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| 02 Jul 2011 07:49 PM |
When I was little, I survived a car crash. The details of the car crash kept swimming through my mind, which was strange because I pushed it to the back of my mind usually. I was absolutely exhausted, but I couldn't get to sleep. I tossed around on my bed, trying to think differently. I shuffled through my dark house and into the kitchen, where I got some water and took some Melatonins. (Three, to be exact.) I sighed and went back into my room, looking through my DVDs. Most of them were actions, suspense, thrillers, etc. But I had a few comedies. I grabbed one and popped it into my XBox. I laid down and finally faded into sleep.... My parents sat in the front seats of the car, and I was in the back. I had been sleeping, but just woke up. We were going to the funeral of my second cousin's son. I honestly had no idea who they were, and I felt that it was unnecessary for them to yank me from my video games and force me into formal clothing just so I can sit there, bored, acting like I knew the person. We rounded the corner, about a mile away from the funeral. A buck trotted into the road, and my dad (who was driving), stomped on the brakes and tries to swerve. Instead, we spin out into the other lane, straight into a diesel. My mother screams, my father tries to remain silent, the strong center of the family, and I close my eyes, because I just remembered. This is the car wreck that I survived in my childhood. I pinch myself and punch myself in the face, but to no avail. We connect with the diesel, and the diesel makes us spin out more, crushing our front two tires. We spin out into the ditch, and there's a roaring fire of a pain in my right leg. I know that I'm supposed to survive, but I don't remember. How did I do it? And then we hit the ground, the top of the car being crushed. I try to crawl out, but the door is crushed beyond opening, and the other one is the same. I try to kick it out. Both of my parents are screaming, and it is so hot. The car explodes, and the world fades into black. I wake up in the back of the car. I don't want to go to this funeral, because I don't know the person that died. We round the corner, close to the funeral, but a buck trots into our way. It turns it's head, staring directly at me, and it says, "Welcome to Eternity." That was when I remembered that this was the car accident that happened when I was little, and that was when I remembered the last car accident. We spin out, crashing into the diesel, and into the ditch. I don't remember how I survived the one when I was little. Right before the car explodes, I realize that I'm dead, and I went to Hell, because, since I was tired, I didn't take my Melatonins. I took my grandmother's blood pressure medicine. The three of them had done me in. Boom. The world fades, and I'm in the back of the car. I don't want to go to this funeral, because I don't know the person that died.....
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| 12 Jul 2011 06:46 PM |
Wow........That was..........Good. And disturbing.
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| 12 Jul 2011 06:49 PM |
Incredible. Usually user made pastas are never good, but this was pretty deep and emotional. I like that. |
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Shinnon
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| 12 Jul 2011 06:52 PM |
| Wow...that was pretty good... |
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| 12 Jul 2011 06:57 PM |
| Holy frik. You have somehow beaten the odds and posted a creepypasta and not a crappypasta. I'm not sure what made this story good, but it as good. |
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Shinnon
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| 12 Jul 2011 06:57 PM |
| I decided to read it, but I don't understand any of it. This is a terrible work. |
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| 12 Jul 2011 06:59 PM |
"This is a terrible work."
You not understanding it doesn't make it bad, hun. It just makes you a moron. |
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Shinnon
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| 12 Jul 2011 07:00 PM |
Is this about a dream, hallucination, or reality? What does medicine have to do with any of this?
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| 12 Jul 2011 07:02 PM |
He died because he did not take his medicine.
☺♣~I r giraffe. j00 may liek mah spots, but don't touch them.~♣☺ |
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| 12 Jul 2011 07:03 PM |
"Is this about a dream, hallucination, or reality?"
Plox read.
"What does medicine have to do with any of this?"
Plox read. |
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| 12 Jul 2011 07:03 PM |
"He died because he did not take his medicine."
Wrong, he died because he took the wrong medicine. |
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Shinnon
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| 12 Jul 2011 07:04 PM |
I know it says it's a dream, but at the bottom it says "I accidentally took my grandmother's bloodpressure medication instead of my melatonin" What does that have to do with anything? And you take melatonin to sleep. So, again, rather pointless detail.
Am I supposed to believe blood pressure medication made him hallucinate in a dream? |
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Shinnon
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| 12 Jul 2011 07:05 PM |
So he's dead. Soooo that was all really a hallucination inside a flashback inside an apiphany. Inception much? Terrible. |
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| 12 Jul 2011 07:10 PM |
"What does that have to do with anything?"
Plox read.
"And you take melatonin to sleep. So, again, rather pointless detail."
Not pointless if you read the story.
"Am I supposed to believe blood pressure medication made him hallucinate in a dream?"
Nope, you're supposed to read the story to find out what happens. |
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Shinnon
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| 12 Jul 2011 08:15 PM |
The story has many details that are either irrelevant or random. The random ones tend to have important parts in the story. That is a bad thing. You must develope details if you are to include them. And the taking melatonin thing is indeed pointless. Unless of course the person was depressed BECAUSE he was taking melatonin. Which would make more sense. |
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| 12 Jul 2011 09:18 PM |
You fail at failing, bro. Because you did tl;dr wrong, and doing tl;dr is a fail. You truly do fail at failing. (Not a double negative) |
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| 12 Jul 2011 09:19 PM |
"The story has many details that are either irrelevant or random. The random ones tend to have important parts in the story. That is a bad thing. You must develope details if you are to include them. And the taking melatonin thing is indeed pointless. Unless of course the person was depressed BECAUSE he was taking melatonin. Which would make more sense."
You really need to just reread the story. literally ALL of the stuff you've said is based on misconceptions and misunderstandings. And the plot is REALLY clear and easy to understand, so that really says something about you. |
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| 12 Jul 2011 09:20 PM |
| (... Poison Pillows would make a good creepypasta. ) |
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| 12 Jul 2011 09:20 PM |
| I don't know what to say, because I'm confused. What does medication have to do with the ending? |
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