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| 22 Aug 2014 05:50 AM |
(Intro) See that man? It's the guy who got the clothes from the thrift shop Must've got a bad deal cuz that just looks...just....man that's ugly Time to give him a heads up...
(Verse/M4) What can i say, that just ain't good taste. Lookin at this crap that looks like piss and body waste. Oh my lorde this is all so disgusting. Someone yell "granada" cuz this person's missed something. This fool looks so trashy like he lives in a dumpster. Moment i saw him in the club i knocked him six feet under. Take them clothes to the dump and make sure you get it cremated. Then again i saw his woman, looks like she made it. I heard of color schemes but what i see is just messed up. Came across a community of recalled clothes people dressed up. This is a nightmare, someone please awaken me. Hopefully it's sugar and this is where it's taken me. Big bucks receivin phone calls, say about a hundred. Requests needed to be handed out so it won't get hunted. If this was Red Dawn, i would've took em out the picture by now. Need lectures on what to really do, someone teach em now.
(Hook) Such trash, i swear i'm gonna vomit. Worse than seein' grenades, now i'm seein' comets. My eyes is blind and can't bear to look. Get rid of that, so ratchet i just shook. (x2) Such trash (x7) I can't believe my eyes
(Verse/Master) What can I say? You look like a dumpster wearing all that trash Walking out the house with no lotion on,thats called white ash, You-You-You saying you swag for days, Haha,Or Swag for danes Oh My god,What is wrong with them? Wearing all that pink in the P.M. Answer ya PM Before you thinking about going to the club don't forget you're babys you gotta find somewhere to put them, Uh, I don't get why the walking out of there house wearing such trash, Then you point them out they ready to throw them hands in a flash, Like why are you mad? For what? You're the ones that crazy If I didn't care about how I like that would never phase me, Always saying stuff about people what are you going through? Mad because you can't acheive the dreams you want to? By the way, At the end of the day, You're such trash, They tryna smash, OMG,What do they have on? You-You need to take it take it off RERE. Let's get it!
(Hook) Such trash, i swear i'm gonna vomit. Worse than seein' grenades, now i'm seein' comets. My eyes is blind and can't bear to look. Get rid of that, so ratchet i just shook. (x2) Such trash (x7) I can't believe my eyes |
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Indiella
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| 22 Aug 2014 08:57 AM |
I don't really like the message of the song because it's telling people not to wear what they want to wear...I mean don't get me wrong, I don't condone girls wearing slvtty outfits, but *sadly* it's what they want to wear. The hook I felt was very simple and as if not much effort was put into it. Although, the length of the song was perfect. Not too short, not too long.
M4, I rate your verse a 4/10 because the rhymes were very simple, the grammar wasn't up to par, and the verse made sense but it really didn't. The first two lines are...interesting and I feel like you just said the second line to make it rhyme with the first.
As for Master, it wasn't your best. Like I said for M4, the grammar could use some fixing and the rhymes were simple, as well. There's an area in your verse where you start to talk about how that person is jealous/angry/what have you and it doesn't really fit the message of the song. Overall, I give yours a 5.8/10.
Keep practicing guys!
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| 22 Aug 2014 09:00 AM |
| what the hell did i just read |
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Wobull
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| 22 Aug 2014 11:46 AM |
if it had me it woulda been decent but i do agree both verses were below decent |
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| 22 Aug 2014 03:13 PM |
| :P not the first time I was told this anyway. That's why I'm trying to get better. |
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Zane0697
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drakeh
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| 22 Aug 2014 05:57 PM |
| No, Drake, it's 'such trash' |
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drakeh
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calirolls
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| 22 Aug 2014 07:34 PM |
oh my god this is cringe worthy
~5 Nights At ATR : http://web.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=143624865#143625456 ~ |
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calirolls
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| 22 Aug 2014 07:51 PM |
my main complaint is that it's stereotypical rich men sweg rap that insults the lower classes of society and still bragging about riches and such
so there
i laid down my thoughts
~5 Nights At ATR : http://web.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=143624865#143625456 ~ |
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| 22 Aug 2014 07:52 PM |
| Alright alright I get the point jeez |
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Vexull
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| 22 Aug 2014 09:34 PM |
swag on the floor jim morisson is a door
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