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Re: OoC: Criticisms of my RPs?

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Perambulation is not online. Perambulation
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06 Aug 2016 06:32 PM
As I try and end the current ISRP ARC of my RP, Gargantuan, I looked back at the various RPs I've written over the past year or so. I'm not going to lie, but my first three RPs are quite cringe-worthy and simply put, horrible.

So, I'm going to ask you guys on your opinions about my now sixth RP, Gargantuan. Anything that I could do to improve on the next upcoming installment of my series? Any glaring flaws?

I feel like we should do RP critiques around here every so often, so that even for inactive-ish RPs we can at least still discuss about its merits and faults. Wouldn't be a bad idea to breath more life into this forum.
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PurringThunder is not online. PurringThunder
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06 Aug 2016 06:40 PM
breathe*
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TheGamingCinema is not online. TheGamingCinema
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06 Aug 2016 07:00 PM
perma the reason i dont join most of your rps is because

-too much text, i feel like im reading alot for nothing


just like school

and schools bad

and

-i dont like isrps, so if you make a isrp i wont join js

yeah other than that idk im too lazy to read a wall-of-china text wall


[hello from the other side of the screen]
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roquinha9 is not online. roquinha9
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06 Aug 2016 07:30 PM
"im too lazy to read a wall-of-china text wall"

That should be a signature.
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Perambulation is not online. Perambulation
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06 Aug 2016 07:33 PM
@Purring

Duly noted
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Swowe is not online. Swowe
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06 Aug 2016 07:34 PM
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TheGamingCinema is not online. TheGamingCinema
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06 Aug 2016 07:34 PM
AND WE WILL BUILD A WALL

OF TEXT

WE WILL BUILD A WALL

AND MAKE THE RPERS PAY FOR IT


yep


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Swowe is not online. Swowe
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06 Aug 2016 07:37 PM
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06 Aug 2016 07:39 PM
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Perambulation is not online. Perambulation
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06 Aug 2016 08:24 PM
No, but seriously, any real criticism apart from text length? I always make it clear to search the text with Ctrl+F for the information to create your CS. Everything else is just lore for those that want to be more informed.
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Pruz is not online. Pruz
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06 Aug 2016 08:25 PM
Implicit tons of hate back to the hospital, you're not in Kansas any more, sorry!
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Pruz is not online. Pruz
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06 Aug 2016 08:26 PM
We got our swagger in our wagon. Stay I conglomerate. Over terabital bandwidth. Silver tongue and it's too late run.
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bigbriangoad is not online. bigbriangoad
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06 Aug 2016 08:30 PM
this thread reminds me of tones

Fried not Baked
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RoxProox is not online. RoxProox
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06 Aug 2016 08:55 PM
Really the only reason I haven't joined Gargantuan or any of the others is because the huge weapon choice thing really makes me think it'll take too much time to make the character sheet. Which is odd, because I like to make detailed character sheets. Your RPs really do interest me a lot but I just feel I'd pick my first choices and then have no idea what to do with the weapons.

I'm not saying you should remove that because I can imagine it's a huge part of the RP.
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Pruz is not online. Pruz
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06 Aug 2016 09:04 PM
You advertise Gargantuan a lot.

I don't ISRP.

It's kind of hard to criticize something not really looked into.
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Perambulation is not online. Perambulation
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06 Aug 2016 09:18 PM
@Rox

Ah, I see. But then again, maybe you can try again with the next RP? I've already written it out, but I need to work on the story ARCs once I conclude Gargantuan.

@Pruz

Eh, it's one ARC out of like 7. This didn't really start out as an ISRP, but I tried it out to try and see how it would go. I'm not sure if I would do ISRPs again, considering how barren it gets with just one person.
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SirBookington is not online. SirBookington
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06 Aug 2016 09:20 PM
@TheGaming

Think I found my new signature.

im too lazy to read a wall-of-china text wall


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birmie123 is not online. birmie123
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06 Aug 2016 09:21 PM
signatures are for white people
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TheGamingCinema is not online. TheGamingCinema
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06 Aug 2016 09:22 PM
change it to ' im too lazy to read a wall-if-china text wall -thegamingcinema '
OR I'LL SUE!


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SirBookington is not online. SirBookington
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06 Aug 2016 09:30 PM
Will do


"im too lazy to read a wall-if-china text wall" -thegamingcinema
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Perambulation is not online. Perambulation
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06 Aug 2016 09:53 PM
Technically speaking, I was called out for not having enough weapon types around in my RPs before, so I had to accommodate for that...
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Timepockie is not online. Timepockie
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07 Aug 2016 06:42 AM
"cringe-worthy"

Using a hyphen there is cringeworthy.
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Timepockie is not online. Timepockie
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07 Aug 2016 06:47 AM
Also, you seem to be advertising a new story arc for your RP every five to eight pages that it reaches. I've never joined any of your RPs but that's really just a scene or two in my experience, not a fully-fledged story arc. As such, I suspect that, in spite of the amount of effort that you put into writing lore for the world you seem to put very little effort into the RP after the OP.
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Perambulation is not online. Perambulation
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07 Aug 2016 07:28 AM
@tim

I often have my story arcs planned out before I even post the RP, but the thing is that more often than not people become bored of the current situation. As such, I have to try and close it out and move on to another situation to keep the interest going. Even so, it's a valid criticism, considering how short my "ARCs" are compared to some actual long-form RPs. I guess I'm still not there in terms of RP management and writing.
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Ultraelite is not online. Ultraelite
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07 Aug 2016 07:29 AM
you dont include enough directional jump-pads
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