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| 04 Sep 2014 09:02 PM |
This is my 8th grade essay about the Civil War. Please comment constructive criticism.
The most peaceful and effective approach to the Civil war would have been to help the southerners recuperate from the war, by just leaving the south with charred land and dead bodies was not the best way for the north to leave the south even if they disagreed. The north decided instead to create the inability for any man participating in the Civil war on the Side of the South to not be able to vote, along with voiding all bonds and transactions made to the government. This act left people broke and without the ability to vote for their own president. To top it all off, brothers, sons, father, friends and family were killed fighting in the war. Southerners were left without hope, without family, and without money. If the North had spent time and money into helping the south recuperate, Lincoln might not have died the way he did. Even if the slaves were gone; and the bonds hadn’t been invalid they would have the money to pay for workers to work with a wage. In all, I believe that the reunification could’ve been less harsh on the south, because they did lose everything they owned. |
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| 04 Sep 2014 09:04 PM |
lol middle schooler
"Alright, hold tight, I'm a highway star" - AhhTree, tree dayer |
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| 04 Sep 2014 09:05 PM |
| I take high school classes, but not history. I take High school Spanish, math and science but not history. |
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| 04 Sep 2014 09:13 PM |
| I need comments about this, I have a 120% and I don't want to lose it. |
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| 04 Sep 2014 09:16 PM |
| Anything I can do to fix it? |
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| 04 Sep 2014 09:17 PM |
you think that is alot eh?
want my world war two essay i wrote in 30 min?
[ HUE INTENSIFIES ] |
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| 04 Sep 2014 09:20 PM |
| No, I know its not a lot. For some reason I was not able to figure out how the reunification could have been smoother. I've written many essays that are multiple pages under 30 minutes. |
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Lumez
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| 04 Sep 2014 09:21 PM |
lol kid scrub noob here it sucks get out newbag |
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AX360
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| 04 Sep 2014 09:23 PM |
| 1 paragraph is not an essay. |
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| 04 Sep 2014 09:27 PM |
| I know its technically not an essay, but thats what my teacher said it was. I was asking for comments on how to improve it. This is why i dislike OT sometimes -.- |
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| 04 Sep 2014 09:36 PM |
^
If anything, you'd get the best results from ATR. They're helpful. |
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