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| 08 Jun 2015 08:23 PM |
I showed up, but I showed up late. I came to catch bodys, then dump those bodys in a lake. I came to kill puppies and stuff ‘em in a crate. I came to thrill my buddies, oh god is this my fate.
Here comes a lyrical ambassador, about to create another massive massicre. My s[] go so hard, they make all the bars in capitol, im a beast but treated like a harmless animal. Im attached and not detachable, im not about to act rational, not about to act practical. Im a rap bot, im lyrically made mechanical. My level of authenticity is not touchable, lil b[] ill eat you’re a$$ up like a lunchable. Like I said im an animal but im still not huntable. Im climbing a mountain of height, you just couldn’t sustain, im eradicating every memory up outta your brain, your b[] smell f1shy like shes from Maine. But I still make that b[] w3t like shes standing in the rain. Oh god im insane. Im from the streets, that’s were my heart will always remain. My freestyles are fire, I say this s[] is from the dome I bet you five dollars they call me a liar. Sir, starting beef with me is not your desire, they talk s[] about my lyrics because im the one they admire. Im making n[]s tear up they contracts, and n[] im so h1gh im in the Adirondacks. B[] I make your left brain compact, once you bomb me im sure ill bomb back, got that?
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| 08 Jun 2015 08:31 PM |
The syllable count is fine, could be improved. I liked the idea of it, good bars. This is probably around an 8.8/10 |
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Indiella
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| 08 Jun 2015 09:20 PM |
| Good rhymes and good bars, but the grammar and spelling could improve. 8/10. :) |
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| 08 Jun 2015 10:18 PM |
| This right here is the descent into insanity described in "rapping", this person has become so egotistical that they believe they are good rappers, that they write about sadistic massacres in the hopes of people being amused by it, but it is not amusing. I would recommend you help this man into a mental institution before it is too late. |
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| 09 Jun 2015 06:58 PM |
| @JimmyV Thanks for your support! |
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darius979
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| 28 Sep 2015 04:49 PM |
| That was amazing! 9/10 fr! Message me and check out my song and see how THAT is! Thanks, here's the link http://web.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=175076431 |
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| 28 Sep 2015 04:50 PM |
"I came to kill puppies and stuff ‘em in a crate."
jesus dude don't make me call peta or something |
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