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| 06 Jun 2015 12:23 AM |
It may not be the best but I'm posting this for help, so I can fix it and possibly get some tips.
(Please note that this is the first song I ever made)
I also need help for a title so yeah
[Song]
I love you, I miss you and I notice that now. Now that you're gone I can't figure out how. All those days we laughed are in the past. Every single day from now on is an ongoing loop that's going to last. All I can do is keep remembering the past. I hope this will all go by fast.
Beautiful, Lovable, Wonderful you Everyday I wake up and think about you. Everything that I do is for you. Now that you're gone I don't know what to do.
You've been making me cry since you left I've been losing my mind since you left I feel like dying since you left Now I realize how important you were since you left.
I thought it would go another way I never planned it to be this way. Never thought I would be too late Now I can't get past this gate All I can do is wait.
Beautiful, Lovable, Wonderful you Everyday I wake up and think about you. Everything that I do is for you. Now that you're gone I don't know what to do.
You've been making me cry since you left I've been losing my mind since you've left I feel like dying since you left Now I realize how important you were to me.
I've wanted to tell you how I felt about you but you left too early and I wasn't able to. Now all I can do is miss you. |
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feline75
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| 06 Jun 2015 12:30 AM |
since you left would be a good title
and not bad for the first song you ever made |
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| 06 Jun 2015 12:30 AM |
TL;DSing
~ ♪♫ If only I could dravv what I see in my head ♫♪ ~ |
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DonMangLy
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| 06 Jun 2015 12:31 AM |
| sounds like someone needs a hug |
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| 06 Jun 2015 12:31 AM |
terrible
awful
a piece of crap
lets hook you up with a record dealer |
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| 06 Jun 2015 12:39 AM |
Get a good non mopey singer and epic guitar And I'd pay for it Also Does someone need a hug? |
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| 06 Jun 2015 12:40 AM |
I might be able to sing it but hell I'm just an 11 year old and I also need to learn to play guitar.
And yes I do need a hug. |
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| 06 Jun 2015 12:40 AM |
| It's hard to tell how good a song will be by just the lyrics, as you don't know the tune or the instrumentals, however the lyrics do look interesting. Well done OP. Keep it up and I think you'll be going places. |
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| 06 Jun 2015 12:41 AM |
| Oh also you can purchase a hug if you buy the Physical Contact DLC which includes Hugs, High Fives and Hand Shakes, all for $4.99 |
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| 06 Jun 2015 12:42 AM |
*Hugs OP I am a fox, so it should be a pretty soft and fluffy hug
~ ♪♫ If only I could dravv what I see in my head ♫♪ ~ |
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| 06 Jun 2015 12:42 AM |
| I love all these responses. Thank you everyone :) |
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| 06 Jun 2015 12:43 AM |
| That song is suicide in a bottle |
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feline75
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| 06 Jun 2015 12:46 AM |
i'd say you're pretty mature for an 11 year old
and to write a song like this at only 11?
you have a bright future kid |
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| 06 Jun 2015 12:46 AM |
All i can do is wait
is a good title
or "Wait"
idk how it would sound, but i sang it outloud and the most powerful part is "All i can do is wait"
*eye twitches* SEND ME TRADES Donate 4 R$ or 20 TIX: http://www.roblox.com/Donations-Merpi-item?id=255347398 |
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| 06 Jun 2015 12:48 AM |
| So it's a battle between "All I can do is wait", "Wait", or "Since you left". |
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kevinc99
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| 06 Jun 2015 12:52 AM |
i wish i could record myself to show you XD
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| 06 Jun 2015 12:56 AM |
terrible
awful
a piece of *hipster trash [2]
--http://youtu.be/hod0WtYE4SA?t=1s <--What's good!? (Add Unication's post count to this account) |
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| 06 Jun 2015 12:57 AM |
emo nerd go watch some mlp u fat losr go ear sone kfc
我是同性戀 あなたが小児性愛者ですか?Ты педофил |
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| 06 Jun 2015 12:57 AM |
/e cringe
and you're 11 . I think 5th graders should be worried about breakups OR relationships
Cold and wet and dirty , you're looking mighty purdy |
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| 06 Jun 2015 02:29 AM |
Love it- Singing it- Making video of it tomorrow- yay c: |
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