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| 11 Jul 2016 11:48 PM |
Alright, so I need to start off with an explanation: I really love Undertale AUs. Yes, what a big surprise, the Undertale fanboy of RT likes AUs, hah hah. Anyways, one AU that I just discovered is Heavenfell, derived from Underfell. The premise of Underfell is that everyone in the underground wants to destroy Frisk except Flowey who's their friend, blah blah blah, the fanart is kind of emo but whatever.
Now, Heavenfell is the exact same thing except Frisk gets black marks on their body every time he or she dies or something, I don't really know. All I know is that I tried reading the fanfic about the AU, and it's possibly one of the worst things I've ever read. I'm 11 chapters in out of 22 and it's basically just chapter after chapter of nonstop gore and murder, lame emo plot points, edgy dialogue, and forced shipping. The author also makes so many noticeable grammar and language errors, it's unreal. Here's the paragraph that I'm currently stopped at:
"After what seemed to be an eternity, the monster let himself go and he sobbed silently. He was looking away from shame when you brought your arm around his head and offered him to rest on your shoulder. He stopped weeping for a brief moment as he was aware for any attack from you but then realized how good this felt receiving some affection, and he slowly turned towards you to hide his face in the crook of your neck. You felt his arms making their way around your waist, covering a good part of your body with them. Kindly, you returned the gesture and wrapped his shoulders with your own arms before you smoothed his back with one hand, feeling the bumps of his vertebrae through the fabrics under your palm. Through the minutes, you felt his body relax as he shed tears in silence. You could feel your skin wet and warm from them but you didn't mind. You just... Felt good being able to do something nice for someone, no matter how many times they crushed your soul before. When Sans finally calmed down, he was peacefully resting against you, tired by his cries he let out. You could feel his soothing breath against your small frame. You were almost losing yourself to let yourself rest your head on top of his when he let go of you, but reluctantly almost as if... He didn't want to but felt forced to. Still ravaged by shame, he sniffed as he looked away. His voice was croaked by his cries."
Like, I just can't-
Auuuugh. |
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C1N3M4RK
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| 11 Jul 2016 11:48 PM |
DID I READ?
NO LOL!
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LFwa5G9PzgI |
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| 11 Jul 2016 11:49 PM |
sorry but
tl;dr
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EXcellent
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| 11 Jul 2016 11:50 PM |
If you didn't read it, why post about why you didn't read it.
Seems somewhat silly. |
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Beignets
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| 11 Jul 2016 11:50 PM |
cringe tldr!!!!
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C1N3M4RK
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| 11 Jul 2016 11:50 PM |
| Cause, for the post amount, lol dude, |
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EXcellent
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| 11 Jul 2016 11:52 PM |
"Cause, for the post amount, lol dude," Not a good reason, my man. |
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C1N3M4RK
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| 11 Jul 2016 11:52 PM |
| Yeah, whatever it's always faster to post than to read. |
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| 11 Jul 2016 11:54 PM |
I am not reading this. My word counting program says it will take 3 min!
I frequently post with remarkable words. So if you don't comprehend what I'm expressing, click twice on the word you don't apprehend, then right click and click on Search Google for "(Word)"! |
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EXcellent
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| 11 Jul 2016 11:56 PM |
"My word counting program says it will take 3 min!" You gotta learn to speed-read, fam. |
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| 11 Jul 2016 11:57 PM |
| Update: Sans has taken to calling Frisk "sweetheart" every other sentence because I don't know, I hate myself right now. |
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| 11 Jul 2016 11:59 PM |
437 words...
I bet I could finish the Hairy Planter series before that! (ROBLOX will likely censor the actual name)
I frequently post with remarkable words. So if you don't comprehend what I'm expressing, click twice on the word you don't apprehend, then right click and click on Search Google for "(Word)"! |
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| 12 Jul 2016 12:00 AM |
"why do you read it" Quite frankly, I just want to see how bad it gets by the end. It's a literary natural disaster, and I can't look away at the destruction. |
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| 12 Jul 2016 12:02 AM |
| yea but why don't you read something so bad that it's good instead of reading something that's complete rubbish with no redeeming factors to it |
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| 12 Jul 2016 12:06 AM |
"yea but why don't you read something so bad that it's good instead of reading something that's complete rubbish with no redeeming factors to it" Such as? |
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| 12 Jul 2016 12:09 AM |
well...
have you ever heard of a comic called "tails gets trolled" it's legendary stuff |
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| 12 Jul 2016 12:09 AM |
i read the whole thing
and what does AU mean
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| 12 Jul 2016 12:12 AM |
"have you ever heard of a comic called 'tails gets trolled'" The day I read that is the day I've lost my damn mind.
"and what does AU mean" Alternate Universe |
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| 12 Jul 2016 12:15 AM |
"read as in past-tense?" Present tense |
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| 12 Jul 2016 12:16 AM |
| you've quite clearly lost your marbles if you're suffering through an undertale fanfic so you might as well finish the jobs |
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| 12 Jul 2016 12:16 AM |
hELP
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