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| 12 Jun 2014 02:04 PM |
I was lazy with the title, yes. -This story was NOT written in a complete serious matter. Only some of it is.- =This is FICTION, so LAY OFF, Bao, if you choose to suddenly come back again.= ~How I'll do this is : I'll make a new post every time the character changes / along the lines of that, anyway~
It was a fine day. The warm afternoon sun peeked through scattered clouds, and birds sang sweetly from the trees. But BilboEffect was nowhere to be seen on this beautiful day. After all, what better use of his time than to play video games the whole day?
~~Oh, yeah, and some will be short. Like this one, for example!~~
"I'm an ACTOR; I'm SUPPOSED to be dramatic!" |
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| 12 Jun 2014 02:18 PM |
-Some of these characters were pre-planned, meaning I wrote them in the rough draft without asking them if they wanted to be in it. Luckily, some of the originally planned characters want to be in it, anyways! Tai was a pre-planned one.-
TaiWolf1234 peered up from his book to look out the window. Rain pattered hard onto the window pane, and thunder shook the ground. Picture-flash lightning seemed to fill up the entire world, bathing it in blinding light for a split second before settling back into the dark night. He took a bite of the cookie in his hand and let his gaze glide back to the page. It was a stormy Sunday night, and Tai was just reading a Bible verse before going to bed. He brushed off the crumbs and closed the book, setting it back onto its shelf. As he stood up to get into bed, TaiWolf1234 found himself staring at his laptop. With a small yawn, he opened it and sat in front of it. "No harm in just a few minutes on the Forums...," he mumbled, before finishing off his snack in one bite.
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| 12 Jun 2014 02:38 PM |
-originally planned character-
Morning dew glittered on the grass, and sunlight filtered through the canopy of leaves. Pickachugirl yawned and opened her eyes. Blinking away sleep, she sat upright in her tree. Her birdly subjects chirped a good-morning to her. She smiled at them, then flew down to the ground. They followed their queen to a wooden table, then perched on the edges, awaiting Pick's orders. "Birds, today's breakfast shall be strawberries and worms!" A chorus of chirps echoed around the clearing, welcoming the idea. "You birds gather the food, and bring them back here when you're done," she said with a beaming smile. "I'll guard the table against cats!" The birds obeyed her majesty, and Pickachugirl sat down on top of her table. She transformed her wings to arms again, then dug in her pocket. She pulled out her tablet and logged onto Roblox....
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| 12 Jun 2014 02:40 PM |
"Needs more Vam." Patience. I'm still doing the introduction. There needs to be a good amount of characters.
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| 12 Jun 2014 02:57 PM |
It was a hot summer day, just about noontime, and Vamking12 was sweltering. He sat down in the shade of a tree and took a bite out of a watermelon slice. "Ptoo!" He spat out the seeds, along with most of his mouthful. "This watermelon is DISGUSTING!" He stood up and tossed the rest of the watermelon over his shoulder. Let the squirrels eat it, or whatever else might be able to tolerate that terrible taste. Jester headed toward his house, tired of the heat. As he entered his home, cool air rushed over him. He shut the door quickly, before a stinkin' tornado formed from the drastic temperature differences. Jester shivered at the sudden coldness. Any colder in here, and it'd be an ice rink! He tossed on a sweatshirt and settled down into his desk chair. Wonder what's going on in Role-Play....
-Happy?-
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| 12 Jun 2014 03:17 PM |
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| 12 Jun 2014 03:24 PM |
| 'I like Ice Tea' was my way of saying that I wanted to be in the story, c; |
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| 12 Jun 2014 03:27 PM |
the way you write is ABYSMAL to be honest no dialogue tags after people talking and pretty much no paragraphs, just a break after every sentence. |
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| 12 Jun 2014 03:31 PM |
"the way you write is ABYSMAL to be honest no dialogue tags after people talking and pretty much no paragraphs, just a break after every sentence." Excuse me, but if you don't like it, please, here's the door. Paragraphs don't work well for me in the forums. As for "dialogue tags," I don't know what you're talking about. And, although my writing style may not be wonderful, at least I'm better than I used to be.
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| 12 Jun 2014 03:41 PM |
-originally planned character, here for comic relief later!-
BaoChu glared at his computer screen. "Role-Play." These brats had never liked him. He'd go so far as to say they despised him, even. Especially back in his noob days. But he'd get even with those awful people of Role-Play. He'd get back at them for hating him. BaoChu cracked his knuckles and clicked on a suspicious-looking OoC thread. Time to minimod....
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| 12 Jun 2014 03:43 PM |
'I CANT ACCEPT CRITICISM SO GO AWAY'
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| 12 Jun 2014 03:45 PM |
@quasar Did you even read the rest of my post, dimwit?!
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| 12 Jun 2014 03:46 PM |
yes. if i hadn't i would be a moron.
you complaining that 'paragraphs dont work well for me' makes absolutely no sense. if you don't know what dialogue tags are, you need to go back to 2nd grade. dialogue tags are where people are like '"lol" Jimmy said'. you just don't have the "Jimmy said" part. |
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| 12 Jun 2014 03:47 PM |
"There's no me" I'll use you, don't worry
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| 12 Jun 2014 03:48 PM |
| Marked. Also who are the planned characters? |
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| 12 Jun 2014 03:49 PM |
You ruined my dreams, Purring.
I was about to say Now for my "When do I come in?" post. |
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| 12 Jun 2014 03:52 PM |
"you complaining that 'paragraphs dont work well for me' makes absolutely no sense. if you don't know what dialogue tags are, you need to go back to 2nd grade. dialogue tags are where people are like '"lol" Jimmy said'. you just don't have the "Jimmy said" part."
What spectacular grammar you have! And that was sarcasm. What right do you have to ridicule me when you're not perfect yourself? As for the dialogue tags, I wasn't sure what you meant. Did it ever occur to you that the education you recieve might not be the same as everyone else? Dialogue tags aren't absolutely necessary to have a good work of literature. I do not feel the need to use dialogue tags much because there is only one main character per post, as of now. I'll use more of them later on, when more people are in the same post together. Back to the paragraphs: I don't like the look of them on the internet. Reading them hurts my eyes. Rather unfortunate.
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| 12 Jun 2014 03:54 PM |
"Also who are the planned characters?" If you mean what are they: Look back to the second post or so. If you mean WHO: If people like this story enough, I might post the original copy, original characters and everything.
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| 12 Jun 2014 04:09 PM |
It needs a sprinkling of Preci in it. Makes everything taste better.
♞ Knights are the Kings of Tomorrow |
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