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Re: YES! Magazine::.. Scary Story Entry 1

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iMaddyy is not online. iMaddyy
Joined: 14 Apr 2014
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11 Oct 2015 09:20 AM
"IT WASN'T ME! I'M NOT CRAZY! I SWEAR IT ON MY LIFE!"
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May 15th, 2015, 11:PM EST Time

I was sitting there on my bed, reading the 'Blood of Olympus'. Dad was staying late for work while Mom went and did some errands outside. It was getting pretty dark outside, and the time was 11:PM. Yet I was so clueless that my balcony door was open...
I spent the whole time reading the book, but then I suddenly got the feeling of being watched. I then realized that the balcony door was open, so I sprinted there to lock the door shut. I was getting scared now.

I never opened my balcony door. I decided that nothing was there and maybe I did open it this morning. I went over to my desk and took out my Mac and went all over twitter and the internet. On the news, it has been saying that mysterious killings and sightings have been found all over this town. My mom said that we're going to move, but not now. But then I got a sudden chill. My balcony door...? Right on cue, downstairs in the kitchen, I could hear frying pans and plates crashing down on the floor. Me being the curious idiot, I opened the door and went downstairs. I made sure to do this slowly, and quietly because who knows who it is? As I got downstairs to the living room, I slowly made my way down the kitchen. But no one was there.

I saw the plates and frying pans on the floor, and some cracked. I got a serious feeling of me getting watched, and I was getting terrified. "What if all that murderer from the news is coming after me?" I stupidly checked my back, but nothing was there. Then the doorbell ringed. I'm so glad for that peephole, because I could open the door to anyone if I didn't have it. I checked the peephole, and I silently thanked the lord because it was my Mom. I opened the door, and I literally jumped on her. "Casey! Calm down, what's with all this hugging?", my mom pushed me off. "I thought someone was watching me upstairs. But then I heard noises of frying pans and plates crashing down in the kitchen, so I went downstairs and I found this.", I walked towards the kitchen and towards the mess, and I knew my mom was following me. "Ugh. I'll come back downstairs, just let me get changed." so I waited for her, until I heard a scream. I jumped at the sound of my Mom screaming, so I went upstairs as fast as I can, and when I reached the door, the screaming stopped, I was PANICKING. "What's happened to my Mom?!?!", I thought to myself. So, I opened the door, slowly, and very quietly.


You know how in those scary movies when the girl/boy opens the door, and then there is this some type of creepy mystery thing in it, and then they suddenly plunge to their deaths? Yeah, that's EXACTLY what happened. Except my Mom plunged to her death. I saw her sitting on the king sized-bed, and I walked closer, and then I suddenly wished I did not. Her neck was cut! Blood was everywhere, spilling from her neck. I covered my mouth and closed my eyes, tears threatening to spill out. Her head was chopped off. I couldn't stand to see this. What was even more horrifying? The window was open. My Mom and Dad has a huge window, so anyone is able to come in or out. I suddenly froze in fear. I knew someone was behind me. I turned around, slowly as I can. And there he was. The guy who killed my Mom and chopped her head off, was right there. He had blood spilled everywhere on him, so it was pretty obvious it was him. On his right hand, he had a huge knife, the blade being at least 1 ft tall in height. I looked at him, and he looked at me.

And what seemed like forever, he started tramping towards me. I got my instincts back together, so I easily dodged his knife and went downstairs. I could hear police cars. As I got downstairs, I got the longest knife I found and tried to protect myself with it. I knew he was following me, so I was waiting for him to come after me. I was hiding behind the stairs, so once he came down, I plunged my knife right into his neck. He screamed out in pain. I didn't realize he was quick, so he slided his knife where my rib cage was. I screamed out in pain. I then realized police was coming from the door, but when they came, the killer wasn't here anymore. How did he get away so fast?!? As the police officers went upstairs and some stayed downstairs with me, I told them the whole story. I then told them to come upstairs, so they could see my mom's dead body. But it wasn't there. "BELIEVE ME! IT WAS RIGHT THERE! HER HEAD WAS ON THE CHAIR AND HER BODY WAS ON THE BED! I SWEAR IT!", I yelled, like a maniac, but I was panicking so much that my vision started to fade. "Ma'am", the officer started off, "We think that this was all self harm. Have you been taking any drugs?" I tried to speak, but my vision was fading black, and I dropped the knife out of my hands, I closed my eyes, and then nothing happened.

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May 16th, 2015, 9:20 AM.

I woke up, wondering why I wasn't in my room. I then dawned into the flashbacks of yesterday. They didn't believe me. They thought I was doing self harm and drugs. But before I could tell them, I fainted because of my injuries. Wow. I realized that I was in a padded cell, and I knew what they were for. They were for people who were going mental. I was on a bed, and everything was white. About 20 minutes or so, a police officer opened the door and then closed it, coming closer to me. He sat down on the bed.
"Why am I here..?", I said, sounding woozy. "You're in jail.", the police officer said.
I widened my eyes. "W-Why?!", I said. "You're in jail because yesterday, during the incident, you had a knife in your hands, your clothes were stained in blood, your hair was all messed up, and you were saying things like "He came after me! He killed my Mom! She was-", I cut him off. "HE DID COME AFTER ME! I NEVER DID SELF HARM, I WAS PROTECTING MYSELF FROM THE KILLER, HE DID THIS TO ME!! IT WASN'T ME! I SAW MY MOTHERS OWN BODY RIGHT THERE, HER HEAD WAS CHOPPED OFF, AND THE WINDOW WAS OPEN!", I was suddenly crying hard, and the police officer was trying to comfort me, but it didn't work. "We can't believe your story. We couldn't find the body of your Mom. We need real proof. We went with the story of you going in great depression, so you did self harm and drugs.", the police officer said.


This wasn't true. I never did self harm. I never did drugs. I was just protecting myself from the killer! "Anyways, I have to go. Enjoy your meal." but I started yelling after him. ""I DIDN'T DO ANYTHING!! I'M NOT CRAZY! I SWEAR IT ON MY LIFE!" I ran towards the door, kicked the police officer and grabbed his gun. I ran all the way down the entrance
to the woods, sitting down a tree stump. "I'm not crazy.", I thought to myself. "They're the crazy ones! THEY DON'T BELIEVE ME!".

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As few months passed, I was tracked down because of the incident at the Jail. Police officers think that I'm now a Psychopath kiler. And this was true. I did whatever to kill others, because it felt so good. I don't why. My killer look was Black tights, with a white tank top with blood all over it, a black jacket, with military boots. I had the knife from the house incident, so now I can kill people with it.

This is my story.
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iMaddyy is not online. iMaddyy
Joined: 14 Apr 2014
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11 Oct 2015 09:35 AM
This is a fiction story- this is not real. And when I say 'This is my Story.', I mean it was Casey's story. She is now a killer, getting hunted. I wanted to do something like almost creepypasta x3. Like, Casey the Killer. ;o
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InfraredChasm is not online. InfraredChasm
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11 Oct 2015 10:45 AM
... That was unnecessary information. We already know it's fiction and we already know it's "Casey's" story.

Then again, you have better grammar than most newbags so I respect you for that.
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iMaddyy is not online. iMaddyy
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14 Oct 2015 05:16 PM
:D You spotted her name!!! ;D
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floopy54321 is not online. floopy54321
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14 Oct 2015 05:45 PM
Reminds me of the scary story 'The Mime'
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Shrekticus is not online. Shrekticus
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14 Oct 2015 06:03 PM
'As few months passed, I was tracked down because of the incident at the Jail. Police officers think that I'm now a Psychopath kiler. And this was true. I did whatever to kill others, because it felt so good. I don't why. My killer look was Black tights, with a white tank top with blood all over it, a black jacket, with military boots. I had the knife from the house incident, so now I can kill people with it.

This is my story.'

The last paragraph killed your story.

"And I hate all of you." - Squidward
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rockmax2112alt is not online. rockmax2112alt
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14 Oct 2015 06:22 PM
Marked so I can roast
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foIie is not online. foIie
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14 Oct 2015 06:51 PM
this is so cliche, boring and expected


she said, she said, she said, why don't you just drop dead?
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iMaddyy is not online. iMaddyy
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24 Oct 2015 09:56 AM
LOL. You guys are right! Thank you for your criticisms. This is my first roblox 'story' and I really sucked :P.
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Timepockie is not online. Timepockie
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24 Oct 2015 10:22 AM
Okay, your story is stupid and full of plotholes, and I was originally going to bash you for that, but then you did something even worse than write bad literature - you insulted people with mental illnesses.

"Police officers think that I'm now a Psychopath kiler. And this was true. I did whatever to kill others, because it felt so good."

By definition if you are a psychopath killing people doesn't feel good because nothing feels good because you have no emotion. Psychopathy is a serious illness that affects millions of people but it is so stigmatized by society that people are often alienated for it and denied the ability to learn emotion due to the stigma. Sure, some killers are psychopaths, but most killers aren't psychopaths and most psychopaths aren't killers. Just for your usage of "psychopath killer" I hope you rot in hell.
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wolfboy791 is not online. wolfboy791
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24 Oct 2015 10:53 AM
remember to it to 2
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Kipec is not online. Kipec
Joined: 25 Nov 2010
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24 Oct 2015 12:18 PM
YES! magazine is terrible
and you in fappe

lol remember when it was banned? good times
alright i will start the roast off

you seem to be 12-13 years old considering you fill in the fact that you can't get a job with these stupid groups that don't even PAY you.
>fappe
>yes magazine
>oliver & james(some group that will NEVER get popular considering there is already like 345685423543 coffee groups)
oh, and you like ariana grande? confirmed hormonal teenager, she is a terrible person with a terrible attitude and her music sucks, ok next.
>"there is no such thing as peace.

"I love you. I'm in love with you. I have tried to kill it, hide from it, but I can't. And I don't want to anymore." -gossip girl, blair saying to chuck
.:chair:."

oh look, she is "emo" too

YOU CAN'T WRITE.
>cliche and unoriginal "horror" story
>basically no exposition, at all
>the ending was just... terrible
>using an exclamation mark is easier than writing your entire dialog in caps
>the dialog is terrible

ok rock ill let you get the rest

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BrandonS677 is not online. BrandonS677
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24 Oct 2015 12:20 PM
Scary story: School on Saturday
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DaggerJax is not online. DaggerJax
Joined: 05 Feb 2012
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24 Oct 2015 12:39 PM
killer/monster disappearing or something so officals think protagonist is insane cliche


somebody hasn't been taking their anti-edgy pills | ot's meteorologist
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Timepockie is not online. Timepockie
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24 Oct 2015 09:33 PM
"Scary story: School on Saturday "

That'd be a dream come true for me!
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SenseiOnion is not online. SenseiOnion
Joined: 13 Jul 2014
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24 Oct 2015 09:34 PM
How about, "NO! Magazine"
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iMaddyy is not online. iMaddyy
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29 Oct 2015 06:06 PM
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PawzKat is not online. PawzKat
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29 Oct 2015 06:42 PM
Wait, am I seeing double, or was this posted before?
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