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| 28 Jan 2015 06:19 PM |
I posted an interest check earlier, but I'm going to repost it with it's plot and a little revision. I like Constructive Criticism, but... Be nice. Also, I'd like ideas for the title.
Animaris... Creatures from another world, with amazing powers, and great intelligence. They appear randomly at the birth of children, and the reason for this is unknown. We do know that they are the guardians of these children, coming from their world to watch over and protect these individuals, being a partner for life.
That was how it was in the old times, at least. When the previous emperor died 16 years ago, his son, Prince Kaulmars, was crowned as the emperor of Endreal. The first thing that Kaulmars did, apparently out of jealousy, was out law the Animaris and their partners. Who once where considered honored citizens, where now outlaws. He banned these beings, and their partners, and rounded all of the ones currently alive and executed them, man, woman and child alike. Now, any one born with an Animaris will be put to death immediately. And from that day onward, our cruel king Kaulmars has ruled with an iron fist.
But there are some who have been able to escape their fate, hidden by their families and protected by their Animals. These, to those who know of them, are called the Exiled Children.
-World Explanation- Animaris appear randomly at the birth of certain children due to an ancient unbreakable covenant created by the first king of the Animaris realm. ' Animaris can literally be anything, however, they are not immortal. They also never have godlike powers. (Basically, they are not overpowered as heck. They have to grow their strength with their partners.)
I'll post the version with the Character Sheets later if any one is interested. Thanks for reading! |
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| 28 Jan 2015 06:22 PM |
| I'll post it any way, actually. |
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| 28 Jan 2015 06:25 PM |
| I still don't understand this. What's the point if you're going to start the role play as dead because of having a spirit animal? And if the king hated these things so much, he'd probably send death squads to hunt people down. It doesn't make sense and it's strangely simmilar to the holocaust. |
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| 28 Jan 2015 06:41 PM |
| Maybe you should change the world's name, but otherwise, I'll join! Plus, did you know that "Spirit Animals" is a book sires name? |
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| 28 Jan 2015 06:42 PM |
I believe I explained that some where able to escape. Parents can hide their children...
I didn't mean it to resemble the holocaust in any way, shape or form...
I can change the plot, though. If it offends you, I'll go back to square one...
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| 28 Jan 2015 06:43 PM |
Boo, yeah, I did know... I actually got this idea before I read that series, though! Silly Brandon Mull... you got the same idea as me. But I don't blame him. He's an awesome author... Fable Haven is amazing. |
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| 28 Jan 2015 08:38 PM |
Ugh... ok, I'm gonna write a new plot for this, Ok? It will involve a group that is against Spirit Creatures, and the leader is the FORMER emperor...
K? |
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| 28 Jan 2015 09:06 PM |
Here is some advice, don't make a generic villain. Generic villains are those guys that have no personality and reason to do what they do, other than they're evil. (see Sailor Moon for more examples) They are just boring. |
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| 28 Jan 2015 09:41 PM |
It still doesn't make sense. If the emperor hates these things so much, he'd make death squads to hunt people ruthlessly down. It's actually really hard to hide a "spirit animal" when your parent's know they'll probably be guillotined if they hide it. It actually does resemble the holocaust. 1. Evil king thats mass kills everyone with a spirit animal = heinreich himmler and h.itler 2. People that are executed because they have something= jews 3. Massive event that basically kills everyone= gassings and shootings at the concentration camps+ the holocaust 4. (If it's included) squads senr to hint down these people= ss and totenkopf |
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