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| 12 Jun 2011 06:58 PM |
It was a late night before the carnage started, i was on the couch drinking a can of Bloxy cola, watching TV hoping to see my favorite movie. "Why can't i find it?" i though. As i drank my bloxy cola, i walked over to my room to play Xbox360 when the door bell rang. "Coming!" i yelled. I opened the door and there, stood a tall person with a pale face. "Nsuitable i need your help!" he gasped. "What's wrong?" i replied. So Bman (secretive bman) tells me about what happens and how it started. Who's daggerbro?, why dose he hate bman? i wondered.Then i found my self knocked to the ground, out cold. When i woke up, it happened.
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| 13 Jun 2011 02:09 PM |
| Good prolouge. It could be a little more detailed and slightly longer but still. Impressive for one of your first stories! |
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| 13 Jun 2011 08:14 PM |
| I will make the story tommarro. |
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River777
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| 14 Jun 2011 08:16 AM |
| It's trash when you look at the stuff other's right. But then again a lot of current days stories are trash. Why is it that all the junky stories get feedback? |
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| 14 Jun 2011 08:19 AM |
| I know.... All my stories just sit there, get views, but no feedback. Is it because I type more then a paragraph and the majority of RP's current community can't handle it? |
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| 14 Jun 2011 08:22 AM |
| People love spam for some reason. What's so good about a lunch-meat? |
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| 14 Jun 2011 08:27 AM |
| Never had spam, always thought it looked gross. And this "story" is spam, by a lot of standards. |
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| 14 Jun 2011 08:30 AM |
| Nah, well just use this, maybe if we post enoguh he won't use it anymore. |
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| 14 Jun 2011 08:35 AM |
*Sigh*
I really never got all that hype about the Daggerbro threads and such. |
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| 14 Jun 2011 08:37 AM |
@SRB
He's kind of the ye old fastpager. Come to think of it fast isn't posting much either.... |
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