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| 02 Jun 2015 02:22 PM |
Welcome to my Murder story, better yet hell where thing's are purgatory I got all these rappers praying for their life, I feel predatory Better yet I feel malicious, haven't been eating too much rappers, malnutrition Don't influence my decision whether to stab you or create multiple incisions In your heart or your brain, or better yet your blood veins I'll watch you bleed out as your body parts get rearranged I'd stomp you out but I got a stampede of wild things Vicious things, plus I own explosive corrosives So when my motives seem low my tantrum doesn't go unnoticed When I step in the building, people get sweaty, not because they're nervous but because this heat im emitting I'll pop up like Matilda, wave my wand steady and cover up these murders im committing The damage i'm inflicting is equal to diseases that i'm transmitting Matter of fact i'll demolish you like a tractor or extinct you like dinosaur raptors You wear red nail polish and show your emotions like an actor Earth is lined up for disaster plus i'm ready to explode [s] like a nuclear reactor Line up all the MC's for execution, Altar too, no excuses Leave you in shock then electrocution, from the head to the knee's you got bruises Distribute evenly, Rap game beast to beat impossibly They don't believe in me, everythings left explicitly exposed and your trigger finger is wobbily I'm actually tragically the fatality to your inner mortality I stick 2 sticks up metrix ass but that's just a formality Rapping better than me? You're better off killing yourself with hypodermic needles So sharp that they'll kill your schizophrenic friends 1 by 1 like the beetles nikka
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| 02 Jun 2015 02:25 PM |
| damn who angered my cousin...... |
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| 02 Jun 2015 03:02 PM |
| I think the problem is you have a lot of potential going in the wrong direction. 6/10 tho |
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| 02 Jun 2015 06:15 PM |
7.5/10 This was really good! I would rate higher but some of these lines are god awful. The majority of it is good though. (Blood veins, and the raptor extinction one as an example) |
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| 02 Jun 2015 06:15 PM |
Those last lines are to be switched.
*(Blood veins, and the raptor extinction one as an example) The majority of it is good though.* |
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| 04 Jul 2015 04:21 PM |
| You said better yet 3 times in the first few lines and that made the song pretty bland |
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| 04 Jul 2015 04:55 PM |
'Welcome to my Murder story, better yet hell where thing's are purgatory'
What does this even mean?
Do you know what purgatory is?
Also, unless the thing possesses something, then you can drop that apostrophe.
'Better yet I feel malicious, haven't been eating too much rappers, malnutrition'
Is this supposed to mean that you haven't been consuming any rappers lately and, therefore, are suffering from malnutrition? Or are you informing fellow rappers that you haven't been eating very much lately?
'When I step in the building, people get sweaty, not because they're nervous but because this heat im emitting I'll pop up like Matilda, wave my wand steady and cover up these murders im committing'
If you're emitting that much heat, then you have a serious problem. And if you're trying to cover up the murders you're committing, then why did you then write a song about how you're going to kill everyone?
'Rapping better than me? You're better off killing yourself with hypodermic needles So sharp that they'll kill your schizophrenic friends 1 by 1 like the beetles nikka'
I have several questions about this. One, did you purposely misspell 'The Beatles' or are you saying that my schizophrenic friends are going to be killed off like actual beetles?
Also, I would assume the whole point of telling your audience to kill themselves with a hypodermic needle is because it's basically impossible, just like it would be basically impossible to beat your impeccable rapping skills. But that second line completely discredits that by saying that you're going to kill them with aforementioned hypodermic needles (or they're going to kill themselves with the hypodermic needles. Which means that it is, in fact, possible to rap better than you.
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| 04 Jul 2015 05:26 PM |
^ white people be like
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| 04 Jul 2015 07:43 PM |
| so you have to be white to care about songs making any sense? that...well, i'd say that doesn't make any sense either, but that seems futile here. |
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| 04 Jul 2015 11:37 PM |
No i'm saying how y'all take things in a sense to where yall don't understand things lol
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| 04 Jul 2015 11:40 PM |
| Hey ChaoticPepperoni, I bought yo swaggy album d00d |
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| 04 Jul 2015 11:42 PM |
thx brocli
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| 05 Jul 2015 07:42 PM |
thx g
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