metro2100
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| 04 Dec 2015 01:12 PM |
When walking do north i did not see assap.It was cold but in my planet it was warm but kinda dark.Then DJ said "Its friking cold we should find a place do stay" "Yeah youre right"I said.We saw some kind of guys in black suits handing over some kind of bag.It was money "What the hell are they doing?"I asked "Should we ask?"said DJ.Then that one moment i felt something flew next me very fast "They spoted us!"Said Dj.We ran.I got hurt again...but something was not right like before i was stabed i did not feel pain so much but the knife has some effect ore something.I fell.I was shot.My luck wasnt good at all "ARE YOU OK?!"asked Dj "Yes...i think the pain wasnt so strong" as i said then just that one time i said "We have do fight..." "Are you crazy?!?!"As DJ said "No im not we have the power do attack so we have do used!"I said "Uh...then looks like it is the plan B." said Dj and we fighted.I felt stronger and in the end of the fight i could not move my self i fell..."Wake up!Wake up!"as Dj said...i did not realy heard anything else
I woke up at the same spot "What happend?"I asked "I dont know you just fell and i dont know you just did not wake up." Said DJ.But then i felt something "Hes near..." "Whos near?"Dj asked "Assapagan hes near i can feel it!I need find him"I said "Why do you need do find him?" "He was my only good friend on our planets.I need his help do get rid of him..." I said "Who?Get rid of who?" He asked "Sacosainz Leader...If i find Assap...next is gona be Venom..."
________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________To be continue..._______________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________ Part 5 coming out soon il be probaply adding assapagan back do the story !!!! |
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metro2100
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| 04 Jan 2016 11:55 AM |
>"Austism."
>"wAt?!?!?!?!"
It's a rude way of telling you that your story has tons of grammatical mistakes and that the plot and writing in general is pretty garbage.
But hey, you can always get better. |
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