the best rations your army can give! Yet I look around and there are TOWN WATCHMEN with more bread and meat than us! WHAT IS THE MEANING OF THIS?"

"They are Romans, I barely have enough funds to feed my men," Aulus said calmly as he regarded the barbarian, probably from the Lombards, and certainly not very educated...

"I DON'T CARE!" Another one said, probably from the Alemanni, "OUR CONTRACT STATES THAT WE GET..."

"I don't care what your contract states, Romans come before barbarians. The true legionaries down there are the few people in the empire that have the slightest bit of courage left. They have seen families killed and slaughtered as you BARBARIANS stormed across our frontier! They are the few people left that have the will and the strength to stand against you kin as they murder, plunder and destroy everything they can. Your people have set hundreds of years of progress back! So give me one good reason not to kill you and all your men. WHY SHOULDN'T I?"

The mercenary commanders drew swords, and Aulus drew his as the guards at the door yelled down the hall for back up and readied their own weapons.

"I'm going to give you scum one chance, surrender now, or we will kill all of you." Aulus said, or maybe just growled, to the Mercenary captains. Slowly, the captains lowered their swords as another 20 guards entered the room, bringing the total number to 25 to 5 in the Roman's favor. 10 of the guards then immediately seized them, and took them down to the guardhouse to lock them up. the other 15 awaited orders.

After another minute, "We need to disarm the mercenaries, I have a feeling they will only be dead weight if recruits keep coming in like they do. Move to the armories and secure them immediately, spread the word, bring the barbarians to the guard house, and kill any that resist. And move as quickly as possible, we need to catch them surprise."

"Yes sir!" said the aging Centurion as he motioned to the other guards to move ahead.

"Good luck, Lucious."

"Thank you sir, but one thing..."

"Yes?"

"The guardhouse can't hold more than one or two hundred men, but there are more than 1000 mercenaries in this legion and you said only to kill them if they resist." Lucious said looking confused and concerned at the same time."

"They will resist, it is their nature, plus, they know that if they are imprisoned, they will end up as either gladiators or naval crews, both of which are often a death sentence anyways." Aulus remarked, with a cool, but devious looking grin as he put on his helmet.

The centurion smiled widely, "Yes sir, I'm sure the men will enjoy to teach these barbarians some respect" And with that, Lucious left the room to undertake his mission.

Aulus grinned, and began to put on his red cloak when he saw a light in the sky, it was at that point that all things seemed to go quiet for Aulus, the yelling and shouting of the slaughter going on below seemed to fade away, as this light grew closer and closer, and then suddenly it stopped, freezing above Italy. As Aulus looked on, it seemed to speak, even though there was no sound at all. If anything it was almost like a transfer of thoughts, emotions.

"A sign from god?" Aulus muttered.
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Phsyco9016 is not online. Phsyco9016
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25 Jul 2011 09:24 PM
(quick note, to the few of you reading this thread, tell your friends about it! The more people read this the more motivation I have to write this :P)
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Xilirite is not online. Xilirite
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25 Jul 2011 10:03 PM
I'm a writer too, and I personally think this is really good. I might dig up my current story (and for that matter, start working on it-it's been sitting on chapter 4 or 5 for months now.) However, I'm going to a Pathfinder Society thing with my dad tommorow, so I'll have to do it as early as possible.
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Phsyco9016 is not online. Phsyco9016
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25 Jul 2011 10:10 PM
Cool! If I see it I'll give it a read.

(thanks by the way c:)
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Phsyco9016 is not online. Phsyco9016
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26 Jul 2011 01:18 PM
This is the sort of point where I really want a lot of feedback, I've given the situation, now tell me what you think should happen next, then I've got an idea in my head, and if your idea is good enough, I might integrate it into the story!
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shadowironman22 is not online. shadowironman22
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26 Jul 2011 11:32 PM
Wow, this is a great story. Can't wait to read more!
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26 Jul 2011 11:39 PM
Throwing in some alien technology to this Roman-Era world? This could be published as a book.
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Xilirite is not online. Xilirite
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26 Jul 2011 11:40 PM
Hrrg can't post the story.
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shadowironman22 is not online. shadowironman22
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26 Jul 2011 11:40 PM
But, if the character is Roman, why is he speaking of a 'God' instead of the multiple Roman gods?
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RoyalPrincessLily is not online. RoyalPrincessLily
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26 Jul 2011 11:50 PM
I DEMAND YOU GIVE US MORE OR I WILL SEND THE ARMY OF SENGONIA ON YOU.
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Phsyco9016 is not online. Phsyco9016
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27 Jul 2011 12:04 AM
The late Roman Empire was primarily Christian :D

Also, this isn't JUST a late roman period story, this will litterally spam thousands of years, we will focus on the turning points, and then the narrator from the beginning will take over and explain in a broad sens what happened in between.

I will try to have more, I'm working on it now, but I just haven't had a lot of time. Sorry.
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27 Jul 2011 12:56 PM
lol, I just realized that I said spam instead of span.
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