awSOM518
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| 22 Aug 2014 02:45 PM |
In my mind, where I am so far with this place is a steaming pile of crap and there I will be adding A LOT more detail, CFrame etc. So far this is what I got.
What do you think?
http://www.roblox.com/Imagination-place?id=173735192 |
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| 22 Aug 2014 02:58 PM |
| I'd say 8/10, needs more detail put into it, BUT great work! ^-^ |
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awSOM518
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| 22 Aug 2014 02:59 PM |
| I agree, I will be putting more detail in later. |
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| 22 Aug 2014 03:35 PM |
looks ok so far
you might want to fix the walkway so that you're not floating above it when you're standing on it |
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awSOM518
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| 22 Aug 2014 03:55 PM |
| Fixed, along with some other stuff. |
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awSOM518
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| 22 Aug 2014 04:07 PM |
| Ok, I will be adding way more detail then. |
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| 22 Aug 2014 05:47 PM |
| Just don't try to overdo yourself on adding detail. |
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awSOM518
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| 22 Aug 2014 08:22 PM |
| Yeah its not even close to done. But its there. |
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| 22 Aug 2014 08:34 PM |
There is a lot of empty space at the beginning of the map, and I don't really understand the reason for the long walk unless you will be adding stuff on the sides of it. The tree is a bit fat around the trunk, try slimming it down so that you can give it more flow. The clouds need detail, clouds are not smooth squares, but much more spherical areas. (Don't use spheres/cylinders though).
In the end, I'd think the idea is a good one, but the execution needs work. It's still a fairly new place and needs more than 30 minutes if you want it to look presentable.
The music is a nice touch.
3/10. |
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awSOM518
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| 22 Aug 2014 08:37 PM |
| The tree is fat because its supposed to be representing a dream. Things won't really make sense. The long walk at the beginning will become more eventful defiantly. And what do you mean about the clouds? |
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| 22 Aug 2014 10:51 PM |
Shape the clouds a bit more. Give them more depth than just squares/rectangles. And about the tree. Curves represent dreams a lot better than straight lines. Make the tree a bit loopy.
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^ That kind of tree looks better than this:
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| 22 Aug 2014 10:52 PM |
| Bad representations, but I hope you get the image. |
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awSOM518
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| 22 Aug 2014 11:08 PM |
I see what you mean about the trees. And the clouds are correctly shaped? They look like regular clouds, they are meshes.
The things with waterfalls aren't supposed to be clouds. |
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