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| 14 May 2016 10:31 PM |
| One day Timmy the 4th grader went to his locker he noticed it was gone Dun, Dun, Dun! And then he noticed a bully in the school with his locker at a different place with his gang. They were all laughing in the locker when they noticed a picture of him when he was 4 in his diary. Timmy walked over to them angrily saying HEY! WHAT ARE YOU DOING WITH MY LOCKER????!?!?!!? Then the worst one of them all the gang owner said... what? Then every gang member including the owner started laughing. Then Timmy said I am calling the principal then the gang owner said so? It has happened to me like five Hundred times all they say is there is no such behaviour in this school. Now please stop bullying. Then Timmy says to his mom after school: Can I Be tough when I am older? Then his mom replied: yes if you to ######### and lift weights yes. As she was tucking me in bed. I had a dream that at night the same thing happened but everyone was skeletons. I woke up that night went to hang out at school leaning against the wall like the cool kids. They said if I go in the school right now then it will prove Timmy is not a wimp. And it was night I did it anyway I saw a zombie run through the hall way I went in then one slammed into my face I went out and the cool kids said you survived zombies and skeletons? Wow your tough I haven't seen the tough gang of bullies do that without screaming and running out straight away. I felt brave, tough and like I was immortal I was so cool and not wimpy and tough I worked out with then went for long walks then In grade Five. It all changed it was The Cool Kids VS The Tough Gang of Bullies But I was out because They Said I wasn't ready I felt so excited for Grade 6 To be with them Then that year we Changed and I was in the fight no more horror nightmares for me I rush into battle It is like a war the Cool Kids said when were all old enough there will be a real war against us and them! To be Continued... |
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Zaugh
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| 14 May 2016 10:34 PM |
word wall
here, have a scᎥence booᏦ |
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XhatX
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| 14 May 2016 10:35 PM |
I read only about 3 words lol
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| 18 May 2016 05:21 PM |
| Sorry it was If you Do Like work out or whatever :/ |
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| 27 May 2016 08:25 PM |
| omg do u know what a paragrahp is? |
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| 28 May 2016 05:55 PM |
| @above then put some muscle into it When it said yes if you to it was supposed to not be there it was meant to be yes if you exercise and lift weights. |
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brpal
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| 28 May 2016 05:57 PM |
you should start reading books it's a great way to improve your writing also, try not doing random capitalization (eg: "...Then that year we Changed and I was in the fight...")
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nerd_man
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| 28 May 2016 06:06 PM |
If this story is actually serious, then it is severely flawed. The pacing is too fast, the story is too boring, the characters are bland, and there are grammatical errors everywhere.
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