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| 11 Sep 2014 05:37 PM |
My name is josh. I am 22 and my granpa pasted away about a year ago. I wanted to go see him by his grave in the cematery. So one day I wented to his grave and there was a little red flower by his grave and i didnt put it there. I picked it up and hold it. There was blood on it. Why is there blood on the little red flower? I put my finger on it and feeled it. Then all the sudden a arm comes out of the ground!!
Granpa is that you? I yelled.
YOu are dead granpa why do you want to kill me? I asked him
I am not your granpa. He said madly. I dont know who your granpa is!
Then where is my granpa stupid guy!! Where did you put him! Big lier!! I yelled madly to
A bloody scary head wanted to get me and put me in there with him.
I will not go with you! NEVER!! I punched him in the face and he started bleeding more.
I kicked his head hard and his skull flew away!
I did ask him about the little red flower. He said that his mom put it there.
And then I readed the grave thing. It said
- My granpa was buried here -
I WAS LIKE WHAT!
The guy was lieing! Where is my granpa?!?! |
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| 11 Sep 2014 05:40 PM |
0/10 bad grammar, cliche and not scary you're dumb |
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| 11 Sep 2014 05:41 PM |
| Im going to ignore you now wolfy. >:( |
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| 11 Sep 2014 05:42 PM |
| cliche, barely scary or descriptive, spelling and grammar really need improving. no offense, but it sounds as if it were written by someone in elementary school. |
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| 11 Sep 2014 05:43 PM |
Im in elemintary school. Im in 3rd grade? You got a problem? |
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| 11 Sep 2014 05:43 PM |
@dralion op is clearly in kindergarten, you can't expect much |
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| 11 Sep 2014 05:43 PM |
dont start a flamewar ot will murder your innocence |
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| 11 Sep 2014 05:44 PM |
| oh ok he's like 8 no wonder he's such a moron |
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| 11 Sep 2014 05:45 PM |
| Ok can you say something about the story now |
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| 11 Sep 2014 05:45 PM |
| I beated up that guy hahahahahahahahah |
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| 11 Sep 2014 05:46 PM |
| They already did; The story is bad and written with bad grammar. |
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| 11 Sep 2014 05:47 PM |
Try to use right grammar and use a good scare factor This isn't really scary, to be honest |
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| 11 Sep 2014 05:48 PM |
| Why is every one mean? Why cant someone be nice For one time? |
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| 11 Sep 2014 05:49 PM |
1. your story sucks 2. you're 8 3. this is the internet, if you can't handle it get off idiot kid |
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dralion
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| 11 Sep 2014 05:50 PM |
I wasn't being "mean" I was saying what needed improvement
If you can't handle the fact that people aren't going to like everything you create, stay off the internet
You shouldn't even be on here when you're 8 years old |
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| 11 Sep 2014 05:51 PM |
| Well I have freedom of speech and i can say what i want. |
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dralion
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| 11 Sep 2014 05:51 PM |
"Im crying right now...."
Exactly why you shouldn't be here |
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| 11 Sep 2014 05:52 PM |
if you can't handle criticism, don't create content not everyone is going to like the things you make |
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| 11 Sep 2014 05:52 PM |
PS - Freedom of speech means that you have the right to speak out against the government, not that you can say whatever you want to anybody without getting consequences
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| 11 Sep 2014 05:53 PM |
| What the government is obama we cant say anything bad about him or he will punish us |
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| 11 Sep 2014 05:53 PM |
| Bad! 0/10. I've seen it everywhere. It's just a zombie popping out of a grave, that's almost everywhere. |
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