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Re: Screwed up my video and need help..

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EmperorBouvier is not online. EmperorBouvier
Joined: 22 Jul 2014
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29 Jul 2016 11:22 AM
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1bL1uuVgdzA


Can someone please tell me what I did wrong? The video seems terrible in my opinion. I can't land my finger on what I screwed up on.
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BossLaw is not online. BossLaw
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29 Jul 2016 12:13 PM
+1 non-scripted


https://www.youtube.com/c/bosslawrblx
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EmperorBouvier is not online. EmperorBouvier
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29 Jul 2016 12:50 PM
Thanks
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EmperorBouvier is not online. EmperorBouvier
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31 Jul 2016 04:04 PM
^ Thank you for saying thanks
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BloodSpilled is not online. BloodSpilled
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31 Jul 2016 04:39 PM
Sometimes your voice is a bit monotonous and occasionally you talk to fast and slur your words Go slow and put lots of inflection in your voice. Work on that and it should be better.
Also, in my opinion, you tried too hard to be funny sometimes. You made jokes during the video, and that in it's self is not the problem, it's just that the jokes fell flat and just made me feel weird and not want to watch anymore.
Example:
https://youtu.be/1bL1uuVgdzA?t=1m51s
(the way you added the stupid "boy" thing at the end is super annoying)
https://youtu.be/1bL1uuVgdzA?t=44s
(unless if that's actual dialogue and in which case, wtf?)
Try to talk with proper English too. If you want people to take your reviews seriously don't use a lot of slang.
Examples
https://youtu.be/1bL1uuVgdzA?t=1m59s
("not expecting no call of duty game" Double negative and improper use of the word no. sounds bad and makes you seem uneducated. You do this a couple times throughout the video and it sounds really bad imo)
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EmperorBouvier is not online. EmperorBouvier
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31 Jul 2016 06:29 PM
^ Thanks. When I use the slang words, it's because I'm trying to not sound monetized. I'll definitely take it into note.
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Key_Blade is not online. Key_Blade
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31 Jul 2016 11:57 PM
You seem pretty hyper when you talk no offense
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SoundGod is not online. SoundGod
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01 Aug 2016 01:47 PM
1. intro lasted to long and instantly sucked me out
2. your tone of voice never changes so you sound the same the whole time even when you are confused or uncertain. It sound like your reading off a script for the first time...
3. only 1 clip of gameplay. Hey your a gaming channel! That means your gameplay is just as important as your voice so the clip(s) much be interesting. Try using multiple clips and change them when your talking about certain aspects of the game ie cut to artillery when you're talking about it.
4. show don't tell


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SentinelComanche is not online. SentinelComanche
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01 Aug 2016 01:50 PM
these replies roasted you
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Unchanging is not online. Unchanging
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01 Aug 2016 06:59 PM
1. You used a template for your into, I know this because ReignBotHorror has basically the same into (minus the logo)
2. Non scripted
3. Monotone


"If you can live your life without an audience, go for it" - Bo Burnham
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BloodSpilled is not online. BloodSpilled
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02 Aug 2016 05:14 AM
"these replies roasted you"
No one roasted anyone. We respectfully gave our feedback.
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rookie1223 is not online. rookie1223
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02 Aug 2016 05:16 AM
i lost track of everything when i saw your video.


scientifically cannot touch this | https://www.roblox.com/mchammer-item?id=439838249
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EmperorBouvier is not online. EmperorBouvier
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02 Aug 2016 07:21 AM
Thank you for the feedback. I am definitely trying to work on my voice. Other things are being noted as well.
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