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Re: Legends of Forcai
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| 08 Feb 2015 07:29 AM |
(STORY) Hundreds of years ago, Forcai was land full of harmony and peace. There was no war in this land and everyone was very happy. It is land full of vast terrains and undiscovered places to explore. There are a lot of kingdoms as well, all united by a single body ordained by the Mighty Gods of Zarfei. These gods are the reason why Forcai is a peaceful world, a one continent of many adventures.
One day, a war happened. After years of eternal sleep, the Elemental Giants of Underheim have finally awaken and they began to wreak havoc over Forcai. The Mighty Gods of Zarfei descended from their godly realm and they proceed to fight off against these giants, and this war was called the Great Ragnarok. Many innocents died, many properties have damaged, but the gods finally won and the giants retreated back to their hellish realm, but soon, they will strike back.
(SETTING) Ten years later, Forcai was restored thanks to the Mighty Gods of Zarfei. The Great Ragnarok is now mostly being told as a story. Fearing that the Elemental Giants of Underheim will return, the gods decided to pass down their powers to newborns so that when they grow up, they will use their powers in fighting the Elemental Giants.
(RACES) Ever since the Great Ragnarok, many races died off, but only a few survived. Races are categorized by types; common(those who fully survived the war) and rare(those who are near to extinction, but can be saved by re-population).
Common: Humans -The most common race, having no significant characteristics, aside from being "passive-aggressive" of some sort. They like to get themselves influenced by other races, most of them are kind and pure, intelligent and patient, aggressive and battle hungry, everything, that is why they are not special and just being so "jack-of-all-trades" like.
Elves -These guys have much more paler skin than the humans, plus they have pointy ears. They are the most intelligent and patient among the other races, that is why most scholars today are elves. They are often mistreated for being not fair and always win. There are sub-species of elves:
Half-Elves, a hybrid of a human and elf, characterized by their blunt ears and having the same skin tone as the humans.
Dark Elves, after being corrupted by the practice of black magic, these elves have gained violet to purple skin and pupil-less eyes that glow in the dark. All of them are very evil, some of them might change their hearts.
Dwarves -Stumps? Yeah, their sizes are like stumps, but don't try to mess with them, they are easy to anger when in comes to size. They have long beards and cherry noses, some of them of other berries. They are the most strongest among the races, they can lift boulders and crush them with their bare hands. If you are trying to pick up a fight on one of them, prepare your butts for that.
Undead -The God of Death sometimes left some souls to return to their bodies, rotting bodies. They are like humans, except their bodies are rotten and some internal organs are being exposed. They have really bad smell and grotesque figure. There is a little sense of humanity inside of them.
Rare: Reptilians -Half human, half reptile, these are the most sufficient hunters of all of Forcai. They are reptilian humanoid with scaly skin that ranges from greenish to yellowish, they wore tattoo also. They have yellow alligator eyes, long snout and sharp teeth, plus long tongue and tail. They are very much nomadic, always hunting for food to eat.
Avians -Half human, half bird, they are the the only race who can fly. Their bodies are completely covered by feathers, ranging from brownish to bluish. These humanoid birds with very sharp beak and talons. Obviously, they have wings that enables them to fly. It is unknown if they are still alive, although there are evidences that they can still roam around Forcai, like the reptilians.
Mermen -Half human, half fish or amphibian, they the only race who can swim underwater and live. Male mermen have bluish skin, gills, fins, webbed feet and hands, and their face is much like a human, female mermen(or mermaid) have human characteristics. Instead of their legs being fish tails(that's being overused already), they appear to be more human, except for their fins and their beauty can withstand a human's or elf's beauty. Most mermaids are often referred to the humans as "Kawaii" for some strange reasons.
Orcs -The most aggressive race people should avoid. Referred to as the Mad Men, these guys are very chaotic and stupid that they are capable of collateral damage. If their skin is green, then they are the less crazy ones, meaning to say, the most kind and humble among the orcs. If their skin is blue, they are both humble and sometimes crazy, but if their skin is red, they are the most crazy. They are battle hungry fiends that likes to slaughter people and burn villages. There are different tribes based on their skin color.
Mechanix -Artificial humans as people called it. There is a castle where these puppets are made. They are once good entertainers in a specific kingdom until they began to turn themselves against them. Their creator, the God of Machinery, shuts them down and puts them away in a abandoned castle. After the Great Ragnarok, they are reactivated, now with a sense of humanity.
(BOSSES) Along the way, you will encounter creatures that are "hard to kill". They are based on the legends foretold by many people. They thought they are all just myths, but no, they are not.
Abaraxas the Molten Dragon -They say that Abaraxas was once a man whose village was lost due to a volcanic eruption, which led him to curse to the gods. The Mighty Gods began to punish him into making him fall into a volcano and curse him to be one with the lava, thus returning as a dragon made of fire and lava.
Tempas the Songbird -Don't expect those from Bioshock Infinity, Tempas looks like an actual eagle, except it has four wings and two tails. This huge bird is said to be an Avian cursed by the gods into turning him into a huge monster after killing the king's son.
Grenen the Kraken -They say that Grenen was a pirate that spread terror all-over the port cities, which led to the gods to curse him by letting his ship get destroyed by the waves and storms, then killing him by drowning, now returned as a huge squid monster with ten tentacles.
Durnsha the Crystal Wolf -People say that Durnsha was once a dwarf who hates mining for money and that, he kills his fellow dwarves and takes their fortune. The gods soon cursed him into becoming a huge wolf with shards of diamonds sticking out of its ankles and claws.
Magnar the Mechanical Golem -People say that Magnar was a young man who fell in love with a girl, who is actually a witch. Magnar soon killed her before she lays a curse upon him, but the curse finally gets him, turning him into a mechanical being and presumed dead, but will return once lightning strikes him.
Hordis the Sand Shark -They say that Hordis was once an evil king who owns all of Forcai's waters. The gods cursed him and his kingdom to fall of drought, and made the king bury himself on the sand, now returned as a large, piranha-like monster that swims in the hot sands.
(LOCATIONS) Forcai is a one continent with various places to explore. There are a few islands with some villages, but the mainland has a lot of them. Let's start with the kingdoms. There are four major kingdoms and one center kingdom. The center kingdom serves as the central government for all of the four main kingdom.
Mantha -The central kingdom, as well as the place where adventurers are born. This is the center of where the temples of each god is located. It is a large kingdom, their government is so superior and their laws are good for people to follow and abide. It is surrounded by a large wall good enough to defend themselves from the Elemental Giants. It is the major innovator for military training, education, and marketing.
Kagaris -The northern kingdom, located in the mountain ranges. People prefer cold climates for some reasons. It is the innovator for mining minerals, most people who live there are dwarves and some humans. These two races work for each other for a living, that is why this kingdom is the most poorest.
Lumartis -The southern kingdom, located near the oceans. It is a port kingdom an the major innovator of trade and fishery. Some say that Mermen might be roaming around this kingdom, others believe that Reptilians might also roam around, since it is hidden in the jungle.
Chivaris -The western kingdom, located in the desert. It is the hottest kingdom, that is why most houses and structures have covers on their roofs to avid the place being hot. It is the major innovator of agriculture and craftsmanship. Peasants are feared to go out of their kingdom because there is a possibility that Hordis might come and eat them. Most people there have dark skin complexion.
Hikaris -The eastern kingdom, located in the plains. This is the only Asian kingdom in the whole Forcai. It is the major innovator for forestation, and most people there are elves and some humans, Asians to be specific. They are also the major innovator for practicing magic and medicine.
Now let's go to the minor kingdoms...
Tront -The main kingdom where the elves only reside. It is located deep within the forest. The homes are all tree houses connected by foot bridges, as well as markets, etc. It is guarded by a forcefield created by the high mages. To enter is unknown.
Skia -A mysterious kingdom located above Forcai. It is a floating kingdom for the Avians, surrounded by four rocks which are the villages. The center kingdom is a huge rock. The kingdom is floating because of a power source that makes the kingdom alive, the Great Stone. No one has ever attempted to reach this kingdom, only the Avains can.
Oceana -The kingdom hidden in the ocean. It is said to be located at the waters that are near Lumartis. This is where the Mermen resides. No one has ever attempted to swim very deep to reach this kind of kingdom.
Isle of Bones -This is a very dark island. It is inhabited by the undead and some dark elves and no sunshine can't go through it due to its magic. It is a forbidden place, those who go there will never go back. It was once an island that doubles as a mass grave, but since the God of Death is so lazy, that the dead there are alive.
Mashina -An artificial island made by the Mechanix, as well as the location of the said abandoned castle. People who will visit there will be very happy as it is dubbed as the Island for Entertainment. It is also completely defended with many cannons and artillery, thus it became the innovator in transportation.
Abagadana -A jungle island where most Reptilians live. It is completely filled with trees that blocks away the sunlight, although there are some spots that the sunlight can shine. It is also the home of many animals that are undiscovered.
Now let's go to the Ancient and Dangerous Places...
Volcas -A field full of volcanoes. This is the most hottest place no one is allowed to go to. It has a lot of volcanoes that very much erupts every year. The biggest volcano is Burnot, which is said to be the home of Abaraxas. It is located at the southwest of Forcai.
Galacia -The very snowy mountain ranges where minerals of every kind are located. It is also the location where Kagaris is. The biggest mountain is Mount Kiga, which is said to be the chamber where Durnsha sleeps. There could be a possibility that there is an entrance to this mountain and the location where the most beautiful stone lies, the Rainbow Crystal.
Lovarti -The forest where Tront is. It is known to have such large trees that is impossible to climb. Some say that this is where the Witch's House is located and there could be a possibility where Magnar is. It is located at the southeast of Forcai.
Magarusha Ruins -This is the remnant of a kingdom that was once stood before Chivaris was born. it is said that the treasure of King Sidroh is located beneath this ruin, if they could find the entrance of it.
And now to the Godly Realms...
Zarfei -The home of the Mighty Gods. There is no way that people can find it, nor find the gateway to it. It is a castle supported by the clouds.
Underheim -The home of the Elemental Giants, a hellish realm where demons and wicked souls roam. This is where people suffer, a void of despair.
Barkai -The boarder between Zarfei and Underheim. This is where the souls are being judged, if they deserve to be on Zarfei or on Underheim.
(THE GODS AND GIANTS) The Mighty Gods of Zarfei: Tarantos, God of Gods or King of the Gods Aquos, God of Water and Ice Voltor, God of Fire and Volcanoes Thundrix, God of Lightning and Storms Teratics, God of Earth and Mountains Kazeron, God of Wind and Typhoons Chronomos, God of Time Oromonos, God of Minerals and Metals Plantesia, Goddess of Plants and Trees Juseia, Goddess of Law and Order Kromack, God of Violence and Gore Ionos, Goddess of Science Murkary, Goddess of Alchemy and Poison Yonto, God of Gambling and Fortune Angresius, God of Anger Torantius, God of War Mancurus, God of Strength Lomaider, God of Strategy and Tactics Winchest, God of Pride and Glory Nemehia, Goddess of Wisdom Erona, Goddess of Love Celena, Goddess of Beauty Soldar, God of the Sun and Light Lundar, God of the Moon and Darkness Astronomos, God of the Stars and Space Goontash, God of Thievery Joshen, God of Festivals and Celebrations Osten, God of Happiness and Optimism Marago, God of Machinery Timogas, God of Craftsmanship Deshokar, God of Death Xantro, God of Judgement Minera, Goddess of Lust Hontera, Goddess of Sloth Yumera, Goddess of Envy Kagaria, Goddess of Trickery and Lies Umoxas, God of Speed and Message Trodis, God of Secrecy Magika, Goddess of Magic Inferen, God of Disease Fromben, God of Poverty Crashias, God of Treachery Xanitas, God of the Animals Minotia, Goddess of Climate and Seasons Skora, Goddess of Fighting and Skill Andus, God of Agriculture and Harvest Endus, God of Fishery and Livestock Romonshas, God of Stories and Myths Jinko, Goddess of Art Minko, Goddess of Dance Ninko, Goddess of Music Hinko, Goddess of Drama and Entertainment Orbos, God of Religion and Faith Brenas, God of Destiny and Fate Vonos, God of Souls Yunis, Goddess of Healing and Medicine Futage, God of Demons Grumbon, God of Gluttony Grandon, God of Greed Kiririn, God of Sorrow and Sadness Juntor, God of Travel and Adventure Rodno, God of Sleep and Dreams
The Elemental Giants of Underheim: Eruptor, Giant of Fire and Volcanoes Tidador, Giant of Water and Tsunamis Quador, Giant of Earth and Earthquakes Hurricador, Giant of Wind and Hurricanes Raidor, Giant of Lightning and Storms Fosdor, Giant of Ice and Snowstorms
(MARUSHEN) Marushen is a term for warriors who possesses the ability of each god. They are subordinates for the gods to fight against the giants. So what can a Marushen do?
Tarantos -Can speak with the gods personally. Aquos -Water Manipulation and walking on water. Voltor -Fire Manipulation and can resist flames. Thundrix -Lightning Manipulation and Storm Creation. Teratics -Earth Manipulation. Kazeron -Wind Manipulation and can walk in the air for a short time. Chronomos -Time Manipulation, like stopping and slowing down time for a short while. Oromonos -Can absorb any material to become that material. Plantesia -Can create and control plants. Juseia -Expert in making laws. Kromack -Blood Manipulation. Ionos -Expert in creating hypothesis. Murkary -Expert alchemist, can create potions fast. Yonto -Expert cheater. Angresius -Rage enhances one's strength and battle prowess. Torantius -Mastery over any weaponry. Mancurus -Superhuman strength. Lomaider -Expert battle genius, knows how and when will the enemy attack. Winchest -Gains popularity, good in making groups. Nemehia -Has higher wisdom over anything, can solve math problems in seconds. Erona -Charm speak and seduction. Celena -Unmatched beauty. Soldar -Solar and Light Manipulation. Lundar -Luna and Dark Manipulation. Astronomos -Can summon meteors and Cosmic Manipulation. Goontash -Enhanced stealth. Joshen -Expert party planners. Osten -Can increase morale. Marago -Expert engineer, can create weapons and artillery fast. Timogas -Expert architect, can create homes and other structures fast. Deshokar -Can instantly kill a person within a single touch, but that will exhaust him. Xantro -Can tell who is guilty by the eye. Minera -Can make one's desire come true. Hontera -Can make someone tired by one touch. Yumera -Can kill a person in a single click of his finger if the person is jealous. Kagaria -Expert liar and comedian. Umoxas -Superhuman speed. Trodis -Will look innocent as always. Magika -Expert mage and can master any magic. Inferen -Can make someone feel sick by one touch. Fromben -Can make anyone loose everything in just one thought. Crashias -Mind reading. Xanitas -Can communicate with animals. Minotia -Climate Manipulation. Skora -Superhuman reflexes and agility. Andus -Can revive any dead plant. Endus -Can revive any dead animal. but not humans. Romoshas -Can come up with a good story. Jinko -Expert artist. Minko -Expert dancer. Ninko -Expert singer. Hinko -Expert dramatist. Orbos -Can bless anyone based on their affinity. Brenas -Fortune telling. Vonos -Can communicate with the dead souls. Yunis -Healing and medicine making. Futage -Can summon only one demon from Underheim. Grumbon -Heavy eater, but body doesn't change. Grandon -Can make someone rich by one thought. Kiririn -Emotional Manipulation. Juntor -Mastery over the art of escape. Rodno -Can make someone fall asleep by one touch and knows what the person's dream is.
(RULES) 1.I'am law and law only. 2.Romance, keep it to a minimum. 3.Swearing,keep it to a minimum. 4.You can create at least three characters, because there are many gods to choose from. 5.I'll be the one who will control the Marushen for Tarantos. 6.Don't be OP, no meta-gaming or anything. 7.I'll be the one to handle events and NPCs. 8.Only one god at a time. 9.If you finally came this far, put in Other the number of gods. 10.I'll be the one to choose admins. 11.We will start if the first two people joins. 12.If you have any questions or suggestions, PM me.
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| 09 Feb 2015 06:17 AM |
| Sorry, don't have the key for that. |
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| 09 Feb 2015 06:21 AM |
Doesn't matter.
Still a typo. |
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| 09 Feb 2015 06:42 AM |
This would have interested me...
But stereotypes piss me off. Quicker than a Zombie Apocalypse movie.
Orcs shouldn't always be depicted as cruel and stupid. Think outside the box sometimes, dude. An Orc race can be brutish and sometimes barbaric, but at least give them a little credit. Make them smart, but brutish and sometimes barbaric, but capable of being good, and I will join this RP in an instant... but without that, I'm not going to consider it. |
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| 09 Feb 2015 06:50 AM |
Mega, I respect that you find this RP not worth joining. But you're critiquing this for the wrong reasons. If I made an RP where humans all had blue skin, lived 700 years and swam in pools of liquid ethane, you wouldn't call it "original" and "creative" - Chances are (If you have an IQ higher than seven, which I shall go on the assumption that you do), you'd ask me to rename the species so that people didn't get confused.
If you're going to defy commonly accepted definitions for something, it's not that something before. So creative, cunning, goodguy orcs are not orcs anymore, no matter how similar they look, so they may as well have a different name. And then, if he wanted a race that met the criteria that orcs typically meet and you want something "new" and "original", it's as simple as a god-damned name-change. |
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| 09 Feb 2015 06:58 AM |
Well, I should say that I think he just went a little overboard on the typical Orc Race.
Sorry. And I don't mean creative, cunning, good guy orcs. I just mean don't limit the race to grumpy, stubid, barbaric mad murderers.
I'm just gonna sit this one out. It's interesting... but, well, yeah. I'm a weirdo. |
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| 09 Feb 2015 07:06 AM |
| Mega, you completely miss my point. I was using extreme examples to point out the errors in your subtleties, so that they become more apparent. |
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| 09 Feb 2015 07:14 AM |
| Since you two gave me a bad credit, I should add you two to my list of enemies. |
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| 09 Feb 2015 07:17 AM |
Wait, you have a list of enemies?
I'm going to hide now... :(
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| 09 Feb 2015 07:18 AM |
"Since you two gave me a bad credit, I should add you two to my list of enemies."
That was the logic I used when I was twelve. If someone gave me constructive criticism in an attempt to better my writing, I hated them for life. I now realize the idiocy of that logic, and kindly request that you simply accept this criticism and use it to better request your own works in the future. Otherwise, I shall use a form of critique that will make you wish you had never arrived on these forums to begin with. |
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| 09 Feb 2015 07:22 AM |
that's stupid, sage. i must side with tim here
tim, you seem so smart now btw how come? |
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| 09 Feb 2015 07:25 AM |
"tim, you seem so smart now btw how come?"
I've always been the smartest person on RP, I've just decided to all of a sudden take an interest in improving the forums. I failed the last six times I've tried, so I figure I may as well try again for a week or two, get bored, and then get back to making extraordinarily detailed RPs that only Duck14 joins and that often get lots of hate and flame without specifying where I made errors in my writing. |
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| 09 Feb 2015 07:32 AM |
The only thing even resembling legitimate criticism that is supplied on my RPs is the phrase "wordwall", which, from my experience, refers to a large entry of text without proper paragraphing procedures being met. (A "wall" of text, if you will). I continue to get this same criticism for a text that has been paragraphed properly.
I also tend to get seemingly random conjunctions of letters that I believe to have no meaning and that google spellcheck decides to redflag (but then again, what does google know if it redflags "metre"?), the most common one being "tldr". |
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