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| 02 Jul 2015 05:41 PM |
Yo, I wanna be the best in this decade any rapper dissin me ill return with shade then ill cut up his family like a razor blade cause im bout to blow up on the mic like an air raid its gonna start a fire so call the fire brigade cause i didnt start spittin just for fame i wanted to start a flame that burned bright in the game cause these other rappers claim to be different but we all know that they are all the same think of a bar with a cheap punchline off of the brain then the fire shots but dont know where to aim so they try to pop shots at people making history then they wonder why they fail. they think its a mystery then they bow down to people and start askin for their sympathy its all a bit of trickery so they can get the victory so as i spit this rap in hopes of becoming signed i will try to demonstrate for you my lyrical mind
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ChanelG
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| 02 Jul 2015 05:43 PM |
| Not bad, just fix the often grammatical errors. 7/10 |
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| 02 Jul 2015 08:06 PM |
| Add multis, more mosiac rhymes, improve punchlines, add metaphors and similes. |
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| 02 Jul 2015 08:16 PM |
| Take time to write your songs dont just put down the first thing that pops into your head |
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| 02 Jul 2015 09:19 PM |
| You did good I'm a rookie too |
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| 03 Jul 2015 11:53 AM |
| Thanks for tips. Will improve on these :) |
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Finn102
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| 03 Jul 2015 12:14 PM |
| if ur going to do near rhymes do multis to keep the sound |
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