generic image
Processing...
  • Games
  • Catalog
  • Develop
  • Robux
  • Search in Players
  • Search in Games
  • Search in Catalog
  • Search in Groups
  • Search in Library
  • Log In
  • Sign Up
  • Games
  • Catalog
  • Develop
  • Robux
   
ROBLOX Forum » Club Houses » Off Topic
Home Search
 

Re: k here's my story guize

Previous Thread :: Next Thread 
reddanger is not online. reddanger
Joined: 27 May 2009
Total Posts: 38075
21 Aug 2014 03:31 PM
"What do you mean you're quitting?"
"Sorry, don't take it personally, but I've done crazy for long enough, and I need a break."
"Break from what?"
"The fun we have, it's become too much for me to handle, seriously. I can't go around sticking a syringe in people to get them to do what we want anymore."
"But it's fun, why would you want to give it up?"
"Because today I thought about it and felt like I was running around in circles, I mean, just look at us! We go kill whoever we disrespect and make it a game that we always strive to win, but are we really trying to achieve a trophy? No, we're just trying to achieve a few moments of victory, and that's not enough for me anymore."
"All these years and suddenly you're tired of it. I know you will never ever change when you decide on doing something though so I won't bother trying to change your decisions."
"Thanks."
"So what do you plan on doing?"
"Dating a few men, maybe only one, and traveling with him all around The Magic Community, discovering things about each-other, you know, fun that doesn't involve extreme violence."
"You want to get in a relationship? Really?"
"Don't force your one experience crap onto me, I'll figure this out on my own and once I find this man I'll come back to you and the others so we can have a little family reunion, how does that sound?"
"Good luck on trying to find that special man, but if you do, we'll all congratulate you and shower you with compassion; leading up to a delicious dinner along with sweet desserts made by you, the one named Sweettooth for a reason."
"Basically I'll be in the place I belong."
We both laugh.
"That'll be fun," he says.
"Yeah and then we can tell you about what we've done, actually I think I might have to encourage the others to change our usual way of doing things, so we'll all be surprising each-other with what we've done."
"Awesome… so um… thanks for everything. I'm going to go now, since we could accidentally wake up the others and that wouldn't be too polite."
"One last hug?"
"Sure."
We get closer and wrap our arms around each-other, then we let go.
"Hope you have fun with this different direction you're taking in life."
"Same to you and the others, if any of you ever decide on something like this."
"Bye."
"Bye."
He opens the door and closes it behind him.
A few seconds of silence pass by, until a gunshot disrupts it.
I quickly open the door to find him to have fell face forward, with the back of his head missing large chunks of flesh and having a few strands of vibrant violent hair hanging off. Blood then rushes out to bathe his bright pink strands in shiny red, leaving a faint metallic odor to fill my nostrils.
I look to the left, then to the right.
No one's there.
The odor grows stronger and stronger, until, coming up from my stomach, puke spills out of my mouth all over the place, and then I fall over onto his body, locked inside a feeling of nausea, something I can fix, and constant questions of why, leading to stress, and constant tears flowing down my face, the things I have never been able to fix.


it probably won't make sense because this is a random piece of my book but whatever

here you go

tell me what you think :D

;)
Report Abuse
reddanger is not online. reddanger
Joined: 27 May 2009
Total Posts: 38075
21 Aug 2014 03:36 PM
guys pls

;)
Report Abuse
reddanger is not online. reddanger
Joined: 27 May 2009
Total Posts: 38075
21 Aug 2014 03:48 PM
cri

;)
Report Abuse
Baconite is not online. Baconite
Joined: 13 Sep 2010
Total Posts: 12013
21 Aug 2014 03:49 PM
tl'dr
Report Abuse
ctZWNq2K is not online. ctZWNq2K
Joined: 20 Aug 2014
Total Posts: 8
21 Aug 2014 03:50 PM
sorry but tl;dr

though I did skim through it carefully and I quite say, 6/10.

some parts may be confusing.

though definitely a book I'd look at in the library.
Report Abuse
dede97 is not online. dede97
Joined: 20 Oct 2007
Total Posts: 1909
21 Aug 2014 03:50 PM
Fabulous


Do she got the booty? she doooo
Report Abuse
reddanger is not online. reddanger
Joined: 27 May 2009
Total Posts: 38075
21 Aug 2014 03:55 PM
"skim through"

well skimming through is a pretty bad idea on this piece but thanks?

"fabulous"

oh my gosh thank you so much

;)
Report Abuse
Zoonotic is not online. Zoonotic
Joined: 29 Feb 2012
Total Posts: 4736
21 Aug 2014 03:56 PM
i read the first line
i instantly thought:
LIMS PLZ

huex2
Report Abuse
reddanger is not online. reddanger
Joined: 27 May 2009
Total Posts: 38075
21 Aug 2014 04:31 PM
"LIMS PLZ"

what's that

;)
Report Abuse
giftbox24 is not online. giftbox24
Joined: 27 Apr 2008
Total Posts: 20629
21 Aug 2014 04:33 PM
sounds like a good concept
Report Abuse
Walthall1234 is not online. Walthall1234
Joined: 30 Dec 2009
Total Posts: 930
21 Aug 2014 04:35 PM
tl;dr

"I got so excited, I almost kicked myself in the face!"
Report Abuse
emilylacee is not online. emilylacee
Joined: 16 Jan 2009
Total Posts: 22055
21 Aug 2014 04:36 PM
it's good i'd read it
but the dialogue seems a bit too long lol
Report Abuse
reddanger is not online. reddanger
Joined: 27 May 2009
Total Posts: 38075
21 Aug 2014 04:57 PM
"bit too long"

perhaps

;)
Report Abuse
serratus is not online. serratus
Joined: 10 Aug 2014
Total Posts: 1554
21 Aug 2014 04:57 PM
deep
Report Abuse
reddanger is not online. reddanger
Joined: 27 May 2009
Total Posts: 38075
21 Aug 2014 05:27 PM
"deep"

how deep

;)
Report Abuse
Spiteless is not online. Spiteless
Joined: 20 Mar 2008
Total Posts: 11250
21 Aug 2014 05:28 PM
ugly
Report Abuse
reddanger is not online. reddanger
Joined: 27 May 2009
Total Posts: 38075
21 Aug 2014 05:57 PM
"ugly"

in what way

;)
Report Abuse
reddanger is not online. reddanger
Joined: 27 May 2009
Total Posts: 38075
21 Aug 2014 07:04 PM
lll

;)
Report Abuse
reddanger is not online. reddanger
Joined: 27 May 2009
Total Posts: 38075
21 Aug 2014 07:11 PM
666

;)
Report Abuse
Previous Thread :: Next Thread 
Page 1 of 1
 
 
ROBLOX Forum » Club Houses » Off Topic
   
 
   
  • About Us
  • Jobs
  • Blog
  • Parents
  • Help
  • Terms
  • Privacy

©2017 Roblox Corporation. Roblox, the Roblox logo, Robux, Bloxy, and Powering Imagination are among our registered and unregistered trademarks in the U.S. and other countries.



Progress
Starting Roblox...
Connecting to Players...
R R

Roblox is now loading. Get ready to play!

R R

You're moments away from getting into the game!

Click here for help

Check Remember my choice and click Launch Application in the dialog box above to join games faster in the future!

Gameplay sponsored by:
Loading 0% - Starting game...
Get more with Builders Club! Join Builders Club
Choose Your Avatar
I have an account
generic image