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Re: The Hunger Games-The Duncan Adams Story Chapter 1READ NOTES

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Duncan2244 is not online. Duncan2244
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28 Aug 2014 08:03 PM

NOTICE TO PanemTM MEMBERS: I am sorry for the 4th reposting, this time I promise that most the mistakes are taken cared of and the story is more accurate to the hunger games universe. I will not make this mistake for future chapters!

NOTICE TO FORUM MODERATORS: This story does have romance, but nothing too serious that will break the rules of ROBLOX, so please know that if a moderator does come across this story, I am not trying to break the rules of ROBLOX, but just to post the story to the members of my group "PanemTM" can read. Thank You.

NOTICE TO ALL WHO READ: This story was posted on the Fan Fiction website by me, I am just posting it here so the people from my group "PanemTM" can read, no meaning of doing stories here since I don't find it a good tool. Thank You.

THIS STORY WAS MEANT FOR THE FAN FICTION WEBSITE.



EDIT NOTES: I am going to edit for mistakes, and to make it more accurate to the hunger games as possible. Last edit: 8/28/14


Authors' Note: New story I am going to write. Please note my grammar and writing is not the best and I am just an armature writer. I will try to keep this story to as accurate to the hunger games universe as possible. I will be open to suggestions how to make my story better or any story ideas. Also if you have seen me post this story before, I have decided to re write it with better ideas. Also I write with a lot of numbers as it is easier for me to do so. Also I am not the best with intros, so it may not be as exciting as my other planned chapters. Some stuff from the hunger games books/movies will appear. So Enjoy! :D

Content Rating: T for the following: Violence: It's a hunger games story so of course there is going to be violence. Romance: Not much as I really don't write as much in this genre, so nothing too serious to worry about.

Disclaimer: Everything shown in this story belongs to their respective owners and no profit is being made from this story

The Hunger Games: The Duncan Adams Story

Duncan's POV

Chapter 1: Intro.

Time: 1 day before the reaping.

Setting: District 3, rainy weather, chilly.

The bell has just rung and soon everyone had started scrambling to get out of the school like chickens running from a wolf. Crowded and squished by everyone, I eventually made it out of the school hall ways and once I was out, I let out a huge breath. Relieved I was no longer squished I took a few breaths and straightened my glasses and began walking. School had gotten out early today for only one reason…the reaping for the annual hunger was tomorrow. Here in District 3, we take school very seriously and the reaping is the only time we get out of school early unless told otherwise. There are 2 schools in the District 3, 1 for the poor and average citizens and the other for the really rich citizens of District 3. The schools have the same schedules, just the rich school is better looking, and stuff my school can only dream of getting like bigger class rooms, nicer classrooms, better cooks, and better teachers. Plus it costs a lot to go there as for my school, we pay very little.

If you are like me and most District 3 citizens, you hate the reaping and the games. Every year we would have to watch 24 teenagers get sent against their will by the capitol to go into a televised arena where they would all fight to the death until only 1 person remains alive. This year would be the 11th games. District 3 hated the games not only because of the cruelty the capitol did with these games, but also because no one from our District has won the games. We came close in the 1st, 3rd, 5th, 8th, and 10th games, but the tributes ended up dead.

Unfortunately for me, the odds are never in my favor as all my siblings have been reaped. My 2 brothers, Charlie and Steven and my Sister Gwen had all put up a good fight though. Well my sister did anyways. The first sibling of mine to go into the games was the 2nd oldest of our family, Charlie. Charlie was in the 6th games. He was 14 .He got killed on the first day after the District 2 female threw an axe that had hit his head while he was running to get a mace. He killed the District 9 Male after he threw a small rock from his pocket that hit the ground by his plate, causing the mines to go off and end that tribute's life. My second sibling to go into the games was my oldest brother and sibling Steven. He went into the 7th games and was 18 at the time. He died the first night after the District 1 female seduced him and when he was day dreaming about the promises she made to him, she snapped his neck which killed him. He killed the District 3 female after grabbing her and snapping her neck during the bloodbath, he killed the District 2 male after a deadly spear fight during the blood bath, and he killed the District 7 male which was a small 13 year old after he snuck up behind him and grabbed his head and pinning his body to the ground in which he put the boys head in a steam of water near by. He kept it there until he died of suffocation. My final sibling and only sister Gwen would make it too the final 4, only to die from a poison apple that a sponsor gave her. The sponsor of course would be hung for that just hours later after the peace keepers found out. She was 16 years old and killed no one. The current victors of the last 10 games I will list. I will list it in order from the first victor to the recent victor.

The list: Male of District 2, Female of District 11, Female of District 2, Male of District 9, Female of District 7, Female of District 10, Female of District 1, Male of District 8, District 2 male, District 4 Female.

Yep, all career districts and 5 outlying districts claimed victory. I was a bit surprised that District 8 won, but the boy from that district made good traps that helped play to his advantage. Ever since my sister died in the games, I sold my home to have enough money to go to school and support myself. My parents really weren't the greatest either, after Charlie got reaped, they just left my family to fend for ourselves. My parents would move to District 2 to train to become peace keepers. I never saw them after that so they may have been stationed somewhere outside of District 3. Since I've been homeless I have had to live in the parks and trees around the area. About 50% of District 3's citizens are poor and about 27% are of them are homeless. How I fend is off my house money, a emergency stash that my family saved for years, and the money that I received from that sponsor that killed my sister (which was quite a lot). I still do temporary jobs for the locals around the district so I could still get coins to support myself.


Well on my way to the area that I live at, I went into this small restaurant to get me some soup as my dinner for tonight. After I got my soup I began walking when I ran into Julie, my girlfriend. Julie and I met at my school when we were assigned to do a project together. We really did not like each other that much, but over time we soon got to know each other and become really close. Julie is about 5 foot 4 inches, has long brown hair, blue eyes, and a face that makes my heart melt into mush every time I see her. Her voice sounds like a soft and sweet song that you cant stop listening to and enjoy hearing. Her dad really won't approve of me since he wants her to marry his best friend's son, Jackson. Jackson is 15 years old, one year older than Julie and I. He is about 6 feet tall, has black hair and a shaggy like hair style, and really huge muscles with a big tattoo of a dragon on his right arm. Looking into his intimidating eyes is like looking into the eyes of the devil himself. I am the opposite of him in terms of being buff, but I am close to his height. I am 5 foot, 6 inches, have black hair in the style of a front spike, wear glasses, and the average in strength and running, but I am extremely smart, even smarter than the kids at the school where the rich students attend.

Anyways when I ran into Julie, she greeted me and I greeted back. She soon said "So you excited for the reaping tomorrow?" I replied back "Just as excited as a peace keeper giving me whip lashes on the neck". Julie chuckled and put her arm around my shoulder and said "Now seriously, are you excited for the reaping" I sighed and said "Well it has been a terrible time of year for me since the loss of my siblings, especially my sister" "I will be a terrible reminder on how unlucky my family is". We began walking and Julie said "I am sorry about that, didn't mean to bring up any bad memories" she said a bit sorrowfully. I put my arm around her shoulder and said "Its fine, I know you mean no harm, I still did not lose everything I care about" Julie smiled and gave a small chuckle. Just then rain began pouring hard on us. We quickly ran to a big tree in a nearby park. The tree was very large and offered good cover from the rain.

After we sat down on the grass, I took off my beanie and pulled out a blanket from my backpack to cover us. We than leaned back on the tree stump behind us. Julie and I just began talking about random things until she got serious and started talking about the reaping. "Look Duncan, I am frightened" "What if one of us gets reaped?" "We both know I can't fight and don't have good survival skills and you know that you are more brains than you are you are brawn" she said. When I was about to reply she said "But…what if we both get…reaped?" Julie said nervously. I looked at Julie with a sad and I don't know look. This question had hit my heart like a boat crashing into something hard, than sinking down fast and hard to the bottom of the ocean. I pulled her by me and she laid her head on my shoulder when I said "Julie don't worry, our chances of getting reaped are low and I promise that nothing will happen to us" Julie looked at me straight into my eyes, her blue eyes just sparkling and making it hard to say something. As she looked at me, she said "Duncan I don't want anything to happen to us, please promise me that everything will be alright, please" she said in a soft, but sad voice. Hearing her say that left me for words, but I said to her "Don't worry Julie I promise that nothing will happen". She would then lean against me and lay her head on my lap and fall a sleep as I petted her head and kept saying to myself in a concerned tone "I promise nothing will happen".

It was about 7PM when I saw my watch; I gently woke Julie up and told her that she should be getting home and that I would walk her home. It was still raining badly, so I put my beanie on, gave Julie my blanket to keep her warm and used my jacket as a cover from the rain for both of us. The walk to her house was alright except for the rain pouring bad on us. Julie just stayed close to me as we held hands while walking. It was about 7:15 PM when we got to her house, she lived in in an average neighborhood, where many of the people that are not poor or not that rich reside. I walked her to her patio, right by her house door. "Thanks for everything Duncan" See you tomorrow" she said in a calm and soft voice. She then hugged me and kissed me on my cheek and unlocked her door with her key and went inside her house. I was a bit star struck at what happened first, only able to blush and smile as Julie never did that before. After about 5 minutes of dazing off into space and thinking about what just happened I put on my jacket, covered myself with my blanket and headed towards the place I sleep at. I went to the park and there was this small formation of rocks over a floor of woodchips, forming a small cave made out of a pile on big rocks. I removed the small rock to the opening of the little cave and crawled inside.

Inside was a huge rug I bought to go over the woods chips on the floor, that small rock I use to block the opening, a solar panel lantern, a small battery powered lantern,my blankets and pillows, a teddy bear my sister made me, an ice box to keep my food in, and a small box with my clothing. I have a sweater, a blue buttoned shirt, and some kaki pants alone with socks and black dress shoes that I would wear for the reaping. I wash my clothes at my sister's old violin teacher's house. Susan was the woman's name. After Gwen died, she would help check on me and become close to me. She was a dark skinned woman (not trying to be racist, just find it offending calling them "black"), about 5 foot 8 inches, a bit chubby, and black hair that she always wore in a pony tail. Her 4 sons and husband live with her, but I don't see them that much as they live in the rich side of District 3. Anyways after getting my clothes off and changing into my pajamas, I ate my soup I got and grabbed my teddy bear and went to lay down to sleep. As I lied down, I kept thinking about the reaping, my heart was beating "BUMP" "BUMP" 'BUMP" at a fast rate, like a train going as the speed of light. I was scared out of my mind and nervous as heck wondering if Julie or I got reaped or both of us. I would continue to look at the small rock roof above me and think all night long about the reaping. The fear was showing on my face pretty well as I was more pale than a rock. I kept thinking about it, about Julie, about us. I was more concerned about Julie than I was for me. I kept thinking about Julie and if I would volunteer to save her or just let her face death; this was the thing about the games that I hated. The odds are not in our favor and will never be in our favor…

End of chapter.

So what did you think about the first chapter? How far will Duncan go to protect Julie from being in the games? 2nd chapter coming soon (Hopefully by Friday since I have a lot of free time to write). Please review and tell me what you think! :D Also sorry if that was not a good intro.
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MrVincent is not online. MrVincent
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28 Aug 2014 08:37 PM
I dont think the "apology letter / introduction" should take more than 3 paragraphs.

Yours is like, 10.

And if it's for a fanfic site, why are you posting it here?

"Selling my account for your soul and 99.99$!"
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TacosFurLief is not online. TacosFurLief
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28 Aug 2014 08:42 PM
And why are you posting something rude to someone who tried their best on a story?
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28 Aug 2014 08:47 PM
Lol I know right.
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MrVincent is not online. MrVincent
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28 Aug 2014 08:51 PM
Wasn't trying to be rude, but oh well.
I guess you don't see the cheesiness of the story.

Bet you haven't even read the story yet before coming in on your horse and defending him like a white knight and his horse.


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TheLegoGamerDude1 is not online. TheLegoGamerDude1
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28 Aug 2014 08:54 PM
@tacos

He posted this on a public forum
Full of writers
Some of which could be professionals

Posting it anywhere public will open it up for criticism
Posting it here, will open it up for alot of criticism


"I sell Role-play, and Role-play accessories"
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Duncan2244 is not online. Duncan2244
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28 Aug 2014 09:50 PM
The reason I posted it here was for the members of my group "PanemTM". That is the one and only reason why I am posting it here. I find the forums to be a bad tool for actually trying to write a story.
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Duncan2244 is not online. Duncan2244
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28 Aug 2014 09:51 PM
Also I am a beginner writer, so if you do have an issue with this story, no need to waste your time reading this.
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WiFiKing42 is not online. WiFiKing42
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28 Aug 2014 09:54 PM
Without reading the first part, I can already tell you're a beginner.
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TheLegoGamerDude1 is not online. TheLegoGamerDude1
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28 Aug 2014 09:56 PM
Not really any kind of problem
Just constructive criticism


"I sell Role-play, and Role-play accessories"
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Duncan2244 is not online. Duncan2244
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28 Aug 2014 10:00 PM
I know its constructive criticism and I really don't get offended if you do insult me or flam or whatever. Just to be clear the way I write the paragraphs is just my style of writing and plus my knowledge with writing is not as great as compared to others. You cant expect me to turn into an expert author overnight. No more need to comment here, just let this thread slowly fade away and be forgotten by everyone but my group :]
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WiFiKing42 is not online. WiFiKing42
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28 Aug 2014 10:29 PM
No one said anything about you changing overnight.
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Duncan2244 is not online. Duncan2244
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28 Aug 2014 10:42 PM
Heh, just came out of my mouth.
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28 Aug 2014 10:48 PM
I didn't know you say what you type
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Duncan2244 is not online. Duncan2244
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28 Aug 2014 11:02 PM
Sometimes things just come out like that :P Well you can stop replying to this thread now, I just want this thread to be forgotten among everyone but my group members and friends c:
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28 Aug 2014 11:05 PM
You can't tell me what to do
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Duncan2244 is not online. Duncan2244
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29 Aug 2014 05:23 PM
Irritating fella aren't you? :3
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29 Aug 2014 05:33 PM
Omg Duncan bae
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