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| 26 Jan 2016 09:18 AM |
You wake one morning on the side of the road, not really a road, but a dirt road. "Where am i?" You ask yourself. So, in order to get some help you have to find civilization. As you're walking you see a robo-looking-horse-thing, but it didn't look like it was using advanced technology, but more steamed power. The cowboy picks you up on his horse. "Where you headed son?" he asked you. "To the nearest place with civilization." you told him. "Hang on to yer' horses!" he said. "Literally." he said, and he then sped of to the nearest area, Steam Ville. They're weren't good with catchy clever names, but it was their happy little town. You finally arrived, but what you saw was crazy! It was filled with mutated humans! From extra limbs, to double the heads! "Here you are son." the cowboy said. "Hows bout' we get some drinks?" he said, "I can tell you got pretty exhausted from all that walkin!" he said with a smile. You then arrive at the saloon. "2 Grape juices." He asked the bartender. You decide not to question the grape juice, and drank. "Hey sheriff..." the bartender said wiping a glass cup. "You hear about those demons?" he asked. "Last night they were making so much noise, nobody could sleep!" he told the sheriff. "Hmph." the sheriff grunted "Its only just days before they decide to kill someone." said the sheriff, then he started to leave. "If you need any help, i'll be in my office, there's a hotel across from here and to the left, you can stop there if you need to rest." he said, then he walked off.
:Character Sheet:
Name:
Age Can be 10 to 20):
Species (Human, Mutation, Demon, Animal, Robot, etc):
Appearance:
Special Attack:
Main Attack:
Companions (If any):
Country you're from:
Country you came from (If any):
State you were last in:
:rules:
1: Ignore trolls
2: You can be in a relationship with other characters, just don't take it to far.
3: Be polite to the fellow RPers.
4: You can get into fight with other players, just don't make it where you're invincible.
5: To become an admin, you must be nice, have good grammar, and help around the RP (Admins can accept CS's, take over the RP if i'm gone, and kick players out, if necessary.)
6: Help people out if they need help.
7: Do your best with your grammar.
8: Have fun!
We will start at 5 RPers.
Special thanks to ThatBlazingPony, Roxasthedemon, and Slacktivist! If they show up i wil rank them to admin. |
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| 26 Jan 2016 09:25 AM |
Marked.
Will post my mutant CS tonight. |
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| 26 Jan 2016 09:27 AM |
| Good! thats one person, and since you helped me with the subject you are an admin. |
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| 26 Jan 2016 09:29 AM |
Well nice idea, but:
1. A few grammatical errors. 2. In the cs you can be 10-20, but what 10 year old is going to fight demons. 3. "Country you're from: Country you came from (If any): State you were last in: " can be replaced with bio and will give you a glimpse of their life. 4. You should've made paragraphs instead of that word wall.
:just a few problems, I won't join simply because I'm not interested in the plot, but it's still a nice idea.
The last man on earth sat alone in a room... There was a knock at the door... |
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| 26 Jan 2016 09:33 AM |
| i knew i forgot something! feel free to add a bio to your CS, and i guess 10 year olds dont fight demons lol, so ill swap out the 10 with 15 |
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| 26 Jan 2016 09:36 AM |
| i will do better with my grammar aswell. roblox should add a thread editing button tho, and ill try to make paragraphs aswell |
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birmie123
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| 26 Jan 2016 03:12 PM |
since im starting the "help the new rpers association" i gotta help
alright, so the first thing is grammar. i know im not using that now but that's because it's out of context and i dont feel like it, as it's not necessary while you're not doing something anyone else will care about.
however, when you're writing something "professionally", you should ALWAYS use grammar, except in certain circumstances where you don't use correct grammar to add onto the character or situation at hand.
the most common mistake i noticed in your grammar was how you didnt capitalize the word i. when you type "i" as a single word, it must always be capitalized. Ex; "I< went to the store today." "My mom told me I< needed to take out the trash."
as for writing styles, everyone has their own. some, such as myself, write much more serious than others, rarely including a joke out of dialogue unless the roleplay calls for it. others prefer to type out more silly, less thought out posts. personally, though i use serious writing more often than not, i recommend for roleplays like this writing more serious, as it seems to have a more serious than joking tone.
its not much help, ill admit, but becoming a good writer is a slow process, and despite me being on this forum for two years i'd hardly consider myself to be a good writer in terms of professional writing.
minecraft hard drilling is my favorite |
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| 26 Jan 2016 03:38 PM |
thanks for the tip, i'll try to do better.
but what i really want is people to join |
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marc12267
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| 26 Jan 2016 04:05 PM |
What bimr and sk8er said.
"Oh my god, they killed Kusanagi!" "YOU BASTARDS!" |
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| 26 Jan 2016 05:06 PM |
| i need 4 RPers to start dont worry |
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| 26 Jan 2016 06:05 PM |
Name:Helena Coredogan Age:19 Appearance:Long black hair,long eyelashes,blue-green eyes,she usually wears jeans and regular shirts. Right now she's wearing regular jeans and a shirt that says "Helena". She has black converse. She also has a tattoo and her back of a flower. Special attack:Backflip kick(idk) Main attack:Uppercut then kick (idk) Companions:N/A Country:USA State:California |
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| 26 Jan 2016 06:12 PM |
Age (Can be 15 to 20):
Species (Human, Mutation, Demon, Animal, Robot, etc):
Appearance:
Special Attack:
Main Attack:
Companions (If any):
Country you're from:
Country you came from (If any):
State you were last in:
Bio:
This is more of an improved version of it, you have to be 15+ and add a bio, but we can learn they're bio along the way. |
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| 26 Jan 2016 06:14 PM |
| and you forgot your species. |
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Vaporeon3
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| 28 Jan 2016 08:49 PM |
| that's a very limited age range |
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