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SassyPriest is not online. SassyPriest
Joined: 22 Jul 2009
Total Posts: 11633
07 Jul 2014 04:42 PM
Chapter 1.

AN: Special fangz (get it, coz Im goffik) 2 my gf (ew not in that way) raven, bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da story and spelling. U rok! Justin ur da luv of my deprzzing life u rok 2! MCR ROX!

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Hi my name is Ebony Dark’ness Dementia Raven Way and I have long ebony black hair (that’s how I got my name) with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back and icy blue eyes like limpid tears and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (AN: if u don’t know who she is get da hell out of here!). I’m not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he’s a major f***ing hottie. I’m a vampire but my teeth are straight and white. I have pale white skin. I’m also a witch, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England where I’m in the seventh year (I’m seventeen). I’m a goth (in case you couldn’t tell) and I wear mostly black. I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there. For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots. I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow. I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining so there was no sun, which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them.

“Hey Ebony!” shouted a voice. I looked up. It was…. Draco Malfoy!

“What’s up Draco?” I asked.

“Nothing.” he said shyly.

But then, I heard my friends call me and I had to go away.

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AN: IS it good? PLZ tell me fangz!
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SassyPriest is not online. SassyPriest
Joined: 22 Jul 2009
Total Posts: 11633
07 Jul 2014 04:44 PM
Chapter 2.

AN: Fangz 2 bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da chapta! BTW preps stop flaming ma story ok!

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The next day I woke up in my bedroom. It was snowing and raining again. I opened the door of my coffin and drank some blood from a bottle I had. My coffin was black ebony and inside it was hot pink velvet with black lace on the ends. I got out of my coffin and took of my giant MCR t-shirt which I used for pajamas. Instead, I put on a black leather dress, a pentagram necklace, combat boots and black fishnets on. I put on four pairs of earrings in my pierced ears, and put my hair in a kind of messy bun.

My friend, Willow (AN: Raven dis is u!) woke up then and grinned at me. She flipped her long waist-length raven black hair with pink streaks and opened her forest-green eyes. She put on her Marilyn Manson t-shirt with a black mini, fishnets and pointy high-heeled boots. We put on our makeup (black lipstick white foundation and black eyeliner.)

“OMFG, I saw you talking to Draco Malfoy yesterday!” she said excitedly.

“Yeah? So?” I said, blushing.

“Do you like Draco?” she asked as we went out of the Slytherin common room and into the Great Hall.

“No I so f***ing don’t!” I shouted.

“Yeah right!” she exclaimed. Just then, Draco walked up to me.

“Hi.” he said.

“Hi.” I replied flirtily.

“Guess what.” he said.

“What?” I asked.

“Well, Good Charlotte are having a concert in Hogsmeade.” he told me.

“Oh. My. F***ing. God!” I screamed. I love GC. They are my favorite band, besides MCR.

“Well…. do you want to go with me?” he asked.

I gasped.
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PokemonEevee is online. PokemonEevee
Joined: 01 Aug 2009
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07 Jul 2014 04:44 PM
`I’m not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he’s a major f***ing hottie.`

put this on my gravestone
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SassyPriest is not online. SassyPriest
Joined: 22 Jul 2009
Total Posts: 11633
07 Jul 2014 04:47 PM
sorry for making this i just really want people to see how amazing my immortal is
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Starlightprincess is not online. Starlightprincess
Joined: 09 Jan 2008
Total Posts: 16703
07 Jul 2014 04:54 PM
My immortal is one of the worst fanfictions out there to the point it has become so good





This isn't 2007
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Tharles is not online. Tharles
Joined: 20 Dec 2012
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07 Jul 2014 04:55 PM
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SassyPriest is not online. SassyPriest
Joined: 22 Jul 2009
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07 Jul 2014 04:56 PM
i would post chapter 3 but somethings bad in it i cant find

ive read it like 4 times and still cant see what keeps on getting censored omg
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SassyPriest is not online. SassyPriest
Joined: 22 Jul 2009
Total Posts: 11633
07 Jul 2014 04:56 PM
"0/10 terrible copy of dnade's infurno"
except for the fact that my immortal was made in 2006 haha
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Tharles is not online. Tharles
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07 Jul 2014 04:57 PM
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drpece231 is not online. drpece231
Joined: 04 Aug 2011
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07 Jul 2014 04:57 PM
11/10 made me cri in its beauty
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SassyPriest is not online. SassyPriest
Joined: 22 Jul 2009
Total Posts: 11633
07 Jul 2014 04:58 PM
"XD dnade's infurno was writ in 1997"
no!!!!



ALSO I CANT FIND WHATS WRONG WITH CHAPTER 3 OMG I WANT 2 POST IT
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SassyPriest is not online. SassyPriest
Joined: 22 Jul 2009
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07 Jul 2014 04:59 PM
oh cool i found out what was bad about it

Chapter 3.

AN: STOP FLAMMING DA STORY PREPZ OK! odderwize fangs 2 da goffik ppl 4 da good reveiws! FANGS AGEN RAVEN! oh yeah, BTW I don’t own dis or da lyrics 4 Good Chralotte.

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On the night of the concert I put on my black lace-up boots with high heels. Underneath them were ripped red fishnets. Then I put on a black leather minidress with all this corset stuff on the back and front. I put on matching fishnet on my arms. I straightened my hair and made it look all spiky. I felt a little depressed then, so I slit one of my wrists. I read a depressing book while I waited for it to stop bleeding and I listened to some GC. I painted my nails black and put on TONS of black eyeliner. Then I put on some black lipstick. I didn’t put on foundation because I was pale anyway. I drank some human blood so I was ready to go to the concert.

I went outside. Draco was waiting there in front of his flying car. He was wearing a Simple Plan t-shirt (they would play at the show too), baggy black skater pants, black nail polish and a little eyeliner (AN: A lot fo kewl boiz wer it ok!).

“Hi Draco!” I said in a depressed voice.

“Hi Ebony.” he said back. We walked into his flying black Mercedes-Benz (the license plate said 666) and flew to the place with the concert. On the way we listened excitedly to Good Charlotte and Marilyn Manson. We both smoked cigaretes and dr**s. When we got there, we both hopped out of the car. We went to the mosh pit at the front of the stage and jumped up and down as we listened to Good Charlotte.

“You come in cold, you're covered in blood
They're all so happy you've arrived
The doctor cuts your cord, hands you to your mom
She sets you free into this life.” sang Joel (I don’t own da lyrics 2 dat song).

“Joel is so f**ing hot.” I said to Draco, pointing to him as he sung, filling the club with his amazing voice.

Suddenly Draco looked sad.

“What’s wrong?” I asked as we moshed to the music. Then I caught on.

“Hey, it’s ok I don’t like him better than YOU!” I said.

“Really?” asked Draco sensitively and he put his arm around me all protective.

“Really.” I said. “Besides I don’t even know Joel and he’s going out with Hilary f**king Duff. I f**king hate that little b**ch.” I said disgustedly, thinking of her ugly blonde face.

The night went on really well, and I had a great time. So did Draco. After the concert, we drank some be*r and asked Benji and Joel for their autographs and photos with them. We got GC concert tees. Draco and I crawled back into the Mercedes-Benz, but Draco didn’t go back into Hogwarts, instead he drove the car into……………………… the Forbidden Forest!
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SassyPriest is not online. SassyPriest
Joined: 22 Jul 2009
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07 Jul 2014 05:02 PM
WARNING MAJOR CRINGE IN CHAPTER 4

DO NOT READ IF YOU DONT LIKE CRINGING

Chapter 4.

AN: I sed stup flaming ok ebony’s name is ENOBY nut mary su OK! DRACO IS SOO IN LUV wif her dat he is acting defrent! dey nu eechodder b4 ok!

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“DRACO!” I shouted. “What the f**k do you think you are doing?”

Draco didn’t answer but he stopped the flying car and he walked out of it. I walked out of it too, curiously.

“What the f**king hell?” I asked angrily.

“Ebony?” he asked.

“What?” I snapped.

Draco leaned in extra-close and I looked into his gothic red eyes (he was wearing color contacts) which revealed so much depressing sorrow and evilness and then suddenly I didn’t feel mad anymore.

And then…………… suddenly just as I Draco kissed me passionately. Draco climbed on top of me and we started to make out keenly against a tree. He took of my top and I took of his clothes. I even took of my bra. Then he put his thingie into my you-know-what and we did it for the first time.

“Oh! Oh! Oh! ” I screamed. I was beginning to get an org**m. We started to kiss everywhere and my pale body became all warm. And then….

“WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU DOING YOU MOTHERF***ERS!” (i couldnt stop laughing at this part omg)

It was…………………………………………………….Dumbledore!
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drpece231 is not online. drpece231
Joined: 04 Aug 2011
Total Posts: 36788
07 Jul 2014 05:04 PM
" or da lyrics 4 Good Chralotte."
DANG IT DONT RUIN GOOD CHARLOTTE MY IMMORTAL
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SassyPriest is not online. SassyPriest
Joined: 22 Jul 2009
Total Posts: 11633
07 Jul 2014 05:07 PM
Chapter 5.

AN: STOP flaming! if u flam it menz ur a prep or a posr! Da only reson Dumbledeor swor is coz he had a hedache ok an on tup of dat he wuz mad at dem 4 having s*xx! PS im nut updating umtil I get five good revoiws!

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Dumbledore made and Draco and I follow him. He kept shouting at us angrily.

“You ludacris fools!” he shouted.

I started to cry tears of blood down my pallid face. Draco comforted me. When we went back to the castle Dumbledore took us to Professor Snape and Professor McGonagall who were both looking very angry.

“They were having s***al in***course in the Forbidden Forest!” he yelled in a furious voice.

“Why did you do such a thing, you mediocre dunces?” asked Professor McGonagall.

“How dare you?” demanded Professor Snape.

And then Draco shrieked. “BECAUSE I LOVE HER!”

Everyone was quiet. Dumbledore and Professor McGonagall still looked mad but Professor Snape said. “Fine. Very well. You may go up to your rooms.”

Draco and I went upstairs while the teachers glared at us.

“Are you okay, Ebony?” Draco asked me gently.

“Yeah I guess.” I lied. I went to the girl’s dorm and brushed my teeth and my hair and changed into a low-cut black floor-length dress with red lace all around it and black high heels. When I came out….

Draco was standing in front of the bathroom, and he started to sing ‘I just wanna live’ by Good Charlotte. I was so flattered, even though he wasn’t supposed to be there. We hugged and kissed. After that, we said goodnight and he reluctantly went back into his room.
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FlyingTacoz is not online. FlyingTacoz
Joined: 29 Sep 2013
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07 Jul 2014 05:08 PM
my immortal...
https://www.youtube.com/playlist?list=PLpNAl5zLZSMUJ3g1OQUFcjYXLaLpLcRxI

You're stinking up the subforum
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