panda2344
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| 04 Sep 2014 10:27 PM |
Prologue: RSF defeated RAT at the Battle of Aequor! After RAT attempted to raid the islands with ships, the RSF naval power came into the spotlight! Will thing go as normal from now on?
4:00 PM. At Eagle Harbor, the task force "fruity" returns to their berths. The harbor welcomes them back, for their victory over RAT's navy. They plan to commission a new ship at 6:00 PM, in honor of OrangeHokage and as a thanks for defeating RAT's navy. The Orange Class Battleship will include 5 ships, each carrying 90,000 tons. The armament will be included as follows: 5 16 inch guns, 2 stern, 3 bow, 20 6 Inch Guns as secondaries, 130 anti-air guns, and 2 fighters with catapults and a seaplane crane.
5:00 PM. They arrive at the ship launching area, fruitbox arrives also, and the whole harbor greets him and his fellow HR's from Aequor. The ship, so nice and tall, is so amazing that fruitbox, who was supposed to smash the bottle onto the bow, gives OrangeHokage the bottle, since it is his ship.
6:00 PM. The ceremony starts. Fruitbox gives out his long, 20 minute speech to the crowd, and at 6:30 PM, Orange smashes the bottle on the ship's bow, and the ship slides into the Eagle Harbor water.
7:30 PM. Everything seems normal, but then, enemy planes are detected at 20 miles off Eagle Island. The island prepares for a air raid. Anti-air guns are ready, jet fighters are launched, and civilians go under into air raid shelters. Looks like this will be one hell-filled night.
To be continued.. |
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Libanxsm
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| 05 Sep 2014 04:36 AM |
This isn't even
Cool
If you're going to make a story, make it more interesing |
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rose9498
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| 05 Sep 2014 08:51 AM |
| Uhmmm... Personally, I'd say it's not the best story I've read. I don't think you should continue them. It just, well, was bad... |
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Misori
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rose9498
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| 05 Sep 2014 10:09 AM |
| Learn to writee! :D https://docs.google.com/document/d/1OwhFE0MKNGrAmICkaYdXg36xsf23lUCj6KUhMSUTkDg/edit# |
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happo900
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| 05 Sep 2014 01:01 PM |
| You telling me a story? or this is a boredom city ticket? |
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| 05 Sep 2014 01:04 PM |
these stories are worthless, pointless, and not even entertaining
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zelixion
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zelixion
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| 05 Sep 2014 01:12 PM |
| jk lol don't get ur hopes high |
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Misori
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| 05 Sep 2014 01:39 PM |
that boat would be the laggiest thing in the world
lol lick the magic toad |
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Libanxsm
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| 05 Sep 2014 01:58 PM |
Rose gtfo u hav like 5 posts I'm pretty sure you'd never be able to gather enough brain cells to write a story better than this one
(Btw, I had like 4k posts on luvios, I changed my username back to my old one a boom, lost all my posts) |
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Inysa
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| 05 Sep 2014 02:01 PM |
| Why is this idiot still making these. |
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