RandyMD
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| 15 Feb 2015 06:21 PM |
This is a song off of my new upcoming Self-titled EP, RandyMD. This is an R&B song, so don't read it as a rap, excluding the Intro. Let me know how you feel about this song in the comments below!
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[Intro] Lift off Now here we are Being with you, left me in the dark Salt on my wounds, open my heart They say we were doomed, straight from the start Follow my head with all of my hate Can't move on, too much weight on my plate No more new friends till my head is on straight Till I'm gunnin' on aim, no more running away Find my way out the darkness, I am not heartless Get lost in the music, I will not lose it Love is for stupids, love is for cupids Love ain't for people who burn roses and tulips Uh Why can't we be together..? [Verse 1] I think I'm afraid of it So all this love, I'm saving it Cause they say you aren't the one Think it's a game, stop playing it There's more to love than just saying it I've learned my lesson, now I'm done You said, [Pre-Chorus] "You got it wrong, My heart sings out to you, just listen" You'd pick me up saying we could shine and glisten But all along, from the start, you wanted me as your vixen [Chorus]x2 Let the Embers die slow No more trust, I thought we Were meant for each other Oh, you were just a lying bastard Oh, please let them Embers die, faster
[Post-Chorus] Let the Embers die slow, Let the Embers die Let the Embers die slow, Let the Embers die
[Verse 2] It's shame that we would meet at night It seemed like you would treat me right I said you weren't like the others Why'd you have to lie to me All these Embers left inside of me Can't believe you had another You said,
[Pre-Chorus]
[Chorus]x2 Let the embers die slow No more trust, I thought we Were meant for each other Oh, you were just a lying b@stard Oh, please let them Embers die, faster [Post-Chorus] |
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Indiella
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| 15 Feb 2015 07:01 PM |
6.8/10
Intro was way too long, verses were pretty short. Rhyme scheme was eh. |
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Wobull
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RandyMD
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| 15 Feb 2015 07:08 PM |
>Intro was way too long, verses were pretty short. Rhyme scheme was eh.
Intro was fine, thank you very much.
The verses were fine, thank you very much.
The rhyme scheme was something you wouldn't be able to understand because you're too much of a HATER and FAKE person, to know what a song is worth.
Thank you c: |
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TruH4WK13
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| 15 Feb 2015 07:18 PM |
| All these "songs" on roblox are worthless unless they're recorded. |
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RandyMD
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| 15 Feb 2015 07:22 PM |
Truhawk you shouldn't be talking at ALL seeing YOU used to be a ro-rapper.
#CheckYourSelf |
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Wobull
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| 15 Feb 2015 07:25 PM |
"The rhyme scheme was something you wouldn't be able to understand because you're too much of a HATER and FAKE person, to know what a song is worth."
stop getting emotional and accept criticism |
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Indiella
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| 15 Feb 2015 07:28 PM |
"Intro was fine, thank you very much."
You clearly don't understand what an intro is considering intros are an >introduction< to a song. They are shorter than the verse, like in essays when the introduction paragraph is shorter than the body, same with the outro.
"The verses were fine, thank you very much."
I'm giving constructive criticism yet you're not taking it...You get mad if anyone says ANYTHING wrong about one of your songs.
"The rhyme scheme was something you wouldn't be able to understand because you're too much of a HATER and FAKE person, to know what a song is worth."
How does me being "fake" or a "hater" mean I don't understand a rhyme scheme...I'm a writer myself so obviously I know a thing or two about rhyme scheme. Stop being butthurt and accept that just because we're "friends" does not mean I automatically have to give your songs a 10/10 rating. Not all of your songs are good and I personally don't think this was your best. The intro was the best part but it was too long to be an intro. |
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TruH4WK13
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| 15 Feb 2015 07:34 PM |
Yes i was and STILL am a ro rapper but i started recording on soundcloud
Don't forget to take them pills bruh |
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TruH4WK13
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| 15 Feb 2015 07:37 PM |
Randy is anyways butthurt
From opposing to rappers
And from taking dck |
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RandyMD
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| 15 Feb 2015 07:42 PM |
>You clearly don't understand what an intro is considering intros are an >introduction< to a song. They are shorter than the verse, like in essays when the introduction paragraph is shorter than the body, same with the outro.
Not all intros have to be shorter than the verses. Who EVER informed you of that lied to you oh so severely.
You need to reevaluate yourself. You are BLINDLY mistaken if you think im tripping over YOU rating my song bad. I know my songs worth. I know my lyrical worth. It's something you wont ever be able to achieve because you're too busy following a crowd of people who are ahead of you. You are the most fakest person I've ever met on ROBLOX. Now, we can either keep the beef on ROBLOX, or deal with it on skype. Chose carefully -.- |
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RandyMD
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| 15 Feb 2015 07:43 PM |
| FYI, this was an emotional song. Don't think I'm emotional becaus eof it. It's called standing up for what you know deserves its props. |
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Wobull
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| 15 Feb 2015 07:47 PM |
| this song has close to zero worth though |
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Indiella
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| 15 Feb 2015 07:52 PM |
| If you didn't care about my rating then why reply..tf. Who am I following..? Tell me how I'm fake. This was never on ROBLOX, so why bring it here. You're the one who brought it here in the first place. |
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| 15 Feb 2015 08:06 PM |
god.
randy fell off harder than anybody |
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ChanelG
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| 15 Feb 2015 08:12 PM |
"Love is for stupids, love is for cupids Love ain't for people who burn roses and tulips"
I really liked that line, but I did find it kinda awkward that the intro was longer than the verses itself. Like maybe the first verse could've been the intro instead.
Now I ALSO enjoyed the chorus, but this caught me off guard:
"Let the Embers die slow ...Oh, please let them Embers die, faster" It just contradicted each other, that's all. But that might've been your point, correct me if I'm wrong.
I genuinely enjoyed this, altogether I rate this a...7/10. Nice work. :)
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RandyMD
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| 15 Feb 2015 08:22 PM |
>"Let the Embers die slow ...Oh, please let them Embers die, faster" It just contradicted each other, that's all. But that might've been your point, correct me if I'm wrong.
The song is a Love Story. Its about Person A. and Person B having a fling and sparked a flame between the two, but Person B does something that hurts Person A, and Person A wants nothing to do them. Hence, "Let The Embers die slow" as much as Person A was hurt, they don't the feelings to go away, but they still are hurt and want nothing to do with Person B, hence "Oh, please let them Embers die, faster."
I'll try to work more on explaining the songs.
This song was a very close song to me, and I'm proud of it. So as much as I appreciate your rates, I don't care for them if you don't see it the way I do. |
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Wobull
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| 15 Feb 2015 08:44 PM |
| lmao randy fails to realize that if you publish a thread it's for the readers and not for you. maybe try writing better because there is obviously no deeper meaning to any of your lines here. |
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| 16 Feb 2015 09:56 AM |
| 3/10. Verses were super short and the intro was super long. Also was borin and the same crap you always write about. |
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| 16 Feb 2015 06:55 PM |
| Oo kill em. 7-8/10 depending on my day. |
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| 16 Feb 2015 06:58 PM |
I love how Randy here is always talking crap yet he'd get bodied by even the worst rookie.
The Rebirth is over, now it's time for the Virus... |
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