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| 05 Jul 2011 05:12 PM |
It was the 4th of July, 2011.
Deep inside Fort Valor Vaktus and Jga1, were discussing on peace terms.
I offer a peace treaty, said JGA1
And In if I accept what will I get in return? Inquired Vaktus
Well, I will tell my members to join VAK and give you scripts for better tech.
Vaktus held up his LMG, and said "What's wrong with the tech we are using now?"
Gulp, nothing Vaktus, it just that, Gulp*, nothing Vaktus the tech is great.
He put down his gun and said "Great, that is what I wanted to here."
Are you sure that no VS will come here? "Vaktus asked."
Yes I'm sure, only Colonels/Advisors know about this place.
Well, I dont see any so, okay I agree.
Agree on what? JGA1 asked
The peace treaty, retard! Shouted vaktus
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Meanwhile AgentCG was fighting off raiders at the Fort and he accidently found a secret entrance. He went in opened a door, and there he was JGA1 in person along with Vaktus.
"A VS!!!" Vaktus shouted
Seize everyone!
Suddenly Vaktovians came out of everywhere they captured both AgentCG and JGA1.
Did you really think I would accept the treaty? Vaktus asked.
No, thats why I called for backup before we started negotiating.
Vaktus shouted for Retreat, although VS members took them from all sides.
Yes the backup has arrived. JGA1 said happily.
[To be continued tomorrow]-[PM me if you want your name here] :D
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wakbob
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| 05 Jul 2011 05:15 PM |
| nice add me in and pm me when is done |
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MagicPwny
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| 05 Jul 2011 05:15 PM |
| You do know that speech marks are where speech is...? |
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| 05 Jul 2011 05:23 PM |
| Yeah, Magic I do. But my keys are broke. kINDA |
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camjam
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| 05 Jul 2011 05:37 PM |
I love the story, hate the rushing.
6/10 |
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| 05 Jul 2011 05:38 PM |
[Part 2] - [JGA1 speech]
On the 6th of July, 2011.
16:00
JGA1 was getting ready for his speech.
"My suit should be clean, if my fedora does not get here I will sue you!"
"Okay Sir", said 0supadude0.
"Anything else?"
"No, actully I would like a coffe"
"Sir, the speech starts in 10 minutes you don't have time to drink coffee"
"Okay, then"
"How many members are there outside?"
0supadude0 opened the window, and said "About 5000"
"Jolly good"
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Meanwhile Vaktus was in VS jail, trying to escape he desperately spat at the guard"
"Why'd you do that?" Asked the VS guard
No reason. Whistles*
Stupid prisoner.
The guard tries to remember what CT said ""Never argue with the fool, for they will lower you to their level and beat you with experience."
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JGA1 started his speech "As you know fellow VS members, I tried to negotiate with the Vaktovians although they refused peace."
"Try harder scumb@g" said someone from the crowd
"Ignore him, Sir" Said Varple
"We have been at war with VAK for the past 4 months, we have lost out two valuable members Shootingraw1 and reaper5.
"This war must come to an end."
"Who won? Asked bapman"
"Well, as you see we have Vaktus as a prisoner, we have won!"
"Glory to Vaktovia"
"Who said that?" Asked JGA1
A helicopter piloted by Shadowpurky had rescued Vaktus.
Vaktus kept on shouting "Glory to Vaktovia"
[To be continued] |
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boby342
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| 05 Jul 2011 05:39 PM |
I like it, it could use more in each chapter though, nice title.
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camjam
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| 05 Jul 2011 05:43 PM |
So far
8/10. I liked this one. You should've added an escape part.. |
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| 06 Jul 2011 03:50 AM |
| Put me in as an Assasin that snipes Vaktus... |
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| 06 Jul 2011 03:55 AM |
[Part 3] - [BTMpire plans to attack]
4 days after Vaktus had escaped.
JGA1 was sitting quietly on his desk reading his messages.
He was waiting for ColourTheory to arrive.
"He should've been here 4 minutes ago!" Shouted JGA1
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Meanwhile, the Bobatheman thought that VS had gotten less stronger, since it had lost about 9000 members, some of which had died, other had been shot, some were taken hostage by Vaktovians. Others had even joined the Vaktovian Empire.
He thought of this as a great oppurtunity to attack there Forts, Headquarters, and Recruitment Centre.
As a result Boba ordered 5000 BTM vehicles. The vehicles consisted of 2000 wasps and 3000 jeeps.
Marshal Wakbob from RAT was on a spy mission and heard all of this, he wanted to quickly alert JGA1, he started running towards the exit. He was nearly there when a guard stopped him.
"Where to, buddy?" Asked the guard
"Well, I had to use the little APN's room" Replied wakbob
"Isn't there one inside?"
"Yes, but......." Wakbob stopped because he couldnt answer
"But what?" The guard asked as his curiosity arisred.
"But, there are alot of people inside it and I have to go now!"
Wakbob quickly stabbed the guard in the eye.
The guard shouted "Help!!!"
Camjam was there eating his hotdog, when he heard the distress call.
He quickly rushed towards it and there he found it. A guard injured.
"Who did this?" Asked camjam
"I don't know, but he went outside"
Camjam organized a search party.
Wakbob had already hitched a ride from someone. And was far ahead!
"Yeah, I lost them!" Said wakbob
Camjam had been searching for the past 3 hours he could find nothing. He went back to the base, depressed.
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ColourTheory had just arrived in JGA1's office and said "Sorry, I was stuck in a traffic jam."
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[Coming soon]-[Part 4: Discussion with CT] |
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| 06 Jul 2011 03:56 AM |
@Killerdol
Then please tell me your rank in VS/RAT/WIJ, one of them. |
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| 06 Jul 2011 04:10 AM |
| the bobatheman it was supposed to be bobatheman |
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bloodbred
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| 06 Jul 2011 05:03 AM |
7/10
Be more elaborate, cut out some dialog, more action.
Take that as advice as one of the best writers on C&G. |
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wakbob
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| 06 Jul 2011 05:10 AM |
| lol i stabbed someone in the eye im a bad boi |
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| 06 Jul 2011 05:18 AM |
| Then you hitched a ride. :3 |
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| 06 Jul 2011 05:33 AM |
[Part 4] - [Discussion with ColourTheory]
"Well, what'd you want to talk about?" CT asked
"Well, CT as you know we had Vaktus in custody, although he had been rescued by a Vaktovian."
"Tell me something new" CT said
"Well we plan to attack the SMO tonight"
"Smo, you mean Swampy Moon Outpost?" Asked CT
"Yes, exactly!" JGA1 replied
Just then the door banged open..
Sir, Sir! Wakbob arrived breathing heavily
"Wakbob, what are you doing here?" CT asked
"You know this creep?" Asked JGA1
"He's no creep, one of out best Marshal's he is"
"Well, okay."
"Wakbob how did the Spy Mission go?" CT asked curiously
"Great, but they plan on attacking VS soon."
"How soon?" JGA1 said
"In 2 days."
"We can take em on easily, eh ColourTheory?"
"You think I'm going to help you----??" ColourTheory chuckled
"And, why not?"
"Most of RAT is on vacation, about 3000 members are active."
The meeting was over, JGA1 was worried about the BTM raid.
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JGA1 called all the members of Vortex Security.
18000 members were there.
JGA1 began a speech, BTM plans on attacking us in 48 hours.
We should be ready.
Now, out of you 9000 members, 4000 members will stay here for defence the others will go to raid before BTM raids us! ___________________________________________________________________________
[Part 5] - [Coming Soon The Big War: BTM vs VS] |
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| 06 Jul 2011 05:34 AM |
| Now out of you 18000* members. |
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wakbob
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| 06 Jul 2011 05:39 AM |
| kewl ill add you in my story tell me what you think of it |
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| 06 Jul 2011 06:24 AM |
| I want to be the guy that randomly comes up, asks for JGA1's autograph constantly, and gets punched in the face by him. |
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