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| 03 Jul 2014 01:54 PM |
Instrumental-https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4ToZg08eUFs
Verse 1- Yeah x15 Last night, he was love-struck He tried to forget but his mind was stuck On her body, on her face D@mn, he knew she was an ace He couldn’t stop; he at least had to get to second b@se But by a look around he could see he was in a race And he knew he had to win because he can’t just replace That girl, she @int a ten she a one hundred He got to her first, he didn’t even think, it was so sudden That night, was not special That night, he found out that she is like the (F)ing devil The next day it was so stressful He wanted to leave her, but he didn’t want to break her heart but her heart is metal But after several S3xual Nights He told her how he felt about her and it felt so right Yeah He said Chorus- x4 I Love you But I h@te everything about you And I know you h@te me But you love everything about me
Verse 2- Even thought he said that shet He stayed with him even though he acted like a (D) Yeah They were together for 5 years But he just couldn’t take every night her tears He couldn’t deal with the yelling, and lying and crying But he didn’t want to break her heart but don’t worry her heart is metal After those days he became mental He started not even being gentle He realized what he was doing and he felt like he should d1e He even thought it was a good Idea But it wasn’t But he still decided to take the same fate as his cousin He swallowed the r@t po1son He then heard voices He put a b@g over his face He then took sleeping pills so he could feel no pain Yeah The next day She came And she saw what she made She felt like crying but like I said her heart is metal She found a letter for her Saying Chorus – x4 I Love you But I h@te everything about you And I know you h@te me But you love everything about me
Verse 3- After the funeral she felt terrible She felt like she had no soul no heart no nothing But when she felt like she had to cry she heard something Voices of him telling her to stop crying Yeah he said “Baby stop sobbing Nothing could have stopped me from dy1ng I wasn’t even thinking I just thought I was a monster And sooner or later you would be a goner Even the lord came down to me saying it aint worth it But I said (F) it And I did it anyways and you just gotta accept it Girl, just become a better person and find another man And travel to different places like Italy or Japan Just live life the fullest And make sure that the only thing in your heart will be goodness And don’t worry about me I’ll be always right next to you No matter what happens I’ll be your guardian angel Yeah, always by your side And if anyone tries to hurt I will break their sp1ne Just remember these words And always go towards Your goal And don’t let anyone stop you, not even me I love you just please remember everything About me Except the bad things”
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| 03 Jul 2014 02:02 PM |
| leave a rate and comment please |
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| 03 Jul 2014 03:44 PM |
| 100/10, you rhyme with a story. |
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| 03 Jul 2014 07:32 PM |
| Decent,nice, has a good flow. 8/10 |
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| 03 Jul 2014 10:04 PM |
Easy breezy Your song is fvcking cheesy |
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| 05 Jul 2014 02:59 AM |
| It started off okay then towards the end it didn't even rhyme. Plus it's not true or based on a true story it's a dramatic situation that you created. Yes, ROBLOX is for being creative and coming up with ideas out of the blue but I can't say the same for rap. Rap needs to be true to life, if you didn't have a hard life to rap about, you could do it about something you heard or an event, perhaps even dramatize something not too big. |
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| 05 Jul 2014 12:17 PM |
@TheAmbitiousOne Bro, I'm a story teller, except i make it out of rhymes, my imagination helps me create stories and i put that into a song. I know this story is not based on a true story and it is not a real story, it's just a story i thought of and i thought maybe it could turn out to be a good song. My songs could be true and not true. I've been through hard life, these stories i think of is what kept me alive, and some of my songs, you just got to except. |
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| 05 Jul 2014 12:28 PM |
| Ambitious has a point, why make a rap the writer can't relate to? |
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| 05 Jul 2014 10:10 PM |
| rap/writing can be at a story telling perspective tho |
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| 05 Jul 2014 10:15 PM |
>why make a rap the writer can't relate to?
its not necessarily bad; you can still show sympathy/empathy for it if it happens to be true, and even if not true, you'd still be fast to say "god forbid that actually happens"
and if you'd said "pretty please naruto-san", i would have stopped 5 hours ago |
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