Digtzy
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:17 AM |
Pick your demons It is a nasty world of pain and trouble Kilter with great tragedy and sorrow It is a beautiful world of light Supernal with great love and hope When the One comes to kill and Heavens fall frequent with lightly Footsteps and cease to order unto The pebbles and brooks of the Earth Lightning will strike, have stricken this Arranged world anew and again Apologies to wield their swords And lovelies to bask in the shadow Of their strongest shields So, pick your demons
It is an ugly and abhorrent building Of wretched soil and foundation It is a sturdy building of peace With walls precious with stone The stone welcomes the light that Pours into itself upon its surface A caress so gentle it gleams across like An ocean of flat and stagnant water But the water doesn’t live without Character and without treasure Its walls are so laminated with love With peculiarities and hardships and Sturdiness and terrible things But the foundation, the soil It is gross, it is wicked It is lovely, it is beautiful It is great and gross and yours And it is yours and it is his It is theirs it’s all around them One thing, two things are great And one thing and two things Those things are ugly and abhorrent And too they are all beautiful in their Respective laminated love It needs the greatest ability of life One thing to remember for all of them One thing to think of when eyes cast Upon a stone or a rock or a building It’s important and stupid and so It is also insignificant and smart The four walls in one room only exist If you can see them with your eyes So, pick your demons
Arranged in a tight order Order so fine and vast These books or anything you like Will always continue to ravage At your mind until you read them Until you love them and hold them And they will kiss you with their Stories and knowledge and beauty And then the disorderly will follow A beautiful demon greatly admires Your word of mouth and kind of Smile that vastly fades into forever Fortuitous in knowledge, books But of course we all must recognize Realize, remember, and reach out into Oblivion to encounter the words of the Underlying saint and sorrow that our Souls feel as a burden upon ourselves These poor little souls of ourselves We need to keep them close to us Books of knowledge show us the way We cannot have another book tell us Our dinner drink is not worth the Hassle of sitting and waiting Oh these books do lie to us So, pick your demons
Another great mystery unravels Into time itself and the fabric of it Rippled into a curled loop of joy But it isn’t joy that causes its ripple No but it isn’t joy that does that It will show you if you let it The time and the space of the fabric It isn’t anything to fear or to love But of course we must embrace it Its grey and everlasting majesty Its beauty in contrast and the like Of endless dying tyrannous life Calming and undulating into there It needs to know what you think of Its own is a song but a song is not It’s a singing creation of holiness For to be a great power of space Is to never be great at all So, pick your demons
You must choose one or the other You are confronted You are loved You are mystical and whimsical You must choose If you do not love and you do Not feel emotions of your humanity You are not a human? You are not a loveable thing You are not a human You cannot be but you can love If you can love you can treat others As if they were loved And is that a graspable concept my Dear lovely creation of great Majesty and beauty I do not care if it is hard I do not care if it is lonely and sad But I do care that it is you You brave the storm and you do Not flinch for there is not love there is No contrast to it either You must not wary you must not Feel compelled to tear your eyes Away from the world and from the sky To enjoy the life is to enjoy the death So, pick your demons
Music is inside of the treasure It is the thing that we speak in Our music is our voice and our voices Reach deep in our hearts and grasp Ahold of ourselves and take What is needed and will be Needed and what has always been Needed and is being needed So, pick your demons
Float with your demons Or sink with your angels Pick your demons And choose your angels
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Finn102
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:18 AM |
it's bland
"Lock the doors and close the blinds,we're going,for a ride!" |
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:19 AM |
says ppl who did not read it
i love ot you guys are my family |
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Finn102
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:21 AM |
yeah I read it it's a generic poem that a teenager would write, there's literally nothing unique about this poem that I haven't read from what other teens would write |
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:25 AM |
@finn
well i think it's good so if you're not going to actually like... point out specific things then i'm not going to take your criticism to heart... |
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ReVolteXe
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:26 AM |
| since you got an attitude for nothing earlier I'm not going to read it |
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Finn102
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:27 AM |
"It is a nasty world of pain and trouble" generic emo teen statement
"It is an ugly and abhorrent building Of wretched soil and foundation It is a sturdy building of peace With walls precious with stone The stone welcomes the light that Pours into itself upon its surface A caress so gentle it gleams across like An ocean of flat and stagnant water But the water doesn’t live without Character and without treasure Its walls are so laminated with love With peculiarities and hardships and Sturdiness and terrible things"
this whole sectrion is boring, I could write better I know I can |
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miles94
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:27 AM |
| tl;dr Demons and hope, death, and angels. |
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Finn102
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:28 AM |
| just because you think your poem is good, doesn't mean it is btw |
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:32 AM |
@revolte
that wasn't an attitude i was just being me |
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:35 AM |
@finn
you're not really giving me much to work with here
p.s. i know this poem has crap to work on cause i wrote it with my eyes closed and was kinda just writing it without thinking about it so yeah i know it's not very good but i don't think it's the worst poem ever
i only like it for its length, the content isn't really that appealing though
the allusions to angels and demons are there. themes of light vs dark, or existential crises. symbols of hope vs symbols of loss or whatever yeah it is bland but i like it personally |
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Finn102
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:36 AM |
yeah angels vs demons is a topic everybody writes about when they start getting into writing
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:37 AM |
poems don't have to contain fancy words and awkward sentence rephrasing to be good poems
there are different styles of poetry and mine just so happens to be different from yours and that is a.o.k.
but don't say you're better, and don't say my poetry isn't any good that just shows arrogance |
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:38 AM |
"that wasn't an attitude i was just being me"
yea pissy attitude about sums you up |
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:39 AM |
@finn
or i was just bored and wanted to write about something
this poem wasn't really about literally angels and demons
"pick your demons" is significant of an issue in your life where you have to choose a negative thing over another negative thing
would you rather give up this for that would you rather drown with your friend or float with your enemy things like that |
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:39 AM |
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/DarkestStoryline/1433730/
^generic short story I wrote
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/DarkestStoryline/1429504/
^non-serious story I wrote
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/DarkestStoryline/1433079/
^possibly generic poem
all better than what you wrote |
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:40 AM |
@revolt
i mean i wasn't really trying to be pissy but o.k.
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:41 AM |
@finn
arrogance confirmed
what english are you in |
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:42 AM |
I'm in American Lit. (11th grade class only in my school) Planning to take Writing Seminar (creative writing class) senior year as well as AP Lit (all reading)
also read my stuff, especially the 2nd one and you'll see |
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:42 AM |
also, finn
this poem isn't the only poem i've written
can you understand that i have other poems that are better than what you just showed me |
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:46 AM |
| and i'm in 12th grade AP lit & comp |
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:46 AM |
| yeah and I still write better than you |
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| 14 Mar 2015 02:47 AM |
>hasn't seen any of my other stuff
no i assure you, if what you just showed me was your best works...
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