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| 18 Oct 2014 12:41 PM |
Rehbull/Vandolve
You once had it all, mind set, development, caused your world to crumble and fall; What you proud of? Proud of bein' a disgust, floatin' in ashore cause the sea gave you no love? Heh, it's all 'bout the paperwork, misspell one word and your life goes [f]'ing berzerk, Missed out on an opportunity, no longer accepted in this community, we be given immunity you be disposed brutally, Use em' to get that jewelry, all these lies happen continually, [Bch] now you're livin' life individually, Stronger than I was before, I want take your [s] closed is the door, Maybe it's open for a low life scum, who treats you wrong and lives with his mum, Beat so harsh you could murder it, Heart so cold you could freeze in it, So don't get wrapped up with this stup!d [bch], Cause all that she's worth is a bunch of [s], You'd pretend to love but really only brushed it off, You're such a good actor lets get a round of applause, King Hurricain be swoopin' in, Dr0wn!ng you with his rhymes, let the storm begin, You're so down low I almost wanna help you, But you're such a fake [bch] that I just wanna melt you, But I guess you're happy somewhere else and alone, Or if you're not get used to it, cause there's no one to phone, How's life down there in the [f]'ing fourth class? Hope you know I'm watching you burn and crash, So while the smile, whats so funny? Oh I forgot you're a fake [bch] and only care about money..
Revenge is such a blessing, cause I just love gettin' it, Disses are my favorite cause I'm just no sweatin' it, [Bch] I want you to remember, cause I think you're forgettin' it, Hurricain's a drug, and you're just injectin' it, I thought you were smart but you're poisoned and there's no stoppin' it, Just let him eat away at your soul, and accept it... You lose, We win, this fight is almost over, You're like a three leafed clover, as common as they come, Except most aren't as dumb as you, I think you're the only one, On a level, so bad, you represent the devil, Revenge is such a blessing, cause I'm just Rehbull...
Chorus/King Hurricane/jk2515/KingHurrican3 Revenge. You really deserved it. Don't try to act innocent by saying nobody's perfect. Revenge. Your new tricks just aint working. You're better off d3ad on a island that's deserted. It's your turn (B)!! x2
King Hurricane/jk2515/KingHurrican3
Grab some sticks and raid a parade. Run up to the (B) that ruined my life and grab her by her braids. Trap her in a balloon and watch it deflate. Show her Mortal Kombat lava fights and do moves on her and call it remade. I told her before not to come at me. I'll trap myself in her sk1n then break out like acne. Eat a bar of soap and still talk nasty. And "WHY ARE YOU DOING THIS??!!" is what she'll ask me. I'll take a vacuum and drain your flu1ds. I was coming for you and you should've already knew it, Sl1ce her then start (p)uk1ng. I will always be wicked. Eat off your f@ce and scream delicious. I'm in control now (B) see the remote. Then fly off the ropes like ricky the dragon steamboat. I'll ch0p you up and turn you into sauces. End up in a graveyard thinking you're flawless. You just wouldn't stop (w)h0re. Now you're sitting alone reading pop up books being popped in the microwave like popcorn. Now all you do is watch p()rn. While I'm t0rturing you behind locked doors. People scream "Hurricane stop your bru1sing her!!" Well what do you expect I'm the other version of Luc1fer with multiple personalities k1lling in reality achieving immortality. P3r1od ended last week and I'll still make you bl3ed from it. After that I'll move to the stomach, you see this is what you get for making assumptions. You see with you it's always somethin. But now the problem is solved with kickers using your h3ad for punting. Oh lord, look at the direction my world went. Close to prison all cause of a weird g1rl-friend. I agree you're the one I'm obsessed with. But at the same time the one I lost interest in. This what happens when you call me fru1ty. And betray me at the same time still trying to give me b00ty. I'll turn a h0rror flick into a real life movie. Now say goodbye as I turn you to a human sm00thie. East Coast. |
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Indiella
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| 18 Oct 2014 03:25 PM |
Nice! Like the hook and the bars were pretty good
8.5/10 MCT |
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| 18 Oct 2014 04:54 PM |
reflective, and it's a rap 79/100 |
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| 18 Oct 2014 05:00 PM |
| What does it being a rap have to do wit it? |
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| 18 Oct 2014 05:07 PM |
| I was just reminding myself it was a rap, to be able to appreciate the creativity and remember the violent lyrics are a part of the final effect. |
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Vandolve
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| 22 Oct 2014 06:27 PM |
Woah.
Didn't see this till' now.
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| 22 Oct 2014 08:05 PM |
Better than I expected,
Let's take this verse by verse
Vandolve: I expected your verse to be worse but it was simple and you stuck with the topic, the rhymes were a bit off at the start but you were pretty decent with your rhyme schemes. Other than that it was simple, it included no form of puns or any other lyrical aspect.
Overall Verse: 4/10
King Hurricane: An overall pretty above average verse in my tastes. The rhyme schemes were great as usual, the topic was right on, and your metaphors and similies were great as well, I especially like the acne line as well.
Overall Verse: 6.5/10
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| 22 Oct 2014 08:06 PM |
| Overall the song was a 5.7/10 in my tastes, I also didn't like the chorus but the main focuses are the verses |
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| 23 Oct 2014 03:43 PM |
god DAMN it
you morons will never be rappers if you suck as much ass as this |
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| 24 Oct 2014 04:44 AM |
KH's verse was excellent, and so was the Chorus. I'd suggest SOME rhyme fixing, but other than that well done. Rehbull's verse was ok, I just expected better for some reason.
Overall: 9/10... And you guys should definitely collab more. |
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| 24 Oct 2014 10:32 AM |
| Mad decent this was. (7/10) |
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| 27 Oct 2014 07:13 PM |
| Thank you don't forget to check out Betrayed Part 6 |
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