ChanelG
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| 17 Oct 2014 04:59 PM |
[Intro (Alice)] Within that world of my own I could listen to a babbling brooke And hear a song that I could understand... I keep wishing it could be that way Because my world would be a Wonderland...
[Verse I - Chanel G]
I'm diving head first straight into the rabbit hole Trying to maintain the composure of my own soul Before the insanity I see all around me takes full control See I came to terms with when the harsh reality takes it's toll You fiend for fantasy before the truth swallows you whole Steady daydreaming, your mind fades to a peaceful bliss Wishing that things could have happened just like "this" I hate to say it now, but I'm a prisoner of my own dreams The pain is numb now, so I'm good now matter how upset I seem I'll fake a smile and stretch it from ear to ear, I'll be the Cheshire Maybe I'm this way because I simply cannot handle all the pressure There's nothing wrong with being crazy, it's the cruel [S] that makes me Wander off to my make-believe's, I get addicted then it takes me (Away...) The rabbit's late again, guess I better get a move on Searching for things about myself that I could improve on Too small so I reached for the note that read: "Eat Me" Grew a couple feet until my head was in the clouds Then after that I went for the note that read: "Drink Me" Shrank a couple sizes until I felt like I was tumbling down I remain falling, even when both of my feet are on the ground I love my Wonderland, a world that I can call my very own Where everything always goes my way, where I claim the throne Where I can stay in my comfort zone, where no tears are shown Where I'm far from infamous, proud for what I am known This is where I'm safe and sound, I have no reason to fear I suppose I'm just a little mad, then again everyone is around here
[Chorus - Indiella] I'm lost in Wonderland, Stuck in a place where I got the upperhand I'm lost in Wonderland, In my own place where the thunder's banned I'm lost in Wonderland, But I'm starting to see my thoughts plunder and, I'm lost in Wonderland, I'm, I'm...
[Verse II - Street]
I'm "drawn" to my imagination, I hope that drawing doesn't sketch it's way out, Visualizing myself on a yellow rick road, hoping it's the correct route, Spray painting my images on the canvas of illusions, I guess I have to put more time into my "rough draft" before I get into conclusions, Just incase they try to turn tables, I'll take off the meal, Just so I don't splash in the hate, like an envelope I keep reality "sealed", Images of me, enjoying every single second of this [D]amn life Those images are probably photoshopped, transferred into happiness by my own mind, So I take everything light, grammar, but gram-less words, If I don't make the cut, I'll make my own transection in my fantasy world, Enlightened by my own mind, like a lightbulb on my head, Fantasies always creative, never dull, like I sharpened my pencils lead, In my own world, but is it an alternative version?, If it is I don't know wether to control it, delete it, or be my own person, But I'd much rather live in my Wonderland, Alice, Why live in an ordinary house, when I can visualize a kings palace, Flip it over, the cords connected to my eyes, retinas, then I flip the image seen, My brain shooting images, so change them up during the scene , Life is a TV, but I don't know the channels, no TV guide, So I just create my own scenes, cable installed inside my mind, Reach to great depths, then pull them back, Get a marker and a globe, the only non-imaginative way to get my name across the map, If I get my luck up, I'll catch my four leaf clover before it falls, Why not instead shoot swishes, instead of gettin' air-balled, So get the beep into the depths of my fantasy, I just hope that beep wasn't a missed call,
[Chorus - Indiella] I'm lost in Wonderland, Stuck in a place where I got the upperhand I'm lost in Wonderland, In my own place where the thunder's banned I'm lost in Wonderland, But I'm starting to see my thoughts plunder and, I'm lost in Wonderland, I'm, I'm... (x2)
[Outro (Alice)] I keep wishing it could be that way Because my world would be a Wonderland...(x4)
All characters used from Alice In Wonderland © belong to Lewis Caroll. |
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| 17 Oct 2014 05:04 PM |
Good lyricism, but I don't like Alice in Wonderland sorry.
7/10 |
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minniem
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| 17 Oct 2014 05:07 PM |
FINALLY OMG. How long did you make us wait for this..like six months??
Anyways that was long, but the lyricism was great and the syllable count was on key. Not enough time to actually write a review for it atm, sorry. Theatre rehearsal.
Great job to all three of you! 9.5/10 |
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ChanelG
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| 17 Oct 2014 06:22 PM |
@wild It's a metaphor :P
And thanks guys! <3 |
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| 17 Oct 2014 06:32 PM |
| Gey But if it wasn't still kinda disgusting |
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| 17 Oct 2014 06:33 PM |
| @Chanel, my metaphors is hot XD |
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| 17 Oct 2014 06:35 PM |
| M4 says he got metaphors. Where dey at doe |
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Wobull
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| 17 Oct 2014 06:37 PM |
| SNOOP CLUTCH WITH THE HYPOCRISY |
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ChanelG
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| 17 Oct 2014 06:45 PM |
"Gey But if it wasn't still kinda disgusting"
What? |
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| 17 Oct 2014 06:47 PM |
| This phone is pissing me off but the reason it's ew is cause the style and a few overused bars I've seen from street but don't we all use bars sometimes? But overall 6.5/10 No offense but channels verse ruined some of this , just wasn't feeling the metaphors. But keep up the good work I guess.v |
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| 17 Oct 2014 06:49 PM |
| @channel I lowered the points cause this sount gehh. But either way it kinda sucked. |
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ChanelG
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| 17 Oct 2014 06:54 PM |
| I actually appreciate kingroses criticism, atleast it's constructive, thanks we will all use it I guess XD |
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| 17 Oct 2014 06:56 PM |
| That was really deep and meaningful...I loved this :D! The metaphors were beautifully written 10/10 |
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Wobull
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| 17 Oct 2014 06:56 PM |
"I'm "drawn" to my imagination, I hope that drawing doesn't sketch it's way out"
this looks forced af
i also don't like alice in wonderland so I think that some of them lines were cheesy |
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| 17 Oct 2014 06:57 PM |
| Thanks tbh the only reason this got good reviews cause they love chanel |
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ChanelG
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| 17 Oct 2014 07:03 PM |
| But that's none of my business |
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Indiella
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| 17 Oct 2014 07:18 PM |
| Great job Chanel and Street. :) |
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| 17 Oct 2014 07:20 PM |
| See another one that licks chanels ass then overrated her so she won't get better |
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