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| 21 Jul 2015 11:28 PM |
Name: Truth to be said.
Characters: Rose-main character, nice. Narrator Brooke-popular,mean Jake-the boy that Rose and Brooke likes. Eleysha- a friend of Brooke which always follows her Gianna- a friend of Brooke which always follows her Cops Doctor
Place: School lockers
Lines: Narrator: Brooke and Eleysha studies in the same school and they are now in their second year of high school. Brooke used to date Jake, but they broke up. Now, Rose grew close to Jake and Brooke is Jealous.
Rose: -walks to Jake- Good morning ☺
Jake: Oh good mornin. Lets go.
Eleysha: -looks at Rose and Jake- Brooke
Gianna: -looks at Rose and Jake- You should look at that.
Brooke: -Turns around to look- Ugh! Rose!
Cafeteria: Narrator: ~At lunch~
-Rose and Jake walks together to a table with lunch-
-Brooke, Eleysha and Gianna sitting at a table already-
Eleysha: Look who’s here…
Brooke: UGH! What is wrong with her!
Gianna: Calm down Brooke.
Brooke: YOU EXPECT ME TO CALM DOWN?! UGH!
A street barely with no one. Narrator: ~Three weeks later at night~
-Brooke dragging Eleysha’s hair and walks-
Eleysha: Brooke, I’m really sorry! Please, don’t!
Rose: Brooke? What is she doing here?
-Rose tries to follow Brooke and Eleysha-
Forest Narrator: ~In the forest~
-Rose catches up-
-Knive stabbed into Eleysha-
Brooke: I’m sorry, you know too much…
Rose: -runs away-
Narrator: ~One day later at night in Brooke’s house~
Rose: -goes to Brooke’s house- -presses the doorbell-
Brooke: -opens door- Oh…What are you doing here huh?
Rose: I saw it…yesterday night…
Brooke: What?
Rose: You killed her…You killed Eleysha…
Brooke: I-
Rose: Why did you kill her?!
Brooke: She simply knew too much… -body shaking-
Rose: -body shaking- I’m going to tell the cops, come with me or it will be too late.
Brooke: No! Please don’t! I promise I won’t ever do it again! Please!
Rose: -shakes head- Come with me or it will be too late, this is your last warning. -walks away-
Brooke: -sees a glass flower vase- -hands shake- -grabs flower vase- -hits Rose’s head with vase-
Rose: Ah! -collapse-
Brooke: It’s…it’s all your fault.. -body shakes-
Hospital Narrator: ~In the hospital~
Jake: How is she doctor? How is she?!
Doctor: She’s fine, but some of her memories will be lost, we are not sure when all her memories will come back. -walks away-
Jake: Walks to Rose’s bed. -sits down on a chair- Rose…
Rose: Uh…
Jake: Rose! You’re awake!
Rose: Jake…
Jake: You remember me!
-Cop comes in-
Cop: Are you Rose?
Jake: She is.
Cop: We noticed you might have been hit in the head by some kind of glass. Do you remember anything about it?
Rose: N-no…
Narrator: ~One month later in the hospital~
-Gianna walks in- -Gianna puts photo of Brooke and Eleysha on table- -leaves-
Rose: -Wakes up- A picture?
Ouch! My head hurts! Huh? My…my memories are back!
Narrator: After that, Rose told everything to the cops and Brooke was jailed for nine years. Rose and Jake’s relationship got deeper.
Jake: Mind to go on a date with me?
Rose: :D
-End-
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| 06 Dec 2015 03:11 PM |
| I am a lead roll and i would like to audition for brooke please? |
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| 06 Dec 2015 04:49 PM |
| Actully nevermind can I please be rose? |
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| 11 Dec 2015 04:58 PM |
| This is amazing! Could I be one of the character? C: |
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| 03 Jan 2016 03:53 PM |
| I would like to try out for Brooke |
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| 03 Jan 2016 03:57 PM |
| Or Rose I really don't care. |
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| 11 Mar 2016 06:29 AM |
| I thought that the script was great. My only problem was that the transitions, like from the street to the forest, were GARBAGE. It's like Oh, we're here in the street! *Only three lines are said and then we shoot to the forest* What the- What happened to the street! And also, what happens between the street and the forest? Does Eleysha keep fighting or does she just submit and let Brooke drag her by her hair? Does Rose almost get caught? Is anything else said between the street and the woods? We need to know! Transitions are VITAL to a story! Otherwise its just a jumble of the main scenes made to look like a movie! We are NOT amateur actors, we are some of the best on Roblox! If you'll notice, the vast majority of the scenes in movies are TRANSITIONS! If the EXPERTS do it, why shouldn't we? |
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| 11 Mar 2016 06:30 AM |
| Also, it isn't JUST the street and the forest; we need to improve ALL of the transitions, and I'll help you if you would like an assist. |
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| 11 Mar 2016 06:34 AM |
If I could edit previous posts I would, otherwise I wouldn't have so many replies. Why does Brooke kill Eleysha? What does "She knew too much" mean? Knew too much about what? Her jealousy? We don't know and we SHOULD know.
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| 17 Mar 2016 02:59 AM |
| Well I figured that it might be too long if I added those details. I'll go make the changes. Thanks anyways. |
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| 30 May 2016 04:18 PM |
| Can I audition as a cop????? |
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Kiritsugu
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| 30 May 2016 04:20 PM |
"Mind to go on a date with me?"
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BE_oH1PN77U
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jade2321
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| 04 Jun 2016 07:12 PM |
| May I apply for brooke? She seems very appealing to me. |
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| 06 Jun 2016 07:41 PM |
Creepa you don't know if they are going to make a part 2 you never know if part 2 could be a prequel
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| 27 Nov 2016 07:56 PM |
| Could I audition for the girl who gets stabbed. Sorry it turned her name into hashtags. |
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