Collin201
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| 24 Nov 2015 09:27 PM |
http://forum.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=178541386
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Collin201
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| 24 Nov 2015 09:29 PM |
if you think it's bad then tell me what you think i should change and i'll rewrite some parts
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Tasha5266
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| 24 Nov 2015 09:34 PM |
no lol
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Tasha5266
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| 24 Nov 2015 09:35 PM |
| You should probably try to make out who you are in a better way. I see Chinese, Roman, but I don't know what race you guys originated from. |
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| 24 Nov 2015 09:36 PM |
i could've made it a lot longer lol @combatance
and lore is usually supposed to be long
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Tasha5266
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| 24 Nov 2015 09:37 PM |
| A lore is suppose to be decently long but exciting, personally I didn't read it fully, it just really didn't 'interest' me a ton, try to make it more exciting. That lore is more like a history lesson or a time line, lol. |
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Collin201
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| 24 Nov 2015 09:37 PM |
Tasha in the story it states that lol... we started out as the roman empire
in real life, scientists predict that if the roman empire never fell, humans would be on mars by now due to it's advanced technology
this is what we're based on-- what the world would be like if rome never fell
In the story it says that
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| 24 Nov 2015 09:38 PM |
that's fine if it didn't interest you, no story is for everyone.
i'm just saying that what you're looking for can easily be found in it.
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Tasha5266
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| 24 Nov 2015 09:40 PM |
| Well, I don't think that story is going to interest many people, but good luck, you should ask a few others and see what they think. |
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| 24 Nov 2015 09:47 PM |
alrighty
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