marcel878
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| 07 Jul 2015 01:58 PM |
| This is a story of how roblox began i will write story parts in the reply's area this was inspired by lucasH2003's thread http://www.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=137578055 |
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marcel878
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| 07 Jul 2015 02:06 PM |
| A long time ago there was nothing.... except a brick a plastic brick with studs on it. The plastic brick had alot and I mean ALOT of Energy many different kinds of energy collected from the energy in the space-time continuum anyway the brick originated from a pocket of nothing in the space-time continuum and went back to that Space pocket often. PART 2 COMING SOON ! |
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marcel878
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| 07 Jul 2015 02:11 PM |
| PART 2 anyway the brick often times went to universes and then left them so one time it went in a universe on a planet with life someone found it and brought it back to the lab. PART 3 COMING SOON! |
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| 07 Jul 2015 02:12 PM |
its neat youre trying to write a story
it lacks detail
punctuation
chronological flow
and overall is just garbage
rewrite and itll be better <3 |
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marcel878
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| 07 Jul 2015 02:23 PM |
| PART 3 when they got it to the lab they traced its origins and got a portal frame hooked it up to the machine and opened a portal to the place the brick originated the empty pocket of space.they were so disapointed that they threw the brick into the pocket of space and in rage one of the workers threw a hammer at the brick the back part of the hammer hit the brick and stuck in it then the people closed the portal. STAY TUNED FOR PART 4! |
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marcel878
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| 07 Jul 2015 02:37 PM |
| PART 5 Anyway the brick was cracked by the hammer and the crack got worse and worse. but then when half the brick had cracks in it it bursted out light and blasted the hammer off the brick after the first blast a blast 1000 times as big exploded out of the brick. STAY TUNED FOR PART 5 |
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marcel878
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| 07 Jul 2015 02:38 PM |
| Last part ment to say part 4 at the begining instead of part 5 |
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| 07 Jul 2015 02:55 PM |
Holy crap, you type in a way I can't understand. There's basically no punctuation ._.
please just stop tying like this because when trying to read something like this with portals and empty space and crap its pretty hard to understand especially when it feels like you are just babbling gibberish and not actually typing real words without a comma or period etc etc. No, seriously. USE.PUNCTUATION. |
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marcel878
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| 07 Jul 2015 03:00 PM |
| @epic you said tying instead of typing so dont correct me for my grammar also you dont need to tell someone to stop doing something they like just because there punctuation is bad |
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| 07 Jul 2015 03:05 PM |
I purposely did that misspelling because in some of your sentences: "there" instead of "their", something I learned in 2nd grade.
I don't like it when I try to give some feedback on how something should be written only for angry people to get all defensive and try to find every single last caltrop, scrap of metal and barbed wire they can get to make their own little bunker. It happens a lot with today's generation, since schools never teach them to be humble.
A mature person would've said "Oh, I see my mistakes. Sorry, I'll correct them later." |
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marcel878
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marcel878
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| 07 Jul 2015 03:08 PM |
| guys just be glad im not speaking like: how da roblox world begin waz thiz and dat and then the brik was foun and blablablablabla OK? |
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| 07 Jul 2015 03:09 PM |
epicmudkip is pretty accurate.
I mean, if someone told me something was crap, i'd rewrite it, make it better. |
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marcel878
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| 07 Jul 2015 03:10 PM |
| because this is MY story and i type how I want now stop the flame war |
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| 07 Jul 2015 03:10 PM |
marcel
its more of
sotherewasthisbrickandsomethinghappenedskjdaskjasdajdakdajsdajsdjadasasdjajasdsajdkjasdasjdadkjasdkjsadjkasdjasda
with constant spelling errors
Remember me? |
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marcel878
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| 07 Jul 2015 03:14 PM |
@all telling me to correct my grammar mistakes IDC |
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| 07 Jul 2015 03:17 PM |
Look out guys, we got a badass over here
If you didn't care, you wouldn't respond. Now f**k off with your sh.it story
"It sounded like Satan's ass demons were chasing us." ~ WiFiKing42 |
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| 07 Jul 2015 03:57 PM |
"I mean, if someone told me something was crap, i'd rewrite it, make it better."
In that case, Jail, capital "I" in "I'd", please. |
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k3rl343
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| 07 Jul 2015 03:59 PM |
If you're going to separate your story into parts, at least make your parts more then half a paragraph long.
Iᴛ sᴇᴇs ᴜs ᴀʟʟ |
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| 07 Jul 2015 04:09 PM |
| Whoa, guys! Chill out. His story will get better as time moves on. For crying out loud, when I started writing on the forums, my writing stunk! Now, I've improved much more. Give him time! |
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| 07 Jul 2015 04:11 PM |
""I mean, if someone told me something was crap, i'd rewrite it, make it better."
In that case, Jail, capital "I" in "I'd", please."
I mean, if someone told me something was crap, I'd rewrite it; make it better. |
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marcel878
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| 07 Jul 2015 05:25 PM |
The real part 5 what happened was the light bounced everywhere and exploded into plastic parts the parts rapidly changed shapes. anyways one part changed into a head like structure that is the head most of us have now but what happened is light went into the head and hollowed it then another came and made the plastic 10000X stronger. then another blast came and made a part inside the holow head and it was an Ultra advanced brain you might call it and then that blast stayed inside the head and made the head more and more advanced gave it eyes and a mouth and then the robot was turned on this was the very first living thing in existence the robot named.... Admin. STAY TUNED FOR PART 6! |
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