generic image
Processing...
  • Games
  • Catalog
  • Develop
  • Robux
  • Search in Players
  • Search in Games
  • Search in Catalog
  • Search in Groups
  • Search in Library
  • Log In
  • Sign Up
  • Games
  • Catalog
  • Develop
  • Robux
   
ROBLOX Forum » Club Houses » Off Topic
Home Search
 

long poem so tl;dr

Previous Thread :: Next Thread 
Digtzy is not online. Digtzy
Joined: 12 Jan 2014
Total Posts: 16743
14 Mar 2015 02:17 AM
Pick your demons

It is a nasty world of pain and trouble
Kilter with great tragedy and sorrow
It is a beautiful world of light
Supernal with great love and hope
When the One comes to kill and
Heavens fall frequent with lightly
Footsteps and cease to order unto
The pebbles and brooks of the Earth
Lightning will strike, have stricken this
Arranged world anew and again
Apologies to wield their swords
And lovelies to bask in the shadow
Of their strongest shields
So, pick your demons

It is an ugly and abhorrent building
Of wretched soil and foundation
It is a sturdy building of peace
With walls precious with stone
The stone welcomes the light that
Pours into itself upon its surface
A caress so gentle it gleams across like
An ocean of flat and stagnant water
But the water doesn’t live without
Character and without treasure
Its walls are so laminated with love
With peculiarities and hardships and Sturdiness and terrible things
But the foundation, the soil
It is gross, it is wicked
It is lovely, it is beautiful
It is great and gross and yours
And it is yours and it is his
It is theirs it’s all around them
One thing, two things are great
And one thing and two things
Those things are ugly and abhorrent
And too they are all beautiful in their
Respective laminated love
It needs the greatest ability of life
One thing to remember for all of them
One thing to think of when eyes cast
Upon a stone or a rock or a building
It’s important and stupid and so
It is also insignificant and smart
The four walls in one room only exist
If you can see them with your eyes
So, pick your demons

Arranged in a tight order
Order so fine and vast
These books or anything you like
Will always continue to ravage
At your mind until you read them
Until you love them and hold them
And they will kiss you with their
Stories and knowledge and beauty
And then the disorderly will follow
A beautiful demon greatly admires
Your word of mouth and kind of
Smile that vastly fades into forever
Fortuitous in knowledge, books
But of course we all must recognize
Realize, remember, and reach out into
Oblivion to encounter the words of the
Underlying saint and sorrow that our
Souls feel as a burden upon ourselves
These poor little souls of ourselves
We need to keep them close to us
Books of knowledge show us the way
We cannot have another book tell us
Our dinner drink is not worth the
Hassle of sitting and waiting
Oh these books do lie to us
So, pick your demons

Another great mystery unravels
Into time itself and the fabric of it
Rippled into a curled loop of joy
But it isn’t joy that causes its ripple
No but it isn’t joy that does that
It will show you if you let it
The time and the space of the fabric
It isn’t anything to fear or to love
But of course we must embrace it
Its grey and everlasting majesty
Its beauty in contrast and the like
Of endless dying tyrannous life
Calming and undulating into there
It needs to know what you think of
Its own is a song but a song is not
It’s a singing creation of holiness
For to be a great power of space
Is to never be great at all
So, pick your demons

You must choose one or the other
You are confronted
You are loved
You are mystical and whimsical
You must choose
If you do not love and you do
Not feel emotions of your humanity
You are not a human?
You are not a loveable thing
You are not a human
You cannot be but you can love
If you can love you can treat others
As if they were loved
And is that a graspable concept my
Dear lovely creation of great
Majesty and beauty
I do not care if it is hard
I do not care if it is lonely and sad
But I do care that it is you
You brave the storm and you do
Not flinch for there is not love there is
No contrast to it either
You must not wary you must not
Feel compelled to tear your eyes
Away from the world and from the sky
To enjoy the life is to enjoy the death
So, pick your demons

Music is inside of the treasure
It is the thing that we speak in
Our music is our voice and our voices
Reach deep in our hearts and grasp
Ahold of ourselves and take
What is needed and will be
Needed and what has always been
Needed and is being needed
So, pick your demons

Float with your demons
Or sink with your angels
Pick your demons
And choose your angels
Report Abuse
Finn102 is not online. Finn102
Joined: 19 Feb 2011
Total Posts: 24930
14 Mar 2015 02:18 AM
it's generic
Report Abuse
blockopsmaster is not online. blockopsmaster
Joined: 17 Sep 2012
Total Posts: 7976
14 Mar 2015 02:18 AM
it's bland



"Lock the doors and close the blinds,we're going,for a ride!"
Report Abuse
Digtzy is not online. Digtzy
Joined: 12 Jan 2014
Total Posts: 16743
14 Mar 2015 02:19 AM
says ppl who did not read it

i love ot you guys are my family
Report Abuse
Finn102 is not online. Finn102
Joined: 19 Feb 2011
Total Posts: 24930
14 Mar 2015 02:21 AM
yeah I read it
it's a generic poem that a teenager would write, there's literally nothing unique about this poem that I haven't read from what other teens would write
Report Abuse
Digtzy is not online. Digtzy
Joined: 12 Jan 2014
Total Posts: 16743
14 Mar 2015 02:25 AM
@finn

well i think it's good so if you're not going to actually like... point out specific things then i'm not going to take your criticism to heart...
Report Abuse
ReVolteXe is not online. ReVolteXe
Joined: 13 Mar 2014
Total Posts: 1480
14 Mar 2015 02:26 AM
since you got an attitude for nothing earlier I'm not going to read it
Report Abuse
Finn102 is not online. Finn102
Joined: 19 Feb 2011
Total Posts: 24930
14 Mar 2015 02:27 AM
"It is a nasty world of pain and trouble"
generic emo teen statement

"It is an ugly and abhorrent building
Of wretched soil and foundation
It is a sturdy building of peace
With walls precious with stone
The stone welcomes the light that
Pours into itself upon its surface
A caress so gentle it gleams across like
An ocean of flat and stagnant water
But the water doesn’t live without
Character and without treasure
Its walls are so laminated with love
With peculiarities and hardships and Sturdiness and terrible things"

this whole sectrion is boring, I could write better
I know I can
Report Abuse
miles94 is not online. miles94
Joined: 15 Oct 2011
Total Posts: 4500
14 Mar 2015 02:27 AM
tl;dr Demons and hope, death, and angels.
Report Abuse
Finn102 is not online. Finn102
Joined: 19 Feb 2011
Total Posts: 24930
14 Mar 2015 02:28 AM
just because you think your poem is good, doesn't mean it is btw
Report Abuse
Digtzy is not online. Digtzy
Joined: 12 Jan 2014
Total Posts: 16743
14 Mar 2015 02:32 AM
@revolte

that wasn't an attitude i was just being me
Report Abuse
Digtzy is not online. Digtzy
Joined: 12 Jan 2014
Total Posts: 16743
14 Mar 2015 02:35 AM
@finn

you're not really giving me much to work with here

p.s. i know this poem has crap to work on cause i wrote it with my eyes closed and was kinda just writing it without thinking about it so yeah i know it's not very good but i don't think it's the worst poem ever

i only like it for its length, the content isn't really that appealing though


the allusions to angels and demons are there. themes of light vs dark, or existential crises. symbols of hope vs symbols of loss or whatever
yeah it is bland but i like it personally
Report Abuse
Finn102 is not online. Finn102
Joined: 19 Feb 2011
Total Posts: 24930
14 Mar 2015 02:36 AM
yeah angels vs demons is a topic everybody writes about when they start getting into writing

Report Abuse
Digtzy is not online. Digtzy
Joined: 12 Jan 2014
Total Posts: 16743
14 Mar 2015 02:37 AM
poems don't have to contain fancy words and awkward sentence rephrasing to be good poems

there are different styles of poetry and mine just so happens to be different from yours and that is a.o.k.

but don't say you're better, and don't say my poetry isn't any good
that just shows arrogance
Report Abuse
ReVolteXe is not online. ReVolteXe
Joined: 13 Mar 2014
Total Posts: 1480
14 Mar 2015 02:38 AM
"that wasn't an attitude i was just being me"


yea pissy attitude about sums you up
Report Abuse
Digtzy is not online. Digtzy
Joined: 12 Jan 2014
Total Posts: 16743
14 Mar 2015 02:39 AM
@finn

or i was just bored and wanted to write about something

this poem wasn't really about literally angels and demons

"pick your demons" is significant of an issue in your life where you have to choose a negative thing over another negative thing

would you rather give up this for that
would you rather drown with your friend or float with your enemy
things like that
Report Abuse
Finn102 is not online. Finn102
Joined: 19 Feb 2011
Total Posts: 24930
14 Mar 2015 02:39 AM
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/DarkestStoryline/1433730/

^generic short story I wrote


http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/DarkestStoryline/1429504/

^non-serious story I wrote

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/DarkestStoryline/1433079/

^possibly generic poem

all better than what you wrote
Report Abuse
Digtzy is not online. Digtzy
Joined: 12 Jan 2014
Total Posts: 16743
14 Mar 2015 02:40 AM
@revolt

i mean i wasn't really trying to be pissy but o.k.
Report Abuse
Digtzy is not online. Digtzy
Joined: 12 Jan 2014
Total Posts: 16743
14 Mar 2015 02:41 AM
@finn

arrogance confirmed



what english are you in
Report Abuse
Finn102 is not online. Finn102
Joined: 19 Feb 2011
Total Posts: 24930
14 Mar 2015 02:42 AM
I'm in American Lit. (11th grade class only in my school)
Planning to take Writing Seminar (creative writing class) senior year as well as AP Lit (all reading)

also read my stuff, especially the 2nd one and you'll see
Report Abuse
Digtzy is not online. Digtzy
Joined: 12 Jan 2014
Total Posts: 16743
14 Mar 2015 02:42 AM
also, finn

this poem isn't the only poem i've written


can you understand that i have other poems that are better than what you just showed me
Report Abuse
Digtzy is not online. Digtzy
Joined: 12 Jan 2014
Total Posts: 16743
14 Mar 2015 02:46 AM
and i'm in 12th grade AP lit & comp
Report Abuse
Finn102 is not online. Finn102
Joined: 19 Feb 2011
Total Posts: 24930
14 Mar 2015 02:46 AM
yeah and I still write better than you
Report Abuse
CuriousChickadee is not online. CuriousChickadee
Joined: 30 Oct 2011
Total Posts: 57455
14 Mar 2015 02:47 AM
poems are cool and stuff
Report Abuse
Digtzy is not online. Digtzy
Joined: 12 Jan 2014
Total Posts: 16743
14 Mar 2015 02:47 AM
>hasn't seen any of my other stuff


no i assure you, if what you just showed me was your best works...


man
Report Abuse
Previous Thread :: Next Thread 
Page 1 of 3Go to page: [1], 2, 3 Next
 
 
ROBLOX Forum » Club Houses » Off Topic
   
 
   
  • About Us
  • Jobs
  • Blog
  • Parents
  • Help
  • Terms
  • Privacy

©2017 Roblox Corporation. Roblox, the Roblox logo, Robux, Bloxy, and Powering Imagination are among our registered and unregistered trademarks in the U.S. and other countries.



Progress
Starting Roblox...
Connecting to Players...
R R

Roblox is now loading. Get ready to play!

R R

You're moments away from getting into the game!

Click here for help

Check Remember my choice and click Launch Application in the dialog box above to join games faster in the future!

Gameplay sponsored by:
Loading 0% - Starting game...
Get more with Builders Club! Join Builders Club
Choose Your Avatar
I have an account
generic image