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| 31 Mar 2016 04:36 AM |
https://youtu.be/eNSvBf0_eDk
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| 31 Mar 2016 05:24 AM |
I'd also like feedback on what I need to work on.
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| 31 Mar 2016 09:19 AM |
pretty nice video, XD.
i'd say what you'd need to improve on is make the movements a bit more smoother at the start. maybe a part 2
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| 31 Mar 2016 09:29 AM |
| I think that #######, was great, you had good stop motion, you added #####, sound #######, and you ######## gave credit to the makers of the #####! That'# some good stuff. But work on your stop motion a little more, and if you don't use #####, use it it'# a easier way to make stop ####### with ###########, I find it easy myself, so please improve on camera and stop motion. |
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| 31 Mar 2016 01:36 PM |
1. almost similar to most machinimas 2. the ship isn't in water. 3. the stopmotion needs to be an illusion that it is stopmotion because stopmotion is an illusion. 4. i got nothing.
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| 31 Mar 2016 01:40 PM |
At 1:33 time stamp, you stole part of my siggy.
www.roblox.com/Siggy-item?id=278816046 www.roblox.com/SM64-Theme-item?id=1280470 |
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| 31 Mar 2016 10:59 PM |
1. Stray away from clichés, like the sad music with the monochrome image. 2. Introduction is too lengthy and colorless. Work on making it shorter and also making it more interesting. 3. The scenes are also very lengthy, add more action and change to the story.
Other than that, the story is pretty good, just work on improving stop-motion skills so you could convey your idea in a more desirable way. Good luck :) |
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