Grifey
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| 23 Aug 2014 09:27 AM |
I have decided to make a new story every week for RSF featuring RSF members! If you have any ideas for a plot or a plot twist, PM me! This may turn into a series!
As the sun rose over the Aequor Islands..... There was blood shed everywhere and torn pieces of uniform from RAT and the Tri Clan... There had been a massive battle determining the war last night. Fruitbox was standing in his office overlooking the Aequor islands in shock, the whole place had been destroyed...There were torn Triclan flags a long with RAT flags. A private was crawling up the sandy shore trying to get to base. He got to the top then peeked over. There was a massive wreckage. He looked around at all the RSF soldiers. Dead.
RAT had won.
The little private, nicknamed "Caramel" was shivering as he stood up. A pistol in his hand. Suddenly 2 RSF helicopters appeared and a bunch of soldiers jumped out, amongst them was Colonel Grifey and Admiral Gege, they landed and the soldier approached Grifey and Gege. They were in an important conversation, as soon as they saw him they rushed to him and helped him up. "We-We - We were largely outnumbered" Caramel said "T-t-they came and e-ended us so quickly...They had many people..." He went on "b-but the worst part....amongst the Frostarians...was Field Admiral Valkeri" Grifey and Gege's eyes enlarged as Caramel told them how Valkeri had betrayed them...
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Crediton
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Grifey
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| 23 Aug 2014 09:30 AM |
| Ye! this will be a weekly series! :D |
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Celvatis
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Grifey
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| 23 Aug 2014 10:11 AM |
| Thanks, PM me ideas from what should happen in next one. |
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| 23 Aug 2014 10:12 AM |
o.e
notice me senpai ༼ つ ◕_◕ ༽つ |
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Misori
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| 23 Aug 2014 11:12 AM |
| Valkeri whyyyyyyyy?!?!? :P |
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DanSkillz
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roadxxxx
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| 23 Aug 2014 11:59 AM |
Then a goat appears and runs everybody down.
The End |
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| 23 Aug 2014 12:01 PM |
You should write a book. c:
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| 23 Aug 2014 12:06 PM |
Its preety good but well its kinda missing something im not sure what... I think its like the immediate jumps like after the sentence 'RAT had won' it immediatelly jumps to 'The little private, nicknamed "Caramel"... Do you understand? But hey its preety good.I don't think a lot of groups write stories. btw will this be a series like chapter 1 on the 1st week and the chapter 2 on the next? Good luck on your novel/s Grifey! |
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Grifey
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| 23 Aug 2014 08:11 PM |
| I may end up just writing 1 a day. |
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Inysa
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| 23 Aug 2014 08:14 PM |
No.
Stop.
You write at a third grade level. |
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panda2344
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MiDNiTED
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| 24 Aug 2014 07:43 PM |
This is quite fascinating. In fact, it is quite entertaining to read. Nice job.
What's wrong scared of MiDNiTE? | Remember the name MiDNiTED... |
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