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| 11 Mar 2016 04:16 PM |
(verse 1) Lil $hotta See i'm the real goblin I ain't talkin the green goblin, Look at that boy he sobbing Now he over here slobbing Problem solving we mobbing Cashing out i'm always shopping He still talkin crazy stuff still so it's time to get to stomping, Double 00 Gxng yea we the real goblins (hook x2) Real goblins killin everythin real goblins (verse 2) yung Slaya Real goblins everytime I step through I kill a verse pick up the whole song and put it in a hearse [N] I'm a real curse Everyone thinkin they make real rap but they don't They say I suck let me hear your crap then they stutter and say uhh maybe sometime later SO I tell them they aint real they just haters No one can get to my level Especially when they sell they're soul to the devil (hook x2)
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| 11 Mar 2016 04:17 PM |
| We are a good collab that was tight. |
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| 11 Mar 2016 04:29 PM |
Your rhyme is bad and stretches too long, the entire song is not even half the length of a proper verse.
It is formatted horribly too and your stage names are cringy.
There is lots of room for improvement. I'll update my rating, to be generous... 3.5/10 :)
Perhaps spend more time on your writing, more complex rhymes, longer verses and double-checking grammar.
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| 11 Mar 2016 04:32 PM |
| I appreciate the tips but it's above a 3 but it's your opinion so i don't have say over you. But would you like to do a song together if you ro rap? |
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| 11 Mar 2016 04:35 PM |
you're not good enough to collab with me sry
there are a few equals on this magical mystical place called rorap proboards though, namely a man called Ilwiri or something along those lines ;) |
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| 11 Mar 2016 04:37 PM |
| I am good, but you don't have to be rude and what ate proboards..? |
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| 11 Mar 2016 04:52 PM |
rorap.proboards
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and garbo. |
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| 17 Mar 2016 07:25 PM |
when yung slaya tries to pretend he's never been on the proboards
don't play
this was horrible |
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| 17 Mar 2016 07:26 PM |
| The fact that theres no beat makes it a 1/10 for me. Lyrics wise? 2/10 very boring s**t. |
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| 18 Mar 2016 12:13 AM |
"you're not good enough to collab with me sry"
idk why but that triggers me a little.... That's pretty arrogant. Remember that everyone starts somewhere, and you were just as bad as him too at one point. He's not asking to be on your album either, rather for you to do a song with him for his benefit. |
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