VaI_or
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| 11 May 2017 06:11 PM |
Original:
Greetings.
It is time throw down the gauntlet, this child's play has gone on long enough, let's have a real fight.
CSP - your ego has grown too big for your own good and it is time to make an example out of you. Now put your money where your mouth is:
We war until one of us surrenders.
The battlefield is Varcia.
No negotiations.
No excuses.
No more doubts about the truly superior clan.
War begins Sunday, PM me if you're man enough to accept.
You've brought this on yourselves CSP, you better not back out now, for your own sake. We'll be waiting.
Glory to Vaktovia!
Revised:
Greetings.
It is time to throw down the gauntlet;* this child's play has gone on long enough. Let's have a real fight.
CSP,* your ego has grown too big for your own good,* and it is time to make an example out of you. Now put your money where your mouth is.*
We will* war until one of us surrenders.
The battlefield is Varcia.
No negotiations.
No excuses.
No more doubts about the truly superior clan.
War begins Sunday.* PM me if you're man enough to accept.
You've brought this on yourselves,* CSP.* Y*ou better not back out now, for your own sake. We'll be waiting.
Glory to Vaktovia!
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Excellus
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| 11 May 2017 06:12 PM |
Too bad your title is incorrect. "Vaktus's" should be Vaktus'
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VaI_or
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Blizzarks
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VaI_or
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VaI_or
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VaI_or
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| 11 May 2017 06:48 PM |
| ######################################### |
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| 11 May 2017 06:51 PM |
| I actually laughed because you made a grammar mistake in the title. |
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| 11 May 2017 06:59 PM |
don't attempt to roast people when you have already made yourself look bad
wew |
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Alcaras
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| 11 May 2017 07:06 PM |
vaktus's's's
and there's no comma before "and" that was out when they made MLA8. Good try though.
stay frosty |
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VaI_or
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Rektway
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goku19876
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| 11 May 2017 07:14 PM |
did vaktus actually post this?
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VaI_or
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| 11 May 2017 07:15 PM |
yes
okok
we all know i screwed up in the title
cmon guys
just bants ok |
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DripDrops
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Skydric
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| 11 May 2017 07:29 PM |
| A ########## is used to separate two articles that are of relation to each-other and could be separated to formulate their own structures. It is not always necessary and in this case it is not necessary. |
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VaI_or
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| 11 May 2017 07:31 PM |
| Oxford commas are the standard in SAT and ACT, thereby the world |
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| 11 May 2017 07:33 PM |
Technically, semi-colons aren't necessary in this. It's not "bad grammar", it's structure.
Using direct sentences just emphasizes the author's point, and helps for the reader to understand the author's tone. It's simply a different style in the paragraph. |
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VaI_or
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| 11 May 2017 07:39 PM |
| Sure, but do you want choppy sentences? You can literally sum this up in 2-3 word sentences, but Vaktus tried to be eloquent. (and failed miserably) |
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| 11 May 2017 07:41 PM |
There's a few choppy ones.
The last two are perfect as they are though:No negociaba. No excuses.
"The battlefield is Varcia", could have been inserted into a compound sentence, though. |
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VaI_or
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| 11 May 2017 07:45 PM |
"You bought this onto yourself CSP, you better not back out now, for your own sake."
I'm 60% sure that's either a runon or a badly structured sentence |
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