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Re: Fleetcom || The Formation

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elijahiscool is not online. elijahiscool
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22 Feb 2016 05:18 AM
In the year 2025 most of the Earth’s civilizations were eradicated and mostly contaminated due to a nuclear fallout. There only remained one main governmental power, with multiple insurgent groups within it, and many scattered factions across the globe left over from nations that survived the attacks. The United States remained in that power, and due to the actions of the their President at the time, caused the world to revolt against them.

Five years ago in 2020, a President was elected who promised his people to keep them safe, to ensure peace and security. He began borrowing money from other nations, putting the US into further debt than it already was, and secretly building a massive army. He used the excuse that America needed the funds for damages that a major earthquake had caused in the Eastern half of the US. This President was a master of manipulation, getting anything he wanted through subtle coercion.

For four years, the US President built up this massive army, and soon many citizens both from the US and other countries began to notice. But before they were able to convene and question him, the borders and all communications to and from the US were cut. Massive walls going across all borders were put up, armed men and heavy weaponry was set in many checkpoints throughout these borders. The President had effectively cut off any communication from the outside world.

It did not take long for riots and revolting to take place. Curfews across the nation were set in place, and any violators were either jailed or executed, or even disappeared completely. Soon, fear overtook the citizens, and they begin to obey their new laws, and adjust to the lives they were forced to lead.

Shortly after these restrictions were set upon the US, massive air vehicles began to be spotted in the skies. The President quickly broadcasted himself to the people of the nation, giving them a simple explanation.

The President’s army was completed. He had used most of the funds he received in forced donations to create a massive aerial army, one that was capable of annihilating entire nations if he so pleased. He called it the ‘Fleet Command’, placing himself under a ‘Fleet Commander’. The Fleet Commander would control the military, and the President would control the nation and its people. Their main base of operations was under a flagship that both the President and Commander worked on, a massive helicarrier, with a self-sustaining energy system.



After the President had finished his broadcast, the Commander ordered the fleet to destroy the other nations outside the US. City after city was bombed, razed, and mostly annihilated. The use of nuclear weapons was approved, and in a matter of days, the United States stood as one of the only nation that wasn’t black and charred.

Before these other nations were destroyed, though, they gave their own lives to stop it. They were severely underpowered against the might of the Fleet Command, who easily took down every jet, missile, and naval vehicle that was sent against them. The leaders of other nations tried to hide in deep underground bunkers, but were quickly apprehended and killed in grotesque firing squads, at the President’s pleasure.

Those inside the US, citizens or ones not in the military branches, were very unaware of the mass genocide that had taken place. However, once the President had ordered down the borders and allowed communication back, it did not take long for people to figure out what had happened.

Some of the higher ranked militants leaked footage of the chaos, and it quickly spread, causing a massive revolt against the people once more. These militants were quickly caught and executed on live television, further enraging the people.

Months passed, and soon the new year 2025 came. By then, the States were divided into two halves, no longer United. The western side of the states were broken up between many groups that vowed to put a stop to the Fleet Command, and many factions and guilds formed, widespread throughout the areas. The Eastern side, contained the operations of the Fleet Command, and what they still considered their ‘America’. The Fleetcom had used most of their resources in the bombings, and were forced to take defensive measures in order to rebuilt their weapon stock. Due to this, they had began to be engaged in a constant state of rebuilding and fighting off the insurgents and factions.

In the present day of 2026, the Fleet Command and the remaining portion of America still stand strong. Each day, they strive their hardest to fight off enemy advances, and to thwart the growth of other growing powers. Most of the globe was cut off due to the nuclear fallout, but some places had hospitable zones, where factions began to rebuild their nations in secret.

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Elijahiscool
“The Fleet Command” © 2016
(Note: This has been an exert from an e-book I’ve been working on, and I’ve decided to let Fleetcom use it if they decide to as a background story)
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elijahiscool is not online. elijahiscool
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22 Feb 2016 05:20 AM
And yes, I legitimately copy righted this haha
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elijahiscool is not online. elijahiscool
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22 Feb 2016 05:25 AM
Criticisms would be appreciated, this is a different step that I don't usually take when writing lore, as it was partially an original idea than what I wrote for A-SOV.
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FRKZD is not online. FRKZD
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22 Feb 2016 05:27 AM
10/10 inspired.

Undecrypted
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elijahiscool is not online. elijahiscool
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22 Feb 2016 05:27 AM
haha thanks undec
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elijahiscool is not online. elijahiscool
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22 Feb 2016 06:07 AM
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elijahiscool is not online. elijahiscool
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22 Feb 2016 06:32 AM
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UncleAli is not online. UncleAli
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22 Feb 2016 06:33 AM
nice, writing is something rarely seen these days and you seem to nail it perfectly

i remain,
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elijahiscool is not online. elijahiscool
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22 Feb 2016 06:34 AM
thanks dude
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dans59 is not online. dans59
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22 Feb 2016 10:57 AM
in year 2020 kayne west was elected to make america great again !!
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22 Feb 2016 10:58 AM
IN THE YEAR 2525
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piratetrev2 is not online. piratetrev2
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22 Feb 2016 11:00 AM
It is gross because America is in it.
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Staeo2 is not online. Staeo2
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22 Feb 2016 01:44 PM
i bet trump set up fleetcom xd


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elijahiscool is not online. elijahiscool
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22 Feb 2016 02:51 PM
@Stat

Haha there was a little inspiration for a dictator there

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And yes it is about America mostly because Fleetcom is based around that
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elijahiscool is not online. elijahiscool
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22 Feb 2016 02:58 PM
Still waiting on Roy/3eh to get on steam to read it, any more criticism would be great.

My main plan was to have this as a background, and anytime Fleetcom did anything major like wars or such, have this as a basis for another lore explanation behind the group's actions, if they wanted to have a lore piece to read.

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3eh is not online. 3eh
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22 Feb 2016 02:59 PM
Home from vacation, about to read!!!
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PhantomEssence is not online. PhantomEssence
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22 Feb 2016 03:01 PM
Oh hey Elijah.

Give me your opinion on this bud.

http://phantomessencemarc.deviantart.com/art/Afterfall-s-Outline-i-know-it-s-bad-alright-592281015
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3eh is not online. 3eh
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22 Feb 2016 03:03 PM
Great read sir eli, gonna use this since it is okay with you
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elijahiscool is not online. elijahiscool
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22 Feb 2016 03:09 PM
@Phantom

I'm enjoying it so far, I've always been fascinated with Chernobyl and the disaster the surrounded it. And man you don't need to criticize yourself in the title haha, everyone learns at some point, and so far I'm impressed.

I like the writing style a lot too, its not too pretentious and doesn't have the overuse of bigger words.

I'm also getting a nice STALKER: Chernobyl vibe from it, which was an awesome game if you haven't had the chance to play it.

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Now that I've read it through, what I got from it was that after the main disaster, a group of civilians leftover in the city formed up and created a 'new life' beneath the city that was devastated above them, calling themselves the Afterfall.

Good work man!
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elijahiscool is not online. elijahiscool
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22 Feb 2016 03:15 PM
@Roy

Sweet!
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PhantomEssence is not online. PhantomEssence
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22 Feb 2016 03:23 PM
"I'm also getting a nice STALKER: Chernobyl vibe from it, which was an awesome game if you haven't had the chance to play it."

Couldn't stop thinking "Strelok Strelok Strelok" while writing it. Seriously, I became frightened.
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elijahiscool is not online. elijahiscool
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22 Feb 2016 03:55 PM
Haha nice
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22 Feb 2016 04:27 PM
keep some other career options open champ
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Poorlawn is not online. Poorlawn
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22 Feb 2016 04:40 PM
im not a fan
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23 Feb 2016 12:17 AM
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