Leiagirl
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| 21 Nov 2008 01:41 PM |
Happiness
I thought happiness would never find its way Life with no happiness, what a sad day But I've got it here and now, and its here to stay Misery and anger, can go away.
Happiness, was hidden in the gloom With no happiness, I was headed for doom
Happiness is with me, it has grown And I'm just hoping it ain't a loan It is blossoming, like a seed that's been sown Having it here with me, makes me feel less alone.
Happiness, was hidden in the gloom With no happiness, I was headed for doom
A happy sun's, shining inside of me No more anger, or misery I'm much happier, can't you see And now I'm glowing, glowing happily!
Happiness, was hidden in the gloom With no happiness, I was headed doom.
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| 21 Nov 2008 01:44 PM |
| Its okay, maybe you should work on the rhymes and make the chorus longer... Other than that, good song |
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| 21 Nov 2008 01:49 PM |
Maybe this for the chorus?
Happiness, was hidden in the gloom With no happiness, I was headed doom I have it now, I'm getting more soon I now sing a happy tune!
Maybe? I dunno, you decide |
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| 21 Nov 2008 02:30 PM |
| Nevermind, Im rubbish at rhymes |
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spork890
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| 21 Nov 2008 06:53 PM |
| y would nyone laugh at this, i mean, its good and it takes skill to make z song, |
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shaun436
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| 22 Nov 2008 03:21 PM |
| ya no one would laugh its a good song |
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Leiagirl
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| 29 Nov 2008 10:13 AM |
Really? That one was a happy bubbly song (I hope) I have another, but its not done yet
I was wrong, I realise, please listen while I say my feelings... I got the spotlight and you got some peelings Sitting in my shadow for so long, And I didnt see what was going wrong. Oooh,
And I know, right now, that I confused my feelings And I know, right now, that what I said was wrong, And I know, oh yeah I know, thats why your gone Mmm.
I was wrong, I realise, and I know that now you seem to be fading, I got the colours and you got the shadings Living with black for so long, And I didnt see what was going wrong. Oooh
And I know, right now, that I confused my feelings And I know, right now, that what I said was wrong, And I know, oh yeah I know, thats why your gone Mmm.
I havent worked out the tune yet
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Leiagirl
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| 29 Nov 2008 10:21 AM |
| Please comment on the last one |
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| 29 Nov 2008 11:33 AM |
| I think you have a talent, Leia |
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musicboy1
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| 29 Nov 2008 11:44 AM |
| yo this girl can rap.yo yo yo my name is thegame one and ill never be the same one.i will rap until i get a cap.my boss said it has to ryhme,for every rap he will give a dime.ohh there it is my cap omg is that dodo or what?WORD |
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Leiagirl
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| 29 Nov 2008 12:31 PM |
| Wow, guys, thanks, but Im not THAT good |
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Boyzone
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| 29 Nov 2008 01:37 PM |
| Leia, your songs have stolen my heart. Write more, they are beautiful |
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Boyzone
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| 29 Nov 2008 01:38 PM |
| Hey, we joined on the same day |
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| 29 Nov 2008 02:34 PM |
| It's better than I could ever do!Bigtime! |
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kitkat30
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| 29 Nov 2008 06:05 PM |
| They're good.The happyness one was... very... happy. |
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rocky713
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| 29 Nov 2008 06:31 PM |
| Im a peice of cr@p compared 2 u |
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paclac
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| 29 Nov 2008 11:16 PM |
| Like the other guy, im crap compared to you. |
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jjtt11
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| 29 Nov 2008 11:35 PM |
| ok for the guy abouf me and who he agreed to you guys are mean i think its very nice |
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maddya13
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Leiagirl
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chaokid9
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| 30 Nov 2008 07:31 AM |
| The first one was great but the second one needed a little more rhyme. |
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jjtt11
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| 30 Nov 2008 03:28 PM |
| and leiagirl your very welcome |
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Leiagirl
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| 03 Dec 2008 11:54 AM |
| Thank you guys... Usually people who reply to threads are sarcastic jerks, and I didnt want to be laughed at.... but you guys are relly nice, and thanks for all the constructive comments |
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