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| 03 Apr 2015 09:10 AM |
1st, the kid was born, let's call him "Bob" here. 2nd, Bob's mom made cookies for him. Best part of the story. 3rd, Bob was playing around outside solo with a soccerball, until she finds out the girl is being bullied, bullies stealing her lollipop, Bob said "Hey! Leave her alone!" until the bullies started to stop bullying the girl and started bullying Bob. Let's call the girl "Linda". 4th, Bob was injured, Linda helped Bob up. And gave him a lollipop, how nice. 5th, it's Bob's birthday! I wonder why no one noticed him, he heard someone singing/knocking. And you know it, the girl who sang/knocked was Linda! She gave Bob a happy birthday card. Very nice, he asked her to play video games with him. 6th, they were having fun. Until they grow up, they are still having fun. And one day, Bob gave Linda a gift, guess what's the gift? It's a puppy! Let's call the puppy "Max", and Bob and Linda were singing along. 7th, Bob and Linda is married! 8th, Bob and Max were playing, while Linda is standing, until they hear Linda screaming. 9th, Bob brought Linda to the hospital because she was pwegnant. Linda was sad, and the doctor called Bob. 10th, Bob was back in the hospital, until Linda was crying. 11th, Bob and Linda adopted a little boy, let's call him "John". Linda picked up John and hugged him. 12th, John and Max were in the car alone, or not? John was looking outside, he saw Max for the first time, he was scared at first and Max is smelling him, and then Max licked him! :D 13th, John was taking a bath with Max and Linda, Bob and John were playing outside, the family watched a movie in their house. 14th, this is the sad part. Bob, John, and Linda were helping the plants, and Max with a ball. Max tried following the ball, until a person crashed him with a car. Bob, John, Linda saw Max bleeding. Bob figured out Max was dying, Max licked Bob's tears, then Max died. 15th, after 2 years. The family was old, Bob, figured out again that Linda has cancer. Bob was depressed, until a friend tried to cheer him up. Let's call his friend "Chains". 16th, Bob tried joining the military, the family was sad, they all hugged one by one. 17th, Bob was in a war, his friend Chains got shot. He tried helping him, but they were too many soldiers shooting. 18th, Bob picked up Linda's card that she made for him. He was shooting his enemies, until he got shot by a person again. 19th, Bob's death, Linda was dead too, or not? John had a family. Then, the same story goes on, I hope you read this all.
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| 03 Apr 2015 09:16 AM |
This might actually be a touching and emotional story if you were able to write in such a way that you build up the characters.
Interesting concept, but I hope that this is the synopsis and not the actual story. |
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| 03 Apr 2015 09:25 AM |
I see the Dog-gets-hit-by-a-car-after-chasing-something cliche.
Ditto, eik. |
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| 03 Apr 2015 09:34 AM |
| It's not that uncommon. Many dog owners neglect to keep their dog away from the road sometimes, dogs frequently chase squirrels and whatnot and let's face it, a car is much bigger than a dog, so the driver may not see the dog - Especially late at night. So yeah, it may be cliche, but it's also a common occurrence. |
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| 03 Apr 2015 10:27 AM |
Oh.
Well, the more you know. |
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| 03 Apr 2015 11:39 AM |
| How about we put this in Off Topic, ok? Everything will be ok. NOW GET THE *This stuff is being covered by this becuase it might be bad for 10% of the kid Forumers.* OUT OF THIS! |
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| 09 May 2015 08:44 AM |
getting away from "this" brb |
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