BigCrim21
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| 31 Aug 2017 05:12 PM |
Hello Americans of USA I am running for senate. The reason I will be running is to help are USA become The Biggest and the Best And I think I can do that I am not running to be special I am running to help are USA! and I think I can make that happen with your Support Things I am trying to do to make are USA better is
Create new laws.
Make Bill's.
and make are Americans happy.
And all I need for me to do it is have your Support Now if you want to make it happen Support my Forum today And I will make everyone happy and I will turn the bad side Good again and Help EVERYONE From Visitor All the way up to Founder Now Support BigCrim21 Today
Bye just doing 3 things Clicking reply Typing in I support! and click that enter! |
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BigCrim21
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Pxtz
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| 31 Aug 2017 05:55 PM |
Nope, first of all, your grammar is terrible, let me establish that. Second, you really need to go into more detail about your plans, "make bills," is very broad. You should try to explain what types of you would do if you get elected. Also, try to not make claims you can't make true, such as, "I will make everyone happy," you can't possibly make everyone happy.
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i6410
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DKSukeroe
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| 31 Aug 2017 09:25 PM |
You should try to explain what types of you would do if you get elected.
"what types of you would do" hmmm...
Also, try to not make claims you can't make true, such as, "I will make everyone happy," you can't possibly make everyone happy.
You cannot border "such as" with common, because it would make such as a useless phrase. You can rewirte this as
"Also, try not to make claims you can't make true, such as "I will make everyone happy"(punctuation goes at the end of quote)[Now if you add another comma, it would make the whole phrase "such as...happy" an unnecessary info. Therefore, you would have to use another punctuation (---) that will continue on the sentence or create another sentence using a STOP punctation(; or .).] (Y)you can't possibly make everyone happy.
Grammar police c; |
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DKSukeroe
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| 31 Aug 2017 09:32 PM |
I support too,
signed DKSukeroe |
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| 01 Sep 2017 12:26 PM |
| I do not support, because one you're mean, and two you're mean. |
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| 01 Sep 2017 05:44 PM |
um ok first off i meant"what types of bills you would do or make" ok sorry for confusion
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BigCrim21
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| 01 Sep 2017 07:22 PM |
| Like I would try to make all Gangs AoS like ARK ARES and all the gangs in las vegas would be my first one |
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