ddmanman1
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| 30 Jun 2014 08:00 AM |
Youngin Im the youngest but far from the dumbest, and (B) say im the funnest, but dont take me for a (B) (N), leave you right across the street from LAPD, Clap yo (A) then give yo (B) my meat, have her screamin like in between the sheets, and if a (N) try to run up on me, ima reach onto the table and grab my heat, cuz I never let that (S) stay far from me what do you take me for a dumby, (N) tryin to sell me bum weed, so I let the choppa spray like aint (S) funny
Chorus/King Hurricane/jk2515/KingHurrican3/kjordan85 You're just not getting it. I barely even know you and you take me for a idiot. Who do you think this is? Judging me cause I'm different. Cause you're just not getting it. I barely even know you and you take me for a idiot. Why should I listen to you? you're just a (W). What you taking me for?
What do you take me for a fool, (N) talkin (s), and (b) saying, OMG LOOK AT HIM HES SO COOL, But I aint the one you finna fool, you think if you let me hit that, yo pockets finna be mad fat, but (b) your wrong, and if your boy friend talk (s), just tell him, click clack bang and hes gone, knock his head of like a boomerang, just a block from where me and my (n) hang, It Aint sht to gang bang so shut yo stupid (a) up, and let me do my thang
Chorus/King Hurricane/jk2515/KingHurrican3/kjordan85 You're just not getting it. I barely even know you and you take me for a idiot. Who do you think this is? Judging me cause I'm different. Cause you're just not getting it. I barely even know you and you take me for a idiot. Why should I listen to you? you're just a (w)h0r3. What you taking me for?
(This was produced by KingHurrican3 and we sampled the beat from Dr. Dre's Explosive) |
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ddmanman1
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| 30 Jun 2014 08:11 AM |
| Rate/Comment (If you comment please be constructive, not put in telling me im horrible if you cant find an area I could improve in) |
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Hazmat44
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| 30 Jun 2014 10:14 AM |
In my opinion, I can't really make a huge decision without hearing an instrumental so that I can know the flow.
Anyway, the theme of the song is a bit overused. I mean, it could still be fresh if you bring something new to the table, but just about everything from the first verse, I can guarantee you a dozen other rappers have said before in their songs. If you want to be original, start employing more catchy similes and metaphors.
That's all I got for now. |
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ddmanman1
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| 30 Jun 2014 01:46 PM |
The beat is Dr Dres Explosive as said above
"(This was produced by KingHurrican3 and we sampled the beat from Dr. Dre's Explosive)" |
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Hazmat44
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| 30 Jun 2014 04:00 PM |
Okay, I sort of like the flow. The delivery leaves something to be desired.
But yeah, as I said earlier, it's just not fresh for the most part if you want to rap about this kind of stuff. Employ more metaphors. |
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| 30 Jun 2014 04:10 PM |
| 0/10. I don't see the point in RO-rapping if it does you no good. |
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Hazmat44
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| 30 Jun 2014 04:12 PM |
| Don't you think that's a BIT of an exaggeratedly bad score for a first timer? |
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ddmanman1
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| 30 Jun 2014 10:08 PM |
| Ro-Rapping serves the purpose of getting my name out there for when I drop my recorded songs, as well as seeing what im good at before I get into actual rap, and I use ro rap to get good lyrically. Plus its fun. |
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ddmanman1
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| 30 Jun 2014 10:49 PM |
| Aight thanks to everyone who gave me feedback was it pretty good though or? |
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