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| 21 Oct 2014 02:34 PM |
Setting: Mid 1940s taking place in New York.
Start: Ryan walked down the cluttered road. It being filled with nothing but rubble and dirt. He would kick the small portions of rubble and dirt away as he walked so it would interfere with his walking. A radio would be heard in the distance, it playing the usual famous jazz singer, (I believe this girl is a jazz singer) 'Ruth Etting'. "Ten cents a dance, that's what they pay me... gosh how they weigh me down..." Ruth's radio voice echoing through the streets, the sound bouncing off of the ruins that still somewhat stood. Ryan would follow the sound, it becoming more audible as he walked further into the 'town'. (-Skipping to the part where he arrives-) He would come to a stop, turning. He would look up seeing an electronic sign, it's lights flickering. It would read, "Champagne La Vie". "Surprised it still works... hardly though," Ryan would mutter to himself as he placed his hand on the rusted doorknob. He'd turn left, the door opening. He'd harshly cough. The room being filled with t0ba.cco filled scent. He'd swoosh the fog away, walking into the bar. --- (If you want to be the bartender. Don't hesitate!) (Note: This is my first forum RP. Excuses for the errors and mistakes I most likely made.) |
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| 21 Oct 2014 02:34 PM |
| (CORRECTION: So it wouldn't interfere with his walking.*) |
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| 21 Oct 2014 02:35 PM |
good start
needs plot
a lot of it
and cs
and rules |
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| 21 Oct 2014 02:36 PM |
| Ah, thank you! I usually let people learn about the backstories while they RP with me. I will make that now! |
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| 21 Oct 2014 02:37 PM |
if this was a jump in rp
this would do
but still
you have potential |
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| 21 Oct 2014 02:42 PM |
Plot: There really is no plot. I just let it go wherever. (I have no main idea) But I guess, the main plot is to find how to re-build the dead and crashed to the ground city. Such as, finding a new way to re-make technology (There is some technology at the moment but not enough to have a T.V. or any of that advanced stuff.), remake almost everything that was burnt to the ground. Once it is all re-built it will no longer be New York City, only will it be what Ryan wants it to be which is not yet to be figured out. Once that happens, a new plot will begin. (Totally not like Bioshock... psh.) |
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| 21 Oct 2014 03:49 PM |
but as a jump in rp
this would work |
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| 21 Oct 2014 04:11 PM |
| Phew, I'm glad! I usually just do jump in RPs. |
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| 21 Oct 2014 04:15 PM |
should have put that on the top
but yeah
this is a start
ill join
but possibly not today |
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| 21 Oct 2014 04:40 PM |
Pas would go after the verb. Not that you can fix it, but meh.
- Hakuna Matata - |
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| 21 Oct 2014 07:05 PM |
| I don't think so... I've been studying in French for a while. But my mistakes if it's wrong. |
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| 21 Oct 2014 07:20 PM |
I mean, I'm taking french as well, and it's always ne (verb) pas. For here, but I don't actually know. Either way good luck on this.
- Hakuna Matata - |
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| 21 Oct 2014 07:50 PM |
| Yes this is a pretty good start all it does need is a plot, a Character Sheet which is what CS stands for, some rules, and that would be about all you need, but I do need to say for future RP's for the plot you need to think it out before hand, and make sure your plot is interesting and works... |
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