EXcellent
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| 17 Jun 2016 11:35 PM |
It's a traditional Shakespearean sonnet, except I've made the rhythm iambic tetrameter instead of iambic pentameter because I like the way iambic tetrameter flows like actual speech. I only briefly edited because I'm also working on another poem and a short story simultaneously, but here's what the current draft is:
Goals shrouded in uncertainty, Ideas made without a care; Methods remain a mystery, Ambitions suspended in air. The youthful foresee a future of controlling their destiny; Of fate, they are steadfastly sure They will not be one of many. Time catches up - the dreams come haunt The demon of "what could have been" Returns to these poor souls and taunts, "Would you have changed if you had seen?" Ye hopeful souls all held, alas, Visions of smoke, and dreams of glass!
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13enidol
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GuestIy
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| 17 Jun 2016 11:37 PM |
I'm just a tad busy at the moment, so I hope you don't mind me tracking this and then reading and replying to it later, probably with a wordwall or something, like usual.
#justguestlythings |
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punamed
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| 17 Jun 2016 11:38 PM |
| can you sing it to the tune of a limp bizkit song? |
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| 17 Jun 2016 11:38 PM |
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EXcellent
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| 17 Jun 2016 11:39 PM |
"can you sing it to the tune of a limp bizkit song?" Just imagine Fred Durst reading it. |
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punamed
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| 17 Jun 2016 11:40 PM |
| https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=M00_vz9T0Go |
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EXcellent
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punamed
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| 17 Jun 2016 11:41 PM |
| make the internet great again |
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punamed
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| 17 Jun 2016 11:45 PM |
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eho1IOT4_Y0
opposite of vapourwave |
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